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- 165 - DZ-130: Positive Character Arcs
Listen to understand how to dramatize a character's internal change.
Welcome to our third entry in our character arc series; and the first where we talk about characters that actually change. And positively, too.
We deep dive into BARBIE, WIDOWS and ALL OF US STRANGERS to work out what makes an arc feel positive -- even if the film itself is heartbreaking. All three films are "positive arcs" that feel wildly different. We speculate whether that's due to the nature of the relationship questions, the use of additive/subtractive rewards; and whether it's do with the connection of the characters needs and their goals.
We further crystalize two tools we've been kicking around:
The relationship question — take a character question ("will she learn to connect?") and pose it as a relationship problem ("will these two grow closer or further apart?"). Additive vs subtractive rewards — We continue buildling on this idea from our Steadfast episodes. Does the story give the character something or take something away? And is that a good or a bad thing?And Mel brings up a third:
Repeating a beat from a different angle so we can trace a character's gradual evolution.We also debate whether Barbie's void scene is a producer's note personified — a director going into the endless nothing to spell the themes out one more time.
All this and more on DZ-130!
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"A relationship question is taking what we think is an internal question about a character and defining it in terms of the relationship. Will Moana grow closer to their village coming back or will they'll grow further apart?" — Stu Willis @ 00:06:09
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:21 – Positive Character Arcs 00:04:47 – › Relationship questions as the key to dramatizing arcs 00:09:00 – Followup Questions 00:12:12 – Zero Context Insights 00:13:01 – BARBIE 00:17:16 – › The void scene with Barbie's creator 00:23:13 – › Immortality versus death as the real choice 00:27:02 – › Debating the lie the character believes 00:44:26 – › Gain versus loss framing the ending 00:52:34 – › Contrast and affinity 00:59:47 – WIDOWS 01:05:47 – › Establishing character patterns before the heist begins 01:09:37 – › Do the widows have values before the story starts 01:18:42 – › Skills and goals tightly tied to character growth 01:21:04 – › Alice's escalating value shift through the sugar daddy scene 01:25:04 – › Linda's grief scene and steadfast versus positive arcs 01:27:12 – › Veronica's arc through Harry's betrayal and revenge 01:39:33 – › Comparing ensemble arcs to OCEAN'S ELEVEN and THE TOWN 01:46:46 – › Relationship questions as emotional engine of ensemble films 01:49:36 – ALL OF US STRANGERS 01:55:38 – › Rebuffing Harry sets up the positive arc 02:02:15 – › Isolation to connectedness as the emotional throughline 02:07:24 – › Contrasting coming out scenes with mom and dad 02:11:26 – › The low point as emotional violence not distance 02:18:48 – › Dream logic and touch as physical arc tracking 02:23:20 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 02:26:20 – › Additive versus subtractive rewards in character arcs 02:29:58 – › Patreon shoutouts and next episode previewFILMS
BARBIE (2023) — (w) Noah Baumbach, Greta Gerwig (d) Greta Gerwig WIDOWS (2018) — (w) Gillian Flynn, Steve Mcqueen (d) Steve Mcqueen ALL OF US STRANGERS (2023) — (w) Andrew Haigh, Taichi Yamada (d) Andrew HaighSCRIPTS
Study the script: BARBIE (2023) — Noah Baumbach, Greta Gerwig Study the script: ALL OF US STRANGERS (2023) — Andrew Haigh, Taichi YamadaSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
What You Don't See: WIDOWS Frames within Frames: ALL OF US STRANGERSLINKS
Read: Colour Theory: DESERT HEARTS Read: Greta Gerwig Explains What Barbie's Bench Scene Really MeansEPISODES IN THE CHARACTER ARCS SERIES
DZ-128: What even is a Character Arc? DZ-129: Steadfast Character Arcs - Agents of Change DZ-130: Positive Character ArcsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The Audience———
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Tue, 01 Sep 2026 - 164 - Teaser: Positive Character ArcsThu, 27 Aug 2026
- 163 - DZ-129: Steadfast Character Arcs - Agents of Change
Listen to learn how to move an audience with a character who never changes.
Do characters need to change for you to have a satisfying story? That's a question we've been asking since, like, episode five of this podcast. And we're finally talking about them - whatever you call 'em: steadfast, resilent, or flat arcs.
To that end, we breakdown MOANA, APOLLO 13, and THE DRESSMAKER to work out what carries a story when a character arc doesn't. If your protagonist isn't going to change, the drama has to come from what they do to everyone else.
We develop some tools that we reckon carry a steadfast story:
doubt and wobble (a character with no doubt isn't steadfast, they're a psychopath) emotional events between characters additive rewards (something is gained) versus subtractive ones (something is taken away) - a distinction we've borrowed borrowed from operant conditioning; and how that difference changes the emotional tone of an ending.The subtractive reward is why a happy ending can still feel like loss... and it's the thing we reckon that'll matter most when we get to negative arcs.
Chas, Mel and Stu also wibble-wobble over WILLOW, TAKEN, FERRIS BUELLER'S DAY OFF, THE MARTIAN, PROJECT HAIL MARY, THE GREY, ALL IS LOST, STAR WARS (as always), GREY GARDENS, PRISCILLA, and how many tampons NASA sent to space.
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"If your characters are not going to arc, if they are going to remain steadfast, then creating multiple smaller emotional events is really important to keep the story dynamic." — Mel Killingsworth @ 02:32:01
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:18 – What Is a Steadfast Character Arc? 00:04:24 – › Character as habitual action defines change 00:06:11 – › Operant conditioning reframes reward and punishment beats 00:09:14 – › Steadfast characters still need emotional stakes and impact 00:10:33 – The Questionnaire for Analysing Character Arcs 00:12:18 – MOANA 00:16:12 – › The I Want song and being pulled versus pushed 00:18:19 – › Doubt as necessary proof of steadfast resilience 00:26:54 – › Distinguishing upskilling and reward from true character change 00:27:25 – › Maui's full arc contrasts with Moana's steadfastness 00:41:15 – › Genre expectations teach the audience to predict steadfastness 00:45:10 – › Tracking Maui's and Moana's dramatized moments of change 00:53:08 – APOLLO 13 00:58:52 – › Riveting problem solving without character values changing 01:01:07 – › Jim and jack relationship as substitute emotional arc 01:12:12 – › Comparing disaster films that punish or reward steadfastness 01:20:02 – › Working through the arc questionnaire for the film 01:33:53 – THE DRESSMAKER 01:38:14 – › Debating whether THE DRESSMAKER is steadfast or positive 01:44:54 – › Tracking Tilly's three objectives and mystery of the curse 01:50:37 – › Teddy's death as subtractive reward and negative punishment 01:57:00 – › GREY GARDENS parallels and the town as social environment 02:03:10 – › How Tilly's steadfastness transforms the town around her 02:16:37 – › Testing audience expectations for change versus subversion 02:24:48 – › Values of beauty, love, and vengeance in the story world 02:31:45 – Key Learnings & Wrap UpFILMS
MOANA (2016) — (w) Jared Bush, Ron Clements, John Musker, Chris Williams, Don Hall, Pamela Ribon, Aaron Kandell, Jordan Kandell (d) John Musker, Ron Clements THE DRESSMAKER (2015) — (w) Jocelyn Moorhouse, Pj Hogan, Rosalie Ham (d) Jocelyn Moorhouse APOLLO 13 (1995) — (w) William Broyles Jr, Al Reinert, Jeffrey Kluger, Jim Lovell (d) Ron HowardEPISODES IN THE CHARACTER ARCS SERIES
DZ-128: What even is a Character Arc? DZ-129: Steadfast Character Arcs - Agents of Change DZ-130: Positive Character ArcsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston DZ-126: Secrets and Clues DZ-128: What even is a Character Arc?———
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Sat, 01 Aug 2026 - 162 - DZ-128: What even is a Character Arc?
Listen to separate the three layers of an arc -- does the character change? How do they feel about it? And how is the audience positioned to feel about it?
Stu, Chas and Mel finally begin their long-awaited journey into CHARACTER ARCS. In this "primer" episode, we try find some learnings and analytical lenses that we can then apply in future breakdowns.
In this episode, we explore differences between a character learning something and a character fundamentally changing, how to dramatise that, and how the show teaches the audience to perceive that transformation (whether positively or negatively).
Throughout the discussion, we skate over A NEW HOPE, BLUE MOON, BREAKING BAD, BETTER CALL SAUL, the French real-time thriller FULL TIME, A KNIGHT OF THE SEVEN KINGDOMS, THE GREEN KNIGHT, ALL OF US STRANGERS, PREDATOR BADLANDS, FIELD OF DREAMS, MEG 2, and Stu's receding hairline.
Ultimately, this discussion synthesises into a series of questions to ask of a story and the main point-of-view character living through that story:
Does the audience enter the story with an expectation that characters will change? How does the story teach the audience to expect characters to change or not? Do the characters change? Is it experiential change or internal value change? How is that dramatised? Is the character aware that they changed? How do they feel about that change? Does that matter? How does the story want the audience to feel about that change? If different to the character’s perception, how does the story pull that off? How does the story world punish or reward the change? What are the values explored by the arc? How does this relate to the theme? How is contrast vs affinity/unity portrayed through the characters’ journey? Order vs disorder vs inertia What is the emotional event created between the character and audience as a result of the journey? Does the character end up more intimate or distant from the audience?In upcoming episodes, we intend to apply these lenses to stories with STEADFAST/RESILIENT arcs, POSITIVE arcs, NEGATIVE arcs and - potentially - a “WTF is this?!” arc.
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"Character arcs are really difficult to talk about because they're not just in isolation. Rarely is a film only about one character, right? So we're actually talking about how we harmonize other characters around them." — Stu Willis @ 00:12:16
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:17 – Character Arcs: A Primer on What We're Really Asking 00:03:13 – › Three layers of an arc: character, self-perception, audience 00:07:04 – › The four-quadrant map: change, no change, better, worse 00:10:15 – › Why calling it an arc is already a misnomer 00:13:35 – What We Each Want to Learn from This Series 00:19:56 – › Whether emotional authenticity is becoming more valuable than spectacle 00:23:37 – › Why stories let us safely inhabit experiences outside our own 00:30:04 – The Deep Question: Can Characters Actually Change? 00:35:49 – › Contrast and affinity as the design logic of transformation 00:41:40 – › The rock metaphor: external forces versus intrinsic change 00:46:43 – › Order, disorder, and inertia as the spectrum of arc types 00:50:29 – Three Layers of Judgment: Character, World, and Audience 00:56:45 – › How the filmmaker positions the audience relative to the character 01:00:01 – › Do audiences enter stories expecting change at all? 01:06:09 – › Mapping the inner journey against plot beats 01:09:28 – › Why low points exist to make the climax feel earned 01:12:09 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:26:47 – Thanks to Our Patreons!FILMS
STAR WARS (1977) — (w) George LucasSHOWS
A KNIGHT OF THE SEVEN KINGDOMS — (w) George Rr Martin, Ira Parker BETTER CALL SAUL — (w) Vince Gilligan, Peter Gould BREAKING BAD — (w) Vince GilliganLINKS
Website: Bruce Block's The Visual StoryEPISODES IN THE CHARACTER ARCS SERIES
DZ-128: What even is a Character Arc?RELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston———
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Sun, 28 Jun 2026 - 161 - DZ-127: Secrets and Clues 2 - The Cost of Revelation
Listen to learn the emotional impact of revealing secrets vs discovering them.
In this episode Stu, Chas and Mel apply the Landmark–Hidden–Secret framework (from DZ-126) across two very different genres: the thriller SIDE EFFECTS (2013) and the tragicomic pilot of SHRINKING.
SIDE EFFECTS is a film of two genres. The first half plays as a drama about depression and over-medication; the second half is a 90s thriller. We talk about how every time Dr Jonathan Banks uncovers a new piece of information, it puts him in danger — and that danger motivates him to uncover more.
In SHRINKING, we see a different use of the framework. "What are psychologists but detectives of the mind?" Rather than the cost of finding secrets, it's about the cost of sharing them. Chas also comes out of this with a paradigm he's been building toward (but we're keeping what that is secret until you listen!)
And inevitably we go on some tangents: whether SIDE EFFECTS should even have been an erotic thriller!
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"Every time Dr Jonathan Banks uncovers a new piece of information, it puts him in danger -- and that danger motivates him to uncover more." — Chas Fisher @ 00:26:04
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:16 – Intro: Secrets and Clues 2 - the Cost of Revelation 00:01:03 – Previously on Secrets and Clues (Recap of Part 1) 00:04:24 – Flashforward Insights 00:09:29 – SIDE EFFECTS 00:20:18 – › The First Half: Push and Misdirection 00:28:41 – › Genre Shift: Banks Becomes the Detective 00:48:06 – SHRINKING 01:00:02 – › The Inverted Paradigm: When Everyone Knows 01:07:47 – › The Cost of Sharing 01:22:02 – › Power Through Honest Acknowledgement 01:35:37 – The Key Tool Chas Learned 01:39:28 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:50:48 – Many Thanks to our Patrons!FILMS
SIDE EFFECTS (2013) — (w) Scott Z Burns (d) Steven SoderberghSHOWS
SHRINKING — (w) Brett Goldstein, Jason Segel, Bill LawrenceSCRIPTS
Study the script: SIDE EFFECTS (2013) — Scott Z BurnsLINKS
Website: DIY & dragons: Landmark, Hidden, Secret Website: The Alexandrian » Advanced Node-Based Design Website: Ascii Dreams: The Quest for Quests (Part One) Website: Ascii Dreams: The Quest for Quests (Part Two)EPISODES IN THE SECRETS AND CLUES SERIES
DZ-126: Secrets and Clues DZ-127: Secrets and Clues 2 - The Cost of RevelationRELATED EPISODES
DZ-90: Setups & Payoffs in EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE———
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Wed, 27 May 2026 - 160 - DZ-29: Showdowns & Scene Structure
Listen to discover how fight scenes can be great inspiration for writing any kind of showdown (verbal or otherwise)
In exploring how to write good fight scenes, Stu and Chas compare how writers structure memorable showdowns - both verbal and physical. Fights vs arguments. Swords vs insults. Lightsabres vs passive aggressive subtext. To do this, they analyse the showdowns in EASTERN PROMISES, ROB ROY, THE FORCE AWAKENS (yes, yes, we finally let Stu officially discuss Star Wars), A FEW GOOD MEN, BREAKING BAD and BEFORE SUNSET.
As a result, they discover how larger structural elements like mid-points, reversals and act breaks can play out in making individual scenes compelling and dynamic. Also, they learn that great screenwriters don't just write "They fight" when writing fight scenes.
In Backmatter, we learn that Quentin Tarantino is a listener!
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FILMS
EASTERN PROMISES (2007) — (w) Steven Knight (d) David Cronenberg ROB ROY (1995) — (w) Alan Sharp (d) Michael Caton Jones A FEW GOOD MEN (1992) — (w) Aaron Sorkin (d) Rob Reiner BEFORE SUNSET (2004) — (w) Ethan Hawke, Julie Delpy, Richard Linklater, Kim Krizan, Richard Linklater (d) Richard Linklater STAR WARS: THE FORCE AWAKENS (2015) — (w) Michael Arndt, Lawrence Kasdan, Jj Abrams (d) Jj AbramsSCRIPTS
Study the script: A FEW GOOD MEN (1992) — Aaron SorkinLINKS
Watch: Vimeo: Eastern Promises fight in the bath house YouTube: The Nerd Writer: (YouTube) YouTube: ROB ROY sword fight Read: A FEW GOOD MEN by Aaron Sorkin Read: Dailymotion.com: Saul Goodman kidnapped by the meth cooking duo Read: BEFORE SUNSET by Richard Linklater, Ethan Hawke & Julie Delpy Read: No Film School: Simplest Way to Make Your Films More Interesting: Use 'Therefore' & 'But' Instead of 'And Then' Read: The Movie Crypt Podcast: Episode 131 - Gareth Evans Read: Thirteen Minutes: Why Backmatter Matters Read: SKTCHD: Backmatter and the Golden Age of Comic Book Letters ColumnsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-08: Status Transactions DZ-10: Midpoint Reversals and The Ride DZ-13: True That - Tips from Tarantino DZ-27: Competing views on Screenplay Competitions———
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Mon, 25 Jan 2016 - 159 - DZ-28: Containing Your Script
Listen if you're writing a contained thriller, drama, or any story limited to a single location
Contained Thrillersseem to be a genre that never goes out of fashion. But being contained is not just limited to thrillers. It's a way of telling stories on a lower budget, regardless of genre. So - while allegedly easier to make / get made - limiting a story to a single location also limits the tools that maintain an audience's interest. Changing audience or character point of view, intercutting between locations or characters are all much harder (if not impossible) in contained films. So how do good contained films hook their audience and keep them?
In unravelling this locked room mystery, Stu & Chas look at three scripts form different genres: LOCKE - a drama; THE ONE I LOVE - a romcom or psychological thriller depending if you're Chas or Stu; and EVERLY - an exploitation action movie. They also discuss films including BURIED, PHONE BOOTH, THE DISAPPEARANCE OF ALICE CREED, CUBE & CUBE 2, INFINITE MAN and BOXING DAY.
BACKMATTER
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FILMS
LOCKE (2014) — (w) Steven Knight THE ONE I LOVE (2014) — (w) Justin Lader (d) Charlie Mcdowell EVERLY (2015) — (w) Yale Hannon, Yale Hannon, Joe Lynch (d) Joe LynchSCRIPTS
Study the script: LOCKE (2014) — Steven KnightLINKS
YouTube: Locke - Trailer Read: The Q&A Podcast: Steven Knight - Pawn Sacrifice Q&A IMDB: The One I Love by Justin Lader (IMDB) Read: Watch on Netflix (US) and on Stan (Australia) IMDB: Everly screenplay by Yalo Hannon, story by Joe Lynch & Yale Hannon (IMDB) YouTube: Everly - Official Trailer #1 Read: The Movie Crypt with Adam Green & Joe Lynch IMDB: Boxing Day (IMDB) YouTube: Boxing Day - Trailer Listen: Boxing Day - Watch on iTunes IMDB: The Infinte Man (IMDB) YouTube: The Infinite Man - Trailer Listen: The Infinite Man - Watch on iTunes YouTube: Phone Booth - Trailer Read: ScriptShadow - GSU!!! (Goal, Stakes, Ugency) Read: Wikipedia: Pathetic Fallacy & LiteraryDevices.Net: Pathetic Fallacy Read: Wikipedia: Pathetic Fallacy & LiteraryDevices.Net: Pathetic Fallacy Read: The Guardian: Covenhithe (short story) by China Miéville Read: Grant Nebel on Story Intensity Over Time & Forms of Storytelling on Television Read: Pete's Blog: A Thousand Men : TV for Writers Read: The Screen Director Podcast produced by Ben Mizzi Read: The Screen Director Podcast produced by Ben Mizzi Read: Writing Predestination - The Spierig Brothers Read: Corrie Chen on Bloomers Read: Julietta Boscolo on Love Child Read: Tommy Schlamme (The West Wing, Manhattan) interviewed by DZ's very own Stu WillisRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions———
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Mon, 21 Dec 2015 - 158 - DZ-27: Competing views on Screenplay Competitions
Listen if you're considering entering a screenplay competition and want to hear from writers and industry professionals about whether it's a worthwhile investment!
After being repeatedly asked by listeners for thoughts on screenplay competitions, Stu and Chas go full back matter for this special episode. They tackle the question - do comps just feeding the hope machine or are they a valid investment? - in their typical detailed (i.e. long) style. With their differing perspectives, Stu (a director looking for material) and Chas (a writer keen for exposure), talk to an impressive roster of guests. We start with Gordy Hoffman, founder and judge of the Bluecat Screenplay Competition; repeat Austin Film Festival attendees - first for the screenplay and now for the finished web series of EX BEST - Diana Gettinger & Monica Hewes; Launchpad 2014 finalist Tony Pitman; and Insite Competition winner Blake Ashford, whose winning script CUT SNAKE hit cinemas in 2015... ten years after winning the competition.
These short descriptions in no way do justice to these eclectic and talented writers so - if you want to find out more - head to the links below.
Our apologies in advance for the inconsistent sound quality in these interviews. Sadly, that's the nature of pulling together four different interviews across states, countries, times zones and technological barriers.
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FILMS
CUT SNAKE (2015) — (w) Blake Ayshford (d) Tony Ayres DOG BOWL (2015) — (w) Gordy HoffmanLINKS
Read: DOG BOWL by Gordy Hoffman Read: EX-BEST by Diana Gettinger & Monica Hewes Read: Tony Pitman's skeptic podcast REALITY CHECK IMDB: CUT SNAKE directed by Tony Ayres, written by Blake Ayshford YouTube: CUT SNAKE Trailer———
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Sun, 15 Nov 2015 - 157 - DZ-26: Horror and Collaboration- Wolf Creek 2
Listen if you're co-writing and need to figure out where your voice ends and your collaborator's begins.
In this halloween special, Chas (sans Stu) is joined by a very special guest... Aaron Sterns the co-writer of WOLF CREEK 2 -- the big budget sequel to the infamous WOLF CREEK, also directed by Greg McLean. Chas and Aaron talk horror, anti-horror, collaboration, novels and how a screenwriter works within an existing franchise.
In backmatter, Stu & Chas talk about their experiences and methods for collaborating with other writers & directors.
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FILMS
WOLF CREEK 2 (2013) — (w) Greg Mclean, Aaron Sterns (d) Greg Mclean WOLF CREEK (2005) — (w) Greg McleanLINKS
Read: Web Read: GoodReads: Wolf Creek Origin by Greg McLean & Aaron Sterns YouTube: Wolf Creek 2 Trailer YouTube: Wolf Creek 2 Clip - the infamous 'kangaroo' scene IMDB: Wolf Creek 2 Read: For Australian listeners it is on Stan Read: Movie Crypt - Ep 124: Greg McLean Read: WriterDuet - Real-time collaborative screenwriting software Read: Fountain : Fountain is a plain text markup language for screenwriting Read: Fountain Tools for Google Docs Read: Literature & Latte: Scrivener———
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Sat, 31 Oct 2015 - 156 - DZ-25: Coincidences, Contrivances & Giant Eagles
Listen when you need to know which coincidences earn trust and which ones feel like cheating.
Remember that time in THE DARK KNIGHT RETURNS when Bruce suddenly - magically - returned to Gotham, and you were like "WTF?!" Well, it turns out that many of the best films have moments that are just as coincidental or contrived (or a flock of Giant Eagles) and yet get away with it. Does Pixar's "rule" that it is 'cheating to use coincidences to get your characters out of trouble', always apply?
In exploring how to get the audience to buy into these moments where the writer needs story to intrude over character or even logic, Stu and Chas dive into FINDING NEMO, MICHAEL CLAYTON and PULP FICTION (as well as honourably mentioning THOR II, OUT OF SIGHT, MAD MAX FURY ROAD, EMPIRE STRIKES BACK, INDEPENDENCE DAY and those bloody Giant Eagles in both RETURN OF THE KING and THE HOBBIT).
In back matter, we talk about moving forward vs working backwards when developing screenwriting skills.
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FILMS
FINDING NEMO (2003) — (w) Andrew Stanton, Bob Peterson, David Reynolds (d) Andrew Stanton, Lee Unkrich MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — (w) Tony Gilroy PULP FICTION (1994) — (w) Quentin Tarantino, Roger Avary, Quentin Tarantino (d) Quentin TarantinoSCRIPTS
Study the script: FINDING NEMO (2003) — Andrew Stanton, Bob Peterson, David Reynolds Study the script: MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — Tony Gilroy Study the script: PULP FICTION (1994) — Quentin Tarantino, Roger Avary, Quentin TarantinoLINKS
Read: Draft Zero - Short Documents Read: io9.com: The 22 rules of storytelling according to Pixar Read: Wikipedia: Coincidence Read: Scriptmag.com - SPECS & THE CITY: Deus Ex Machina and Lord of the Rings by Brad Johnson YouTube: MICHAEL CLAYTON Clip YouTube: THE HOBBIT - Eagles Rescue YouTube: White Boy Bob's Death - OUT OF SIGHTRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions DZ-07: On Rewriting - How much Bull is left in the Hustle? DZ-15: World Building Rules, Okay?———
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Tue, 15 Sep 2015 - 155 - DZ-24: Forging story rules in TV pilots
Listen if you wanna know great television pilots establish the dramatic, literary, and cinematic rules that sustain their entire run.
Stu and Chas move away from the world of features and dive into the Pilot Episodes of some (New) Golden Age Television: THE SHIELD, THE WIRE, BREAKING BAD, and MAD MEN. And we sneak in some discussion about ANGEL, THE SOPRANOS and GAME OF THRONES.
Our spiritual guide on this tele-vision quest is Wallflower (aka Grant Nebel), writer at The Solute and formerly of The Dissolve and the AV Club.
Together, they examine how the final acts of these pilot episodes - and the Dramatic, Literary and Cinematic rules established therein - will set the scene for the entire life of these seminal shows, right up to their end. Obviously, abound.
This was one of our favourite episodes to record and - given that both Chas and Stu are casting seductive glances at writing television - hopefully one of our most useful too.
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SHOWS
THE SHIELD 1x1 "Pilot" — Clark Johnson (d), Shawn Ryan (w) THE WIRE 1x1 "The Target" — Clark Johnson (d), David Simon, David Simon, Ed Burns (w) BREAKING BAD 1x1 "Pilot" — Vince Gilligan (d), Vince Gilligan (w) MAD MEN 1x1 "Smoke Gets in Your Eyes" — Alan Taylor (d), Matthew Weiner (w)LINKS
Read: The-Solute.com: Wallflower (Grant Nebel) Read: Grant Nebel: Collected writing on THE SHIELD Read: Read: Vulture.com: Man Men Pilot Predicts the Final Episodes Read: StyleCaster: 'Breaking Bad' and Colors: A Comprehensive Guide to the Theories, Costumes Read: The Disenchanted Costumier: Breaking Bad Costumes Read: ActionCutPrint: Elia Kazan - On What Makes a Director (excerpted) Watch: Every Frame A Painting: David Fincher - And the Other Way is Wrong Read: Bob Saenz: The Mean Old Writer Read: Genre Hacks: What is the Most Important Screenwriting Tool: The Rewriting Cycle Read: Wired: Harnessing the Power of Feedback Loops Read: GoodReader - PDF Reader (PDF Annotation) Read: Readdle: Documents & PDF Expert (PDF Annotation) Read: Readdle: Documents & PDF Expert (PDF Annotation) Read: Mind Mapping Software & Tool For Mac & WindowsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette DZ-06: Key Scenes and Unlocking the Story DZ-09: Characterising Introductions———
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Mon, 03 Aug 2015 - 154 - DZ-23: LIVE - Starting A Career In Film And Television
Listen if you're an emerging filmmaker looking to break into the industry
Draft Zero was invited to moderate a panel as part of the 2015 St Kilda Film Festival. In our very first live episode, we are joined by TV Writer Mithila Gupta (Winners and Losers), Director Corrie Chen (Reg Makes Contact) and Producer/Executive Simon de Bruyn (Acquisitions Executive, XYZ Filmsand Producer) to talk about 'breaking in', how it has changed, the different approaches, opportunities and challenges. They share their tips on networking effectively, setting up an online presence, persevering through doubt and getting relevant experience.
It's pretty out-of-format for us, but it's an informative and fun discussion.
We continue the discussion into BACKMATTER where we focus on emerging writers approaching directors to get stuff made.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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FILMS
REG MAKES CONTACT (2015) — (w) Andrew Slattery, Corrie Chen (d) Corrie Chen BLOOMERS (2013) — (w) Michelle Law (d) Corrie Chen THE INFINITE MAN (2014) — (w) Hugh SullivanLINKS
Read: HEARTS ONLINE by Mithila Gupta Watch: Vimeo: BLOOMERS by Corrie Chen YouTube: Henry & Aaron - It's a Snap Read: GoodReads: The Art of Asking: or, How I Learned to Stop Worrying and Let People Help by Amanda Palmer Read: Ted Talks: The Art of Asking by Amanda Palmer Read: Short of the Week Watch: Vimeo Staff Picks Read: Director's Notes Listen: iTunes: The Infinite Man YouTube: TEDxConejo 2012 - Lindsay Doran - Saving The World vs Kissing The Girl via @troyguze Read: io9: The 22 rules of storytelling, according to PixarRELATED EPISODES
DZ-12: Craft, Career and Coffins DZ-22: Romantic Comedy, Actually———
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Mon, 06 Jul 2015 - 153 - DZ-22: Romantic Comedy, Actually
Listen if you're writing a romcom and want to understand what makes this gentre tick.
With Stu busy working on Hollywood blockbusters, Chas is joined by Alli Parker (script department on Aussie TV series and former co-ordinator of European #scriptchat) to unpick successful romcoms to see if they can illuminate a path for writers working in this struggling genre. Cheap to produce and potentially highly lucrative, Chas and Alli look at RomCom's conventions to see what it may take to reinvigorate this genre.
To that end, they look at deep breath WHEN HARRY MET SALLY, WHAT IF, THE PROPOSAL, 500 DAYS OF SUMMER, NOTTING HILL, FRIENDS WITH BENEFITS as well as special mentions to GOING THE DISTANCE, SEAN OF THE DEAD and ETERNAL SUNSHINE OF THE SPOTLESS MIND.
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FILMS
WHEN HARRY MET SALLY... (1989) — (w) Nora Ephron (d) Rob Reiner (500) DAYS OF SUMMER (2009) — (w) Michael H Weber, Scott Neustadter (d) Marc Webb THE PROPOSAL (2009) — (w) Peter Chiarelli (d) Anne Fletcher NOTTING HILL (1999) — (w) Richard Curtis (d) Roger MichellSCRIPTS
Study the script: WHEN HARRY MET SALLY... (1989) — Nora Ephron Study the script: (500) DAYS OF SUMMER (2009) — Michael H Weber, Scott Neustadter Study the script: THE PROPOSAL (2009) — Peter Chiarelli Study the script: NOTTING HILL (1999) — Richard CurtisLINKS
Read: Vulture.com: 10 Most Over-Used Romantic Comedy Plot-Points Read: Goodreads: Writing the Romantic Comedy by Billy Mernit YouTube: WHAT IF trailer YouTube: (500) DAYS OF SUMMER - Expectations vs Reality YouTube: Girls (HBO) Season 2 Episode 10 Finale Read: NewStatesman: "Let's talk about genre" - Neil Gaiman and Kazuo Ishiguro in conversation Read: TheDailyDot.com: The Mako Mori Test: 'Pacific Rim' inspires a Bechdel Test alternative Read: Wikipedia: Cosmic EncounterRELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette DZ-13: True That - Tips from Tarantino———
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Thu, 11 Jun 2015 - 152 - DZ-21: Scene Transitions and the Hook
Listen to understand how transitions compress time, enhance thematic connections, unify story threads, and orient your reader
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Stu and Chas look at one of the basic building blocks of a script: scene transitions. Transitions don't just move you from one scene to another in a slick way, they can help you compress time, enhance thematic connections, unify different story threads, orient (or disorient) your reader... and just make your script feel more like a movie.
To help us see how scenes connect & collide in interesting ways, we take a close look at scripts of films with great transitions to see how much of the work was done by the writer (as opposed to the director or editor): SCOTT PILGRIM VS THE WORLD, HIGHLANDER, AMERICAN SPLENDOR and BOYHOOD.
And then, in backmatter we take a self-reflective look at TIME MANAGEMENT (and naps).
Oh, we are also holding a LIVE EPISODE of Draft Zero at the 2015 St Kilda Film Festival. May 25, 8pm. More details shortly!
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FILMS
SCOTT PILGRIM VS. THE WORLD (2010) — (w) Michael Bacall, Edgar Wright (d) Edgar Wright HIGHLANDER (1986) — (w) Gregory Widen, Peter Bellwood, Larry Ferguson (d) Russell Mulcahy AMERICAN SPLENDOR (2003) — (w) Shari Springer Berman, Robert Pulcini, Harvey Pekar, Joyce Brabner (d) Shari Springer Berman, Robert Pulcini BOYHOOD (2014) — (w) Richard LinklaterSCRIPTS
Study the script: SCOTT PILGRIM VS. THE WORLD (2010) — Michael Bacall, Edgar Wright Study the script: BOYHOOD (2014) — Richard LinklaterLINKS
Read: David Bordwell Read: The Hook: Scene Transitions in Classical Cinema Read: There Will Be Blood - Hands and Faces Across the Table Read: Watching You Watch There Will Be Blood Watch: Vimeo: There Will Be Blood with gaze locations of 11 viewers Read: Scriptnotes: Ep89 - Writing effective transitions YouTube: Scott Pilgrim Transitions YouTube: Every Frame a Painting: Edgar Wright - How to do Visual Comedy YouTube: Highlander (1986) - Trailer YouTube: American Splendor - What's In A Name Watch: Kevin B. Lee : Who Deserves the 2015 Oscar for Best Director? Read: Screenwriting.io: What is a pre-lap? Read: The Next Web: The Secret To Insane Productivity? Will Power Read: The Write Practice: 23 Essential Quotes from Ernest Hemingway About Writing Read: Brain Pickings: The Daily Routines of Great Writers Read: The Guardian: Rise and shine: the daily routines of history's most creative minds Read: Paul Graham: How To Do What You Love Read: iView: Redesign my Brain with Todd Sampson Read: Denvog: Index Card for iPhone and Index Card for iPad Read: Denvog: Index Card for iPhone and Index Card for iPad Read: Short of the Week: Deeper than Yesterday Read: Pozible: Real Lust, Inc———
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Thu, 07 May 2015 - 151 - DZ-20: Writing Strong Secondary Characters - Trinity, Bechdel and a Bamboo Killer
Listen when you're writing secondary female characters and need them to have more depth.
Chas & Stu are joined by Bamboo Killer (aka Emily Blake) - one of the co-hosts of the Chicks Who Script podcast. They take a critical look at secondary female characters in mainstream movies through the lens of the oft-cited Bechdel test and the new, less-cited, Trinity Syndrome. The Trinity Syndrome berates movies for creating a "Strong Female Character With Nothing To Do" (like Trinity in the Matrix sequels) and raises a list of questions for filmmakers to ask themselves about their (female) characters.
Chas, Stu & Emily take these questions and use them to analyse the use of female characters in MISSION IMPOSSIBLE: GHOST PROTOCOL, EDGE OF TOMORROW, DAWN OF THE PLANET OF THE APES and HOW TO TRAIN YOU DRAGON 2. They also cover the awesomeness of the awesomeness that is Rose Tyler (Doctor Who), Katniss Everdeen (Hunger Games), and Kira Nerys (Deep Space Nine).
Funnily enough, turns out writing better female characters is really about writing better characters... who happen to be female.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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FILMS
MISSION: IMPOSSIBLE - GHOST PROTOCOL (2011) — (w) Josh Appelbaum, Andre Nemec (d) Brad Bird EDGE OF TOMORROW (2014) — (w) Christopher Mcquarrie, Hiroshi Sakurazaka, Jez Butterworth, John Henry Butterworth (d) Doug Liman DAWN OF THE PLANET OF THE APES (2014) — (w) Mark Bomback, Rick Jaffa, Amanda Silver (d) Matt Reeves HOW TO TRAIN YOUR DRAGON 2 (2014) — (w) Dean DebloisSCRIPTS
Study the script: EDGE OF TOMORROW (2014) — Christopher Mcquarrie, Hiroshi Sakurazaka, Jez Butterworth, John Henry Butterworth Study the script: DAWN OF THE PLANET OF THE APES (2014) — Mark Bomback, Rick Jaffa, Amanda Silver Study the script: HOW TO TRAIN YOUR DRAGON 2 (2014) — Dean DebloisLINKS
Listen: Chicks Who Script Podcast. They are @cwspodcast on Twitter Read: The Dissolve: We're losing all our Strong Female Characters to the Trinity Syndrome YouTube: EDGE OF TOMORROW - Emily Blunt Is Rita Vrataski [They gush about Rita in this - c.f. the DAWN video below] YouTube: Dawn Of The Planet of the Apes: Keri Russell Ellie Behind the Scenes Movie Interview | ScreenSlam YouTube: Everything wrong with DAWN OF THE PLANET OF THE APES Read: Asking the Wrong Questions: Ode to Kira———
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Thu, 02 Apr 2015 - 150 - DZ-19: Car-Crash Characters
Listen when you're writing a protagonist who does terrible things but you need the audience to keep watching.
Stu and Chas revisit a topic from a year ago: how do screenwriters make unlikeable characters compelling? This time, we turn our focus to dramas and analyse how AMERICAN HISTORY X, YOUNG ADULT, NIGHTCRAWLER all make their asshole protagonists compelling to watch. We expand our original list of five writer's tools to include a few more for your tool belt.
In response to our audience survey, we also introduce our first episode of backmatter.
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FILMS
AMERICAN HISTORY X (1998) — (w) David Mckenna (d) Tony Kaye YOUNG ADULT (2011) — (w) Diablo Cody (d) Jason Reitman NIGHTCRAWLER (2014) — (w) Dan GilroySCRIPTS
Study the script: YOUNG ADULT (2011) — Diablo Cody Study the script: NIGHTCRAWLER (2014) — Dan GilroyLINKS
Read: YOUNG ADULT by Diablo Cody (Final Draft) - First 20 pages. For educational purposes only Read: YOUNG ADULT by Diablo Cody - First 20 pages. For educational purposes only YouTube: Young Adult - Trailer YouTube: New York Times: 'Nightcrawler' Anatomy of a Scene with Dan Gilroy YouTube: THE KILLER INSIDE ME - Trailer Watch: Every Frame a Painting: Snowpiercer - Left or Right Read: The Contrarians: Episode 2 - Alien 3 Read: Temple of the Seven Golden Camels: Staging and How It Affects Mood & Drama Read: Temple of the Seven Golden Camels: (Just a Little Bit) More Flat and Deep Watch: Every Frame a Painting: Drive (2011) - the Quadrant System Watch: Every Frame a Painting: The Bad Sleep Well (1960) - the Geometry of a Scene Read: Day One: A Simple and Elegant Journal for iPhone, iPad and Mac Read: Shawn Blanc: Day One review IMDB: David CaesarRELATED EPISODES
DZ-03: Making Unlikeable Protagonists Compelling———
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Mon, 02 Mar 2015 - 149 - DZ-18: Michael Bay - F*ing the Frame and P*ing the Page
Listen to understand how one of the world's highest-grossing directors structures story, makes great villians, controls information flow, and makes visual decisions on the page
Of course there are. How could there not be? After all, Michael Bay is the 3rd highest grossing director at the worldwide box office... of all time. Behind, y'know, Spielberg and stuff. How could a man of such credentials not know story? Or, so argues this week's guest: the author of MICHAEL F-ING BAY: THE UNHERALDED GENIUS IN MICHAEL BAY'S FILMS... [drumroll]... the Bitter Script Reader!
For those unfamiliar with the Bitter Script Reader and his puppet avatar, he is one of the internet's greatest free resources for emerging screenwriters. A man who shares his experiences of being a Hollywood gatekeeper for nothing because he's "sick of reading bad scripts".
Together, Stu, Chas and Bitter come through with their long-threatened episode to see what - if anything - screenwriters can learn from analysing the work of one of the most successful filmmakers all time, Michael Bay. We look at THE ROCK, THE ISLAND, and PAIN & GAIN, and cover writing great villains, controlling the flow of information to the audience (via car chases, of course) and creating visual decisions on the page.
So sit back and relax while Stu, Chas and the Bitter Script Reader learn how you can f@*k the page and not just the frame.
Oh, and if you have 7 seconds to spare, click here to go to our 2-question Draft Zero listener survey!
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FILMS
THE ROCK (1996) — (w) Douglas S Cook, David Weisberg, Mark Rosner, Jonathan Hensleigh (d) Michael Bay THE ISLAND (2005) — (w) Caspian Tredwell Owen, Alex Kurtzman, Roberto Orci, Caspian Tredwell Owen (d) Michael Bay PAIN & GAIN (2013) — (w) Christopher Markus, Stephen Mcfeely (d) Michael BaySCRIPTS
Study the script: THE ROCK (1996) — Douglas S Cook, David Weisberg, Mark Rosner, Jonathan HensleighLINKS
Read: Michael F-ing Bay: The Unheralded Genius in Michael Bay's Films Watch: Every Frame A Painting: What is Bayhem? Watch: Michaelbay.com: Transformers 4: Bay on Action YouTube: Car chase sequence from THE ROCK YouTube: Best of Daniel Lugo from PAIN&GAIN Read: TRANSFORMERS: AGE OF EXTINCTION is the most brilliant and subversively political film you'll see all yearEPISODES IN THE FILMMAKER SPOTLIGHT SERIES
DZ-18: Michael Bay - F*ing the Frame and P*ing the Page DZ-76: Spotlight on Sofia Coppola DZ-13: True That - Tips from Tarantino———
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Thu, 22 Jan 2015 - 148 - DZ-17: Where's my gold-plated ensuite?
Listen when you're deciding between shorts, features, and web content--and need to know which format actually builds a sustainable creative practice.
It's our Holiday Special! In this episode (recorded December 2014), Chas and Stu break all the rules. No homework. No pages. No empirical analysis. They reluctantly but boldly reflect over the first year of Draft Zero and how it has influenced their 'careers' (such as they are). They also engage in a heated debate on whether a short film, a micro-budget feature or web-based content is the best way to go in terms of pushing a filmmaking career forward.
As the 2014 "season" comes to a close, Chas and Stu hold two polls for the listeners:
Should Chas and Stu spruik a favourite crowd-funding campaign run by listeners each episode? Should Chas and Stu stick to the rules or occasionally set format aside to talk about their personal approaches to career and craft?Click here to go to our 2-question / 7-second Draft Zero listener survey!
May 2015 be great for all our listeners and may Chas and Stu finally open a door to find a gold-plated ensuite.
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FILMS
PLAY IT SAFE (2015) — (w) Chris Pahlow, Jack White (d) Chris Pahlow PAYLOAD (2011) — (w) Stuart WillisLINKS
Read: Austin Film Festival Staff Picks review of THE SUICIDE THEORY Read: THE TYGER written by Matthew Clayfield, art by Melanie Cook Read: THE TYGER written by Matthew Clayfield, art by Melanie Cook Read: THE TYGER written by Matthew Clayfield, art by Melanie Cook Read: PLAY IT SAFE written & directed by Chris Pahlow Read: MEATSPACE - Leon East's production company. He the man Watch: PAYLOAD written and directed by Stuart WillisEPISODES IN THE BACKMATTER SERIES
DZ-17: Where's my gold-plated ensuite? DZ-36: Backmatter - Time Risk and Fixing Movies DZ-47: Backmatter - A Lost Jedi, White Knighting, and Writers-On-Set DZ-57: Backmatter - Aesthetics and Forgiveness in Writing DZ-64: Backmatter - Controlling your Work, Treatments, and Writing Styles DZ-77: Backmatter - Prioritising and choosing projects DZ-86: Backmatter - Minimum Viable Product DZ-95: Backmatter - Building and MaintenanceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-03: Making Unlikeable Protagonists Compelling DZ-10: Midpoint Reversals and The Ride DZ-15: World Building Rules, Okay? DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace———
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Tue, 06 Jan 2015 - 147 - DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace
Listen if you want your screenplay to feel cinematic before a director ever reads it.
Chas and Stu are joined by Khrob Edmonds - an award-winning filmmaker - to discuss manipulation of time...
... on the page!
Cinema is a time-based art, and one of the primary tools in film editing is manipulation of time. A closer look at sequences in the scripts of PULP FICTION, THE BOURNE IDENTITY, THE BOURNE ULTIMATUM, WOMAN IN BLACK, RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK, UP, WHIPLASH, and THE UNTOUCHABLES reveals how master screenwriters use the same time-controlling techniques on the page. The closer a writer can recreate cinema's use of time on the page, the more of an "I'm watching a movie" feeling you can generate for the reader. Or, as Chas puts it, writing like you'd edit. We discuss use of white space, super-present tense, decompression & compression, Soviet Montage Theory, the Kuleshov effect and just a tiny amount of grammar.
NB: Stu refers to '-ing' words as 'present participles', John August (cited below) refers to 'present progressive'. Turns out there's a subtle difference between the two! Grammar esoterica FTW. See: What Is the Difference between Present Participle and Present Progressive -> http://grammar.about.com/od/basicsentencegrammar/f/progpartdiff.htm.
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FILMS
PULP FICTION (1994) — (w) Quentin Tarantino, Roger Avary, Quentin Tarantino (d) Quentin Tarantino RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK (1981) — (w) Philip Kaufman, George Lucas, Lawrence Kasdan (d) Steven Spielberg THE BOURNE IDENTITY (2002) — (w) William Blake Herron, Tony Gilroy, Robert Ludlum (d) Doug Liman THE BOURNE ULTIMATUM (2007) — (w) Tony Gilroy, George Nolfi, Scott Z Burns, Robert Ludlum (d) Paul Greengrass THE UNTOUCHABLES (1987) — (w) David Mamet (d) Brian De Palma THE WOMAN IN BLACK (2012) — (w) Jane Goldman, Susan Hill (d) James Watkins UP (2009) — (w) Bob Peterson, Pete Docter, Bob Peterson, Tom Mccarthy, Pete Docter (d) Pete Docter WHIPLASH (2014) — (w) Damien ChazelleSCRIPTS
Study the script: PULP FICTION (1994) — Quentin Tarantino, Roger Avary, Quentin Tarantino Study the script: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK (1981) — Philip Kaufman, George Lucas, Lawrence Kasdan Study the script: THE BOURNE IDENTITY (2002) — William Blake Herron, Tony Gilroy, Robert Ludlum Study the script: THE BOURNE ULTIMATUM (2007) — Tony Gilroy, George Nolfi, Scott Z Burns, Robert Ludlum Study the script: THE UNTOUCHABLES (1987) — David Mamet Study the script: THE WOMAN IN BLACK (2012) — Jane Goldman, Susan Hill Study the script: UP (2009) — Bob Peterson, Pete Docter, Bob Peterson, Tom Mccarthy, Pete Docter Study the script: WHIPLASH (2014) — Damien ChazelleSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Staging the violence in TOTAL RECALL 1990 vs 2012LINKS
Read: John August: On the present tense Read: John August: Present tension Read: Scriptnotes: Ep 52: Grammar, Guns and Butter Read: Storyteller's Journal: Decompression: Writing Comics Like Movies Read: Wikipedia: Soviet Montage Theory Read: Wikipedia: The Kuleshov Effect YouTube: The Kuleshov Effect - Original experiment Read: No Film School: The History of Editing, Eisenstein, & the Soviet Montage YouTube: Miramax (YouTube): Mia Overdoses YouTube: MovieClips (YouTube): A Shot of Adrenaline YouTube: MovieClips (YouTube): Bank Evacuation Plan YouTube: MovieClips (YouTube): Ross and Waterloo YouTube: Woman in Black - scary scene YouTube: Lego Indiana Jones and the Fight on the Flying Wing YouTube: Married Life - Carl & Eddie YouTube: MovieClips (YouTube): Knife to a Gun Fight YouTube: The Odessa Steps And Its Descendants Read: ACMI Dreamworks Animation: Interrogating Gingy Read: Temple of the Seven Golden Camels: Presentation Storyboards by Joe Ranft (short article of pitching storyboarded sequences in animation) Read: Goodreads: Cinematic Storytelling by Jennifer Van Sijll Read: Director's Guild of America: A Tribute to Director Steven SpielbergRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions———
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Tue, 16 Dec 2014 - 146 - DZ-15: World Building Rules, Okay?
Listen when your opening pages feel like exposition dumps (which is bad, okay?)
In our most epic/longest episode yet, Chas and Stu tackle world building in films. Specifically, how the rules make something a world and not just a setting. Starting with world-centric genres like sci-fi and fantasy, we also cover horror, crime drama and - er - "other". We discuss a variety of techniques for setting up the rules of the world, including cold opens, voiceover, title cards and outsider characters! We've limited ourselves to the opening 3-5 pages... mostly... because (so the theory goes) they're the pages that teach the audience how to read/watch your story/film.
Like with the character introductions episode, we cover a lot of scripts. In no particular order... [deep breath]... THE MATRIX, THE MATRIX RELOADED, MATRIX REVOLUTIONS, INCEPTION, GRAVITY, MINORITY REPORT, MOON, LOOPER, ELYSIUM, JURASSIC PARK, HOW TO TRAIN YOUR DRAGON, HARRY POTTER AND THE SORCERER'S STONE, MADAGASCAR, FELLOWSHIP OF THE RING, PAN'S LABYRINTH, SNOW WHITE AND THE HUNTSMAN, NIGHT WATCH, VAN HELSING, THE ONE I LOVE, 28 WEEKS LATER, WORLD WAR Z, DAWN OF THE DEAD, 30 DAYS OF NIGHT, ZOMBIELAND, WOMAN IN BLACK, BRICK, ANIMAL KINGDOM, DIE HARD WITH A VENGEANCE, THE UNTOUCHABLES, GOODFELLAS, SHORT TERM 12, SILVER LININGS PLAYBOOK, TINKER TAILOR SOLDIER SPY, MOONRISE KINGDOM, THE ROYAL TENENBAUMS, and FOUR WEDDINGS AND A FUNERAL.
Damn that was a lot! And we've probably missed some, too. So have a listen and please let us know!
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FILMS
THE MATRIX (1999) — (w) Lana Wachowski, Lilly Wachowski INCEPTION (2010) — (w) Christopher Nolan THE LORD OF THE RINGS: THE FELLOWSHIP OF THE RING (2001) — (w) Fran Walsh, Philippa Boyens, Peter Jackson, J R R Tolkien (d) Peter Jackson JURASSIC PARK (1993) — (w) Michael Crichton, David Koepp, Michael Crichton (d) Steven Spielberg PAN'S LABYRINTH (2006) — (w) Guillermo Del ToroSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE MATRIX (1999) — Lana Wachowski, Lilly Wachowski Study the script: INCEPTION (2010) — Christopher Nolan Study the script: THE LORD OF THE RINGS: THE FELLOWSHIP OF THE RING (2001) — Fran Walsh, Philippa Boyens, Peter Jackson, J R R Tolkien Study the script: JURASSIC PARK (1993) — Michael Crichton, David Koepp, Michael Crichton Study the script: PAN'S LABYRINTH (2006) — Guillermo Del ToroSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Strong Openings: PAN'S LABYRINTHLINKS
Read: Visual Memory: 49 What are Non-Submersible Units? Read: io9: 7 Deadly Sins of Worldbuilding Read: Scriptnotes: Ep 149: The Long-Lost Austin Three Page Challenge (on Van Helsing) Read: Scriptnotes: Ep 135: World-building Read: Scriptnotes: Ep 160: A Screenwriter's Guide to the End of the WorldRELATED EPISODES
DZ-09: Characterising Introductions DZ-14: Writing For Actors with Succession's Sarah Snook———
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Tue, 04 Nov 2014 - 145 - DZ-14: Writing For Actors with Succession's Sarah Snook
Listen to understand how writers can craft more compelling material for actors (and how they approach scripts)
In this episode, Chas and Stu are joined by a very special guest, SARAH SNOOK - star of Succession, Predestination, Jessabelle, and Oddball, amongst many others - to discuss ACTING and it's relationship with WRITING.
We focus our analysis on two scenes from AUGUST: OSAGE COUNTY, a screenplay that started life as a Pulitzer Prize winning play, and whose writer - Tracy Letts - is a successful actor in his own right. But, as usual, we ice-skate between a whole range of topics, including what attracts actors to a script, writing realistic characters, how actors analyse scenes, character spines & objectives, and the importance of hugs.
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FILMS
AUGUST: OSAGE COUNTY (2013) — (w) Tracy Letts (d) John Wells PREDESTINATION (2014) — (w) Michael Spierig, Peter SpierigSCRIPTS
Study the script: AUGUST: OSAGE COUNTY (2013) — Tracy LettsLINKS
IMDB: Sarah Snook IMDB: PREDESTINATION YouTube: USC School of Cinematic Arts: James L. Brooks and Larry Moss at USC (YouTube) Read: Wikipedia: Practical Aesthetics Read: Wikipedia: The GOTE Method Read: Directing Actors by Judith Weston Read: The Film Director's Intuition: Script Analysis and Rehearsal Techniques by Judith Weston Read: Goodreads: ACTIONS: The Actors Thesauraus by Marina Caldarone & Maggie Lloyd-Williams Listen: ScriptNotes: Ep 134 - So Many Questions & transcript (discussed John Ridley & 12 Years A Slave) Read: ScriptNotes: Ep 134 - So Many Questions & transcript (discussed John Ridley & 12 Years A Slave)———
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Wed, 22 Oct 2014 - 144 - DZ-13: True That - Tips from Tarantino
Listen to steal Tarantino's technique for planting details that detonate as payoffs three scenes later.
Chapter 1: Of Milk and Men
Tarantino is widely heralded as one of the great writer/directors. Yet new writers are advised to avoid emulating Tarantino because his voice is so strong. Only Tarantino can get away with being Tarantino. Or so the theory goes.
But if Tarantino is that good, why shouldn't we look under the hood and analyse his screenwriting? You don't have to want to emulate his voice to want to understand why his craft is so good.
Chapter 2: The Bloodied Purpose
To that bloodied end, Chas and Stu look at three scripts from distinct phases of QT's career: TRUE ROMANCE, KILL BILL (Volume 1), and INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS. Stu and Chas break down QT's use of structure, detail and - in particular - dramatic irony in an attempt to understand how Tarantino's films are just that good.
Chapter 3: Epilogue, or, Links To Things We Talk About
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FILMS
TRUE ROMANCE (1993) — (w) Quentin Tarantino (d) Tony Scott INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS (2009) — (w) Quentin Tarantino KILL BILL: THE WHOLE BLOODY AFFAIR (2011) — (w) Quentin Tarantino KILL BILL: VOL. 1 (2003) — (w) Quentin Tarantino KILL BILL: VOL. 2 (2004) — (w) Quentin TarantinoSCRIPTS
Study the script: TRUE ROMANCE (1993) — Quentin Tarantino Study the script: INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS (2009) — Quentin Tarantino Study the script: KILL BILL: VOL. 1 (2003) — Quentin Tarantino Study the script: KILL BILL: VOL. 2 (2004) — Quentin TarantinoLINKS
YouTube: USC School of Cinematic Arts: James L. Brooks and Larry Moss at USC (YouTube) Read: The Q&A with Jeff Goldsmith: Writing for Tony Scott: A Quentin Tarantino & Richard Kelly Q&A YouTube: The Dice Tower: Dominion Review (YouTube) YouTube: The Dice Tower: Dominion Intrigue Review (YouTube)EPISODES IN THE FILMMAKER SPOTLIGHT SERIES
DZ-18: Michael Bay - F*ing the Frame and P*ing the Page DZ-76: Spotlight on Sofia Coppola DZ-13: True That - Tips from TarantinoRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions DZ-08: Status Transactions———
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Sun, 05 Oct 2014 - 143 - DZ-12: Craft, Career and Coffins
Listen if you're navigating multiple creative disciplines and wondering how to build a sustainable career across them.
Well, half of us is... Chas (sans Stu) is joined by a very special guest - Natasha Pincus. As a screenwriter, Tash's feature CLIVE was on the 2012 Black List. As a director, her music video for Goyte's Someone I Used To Know was nominated for an MTV Music Video Award. And at the time of this recording, her debut feature as a screenwriter FELL was weeks away from opening night.
In other words, Tash has great experience behind the keyboard, behind the camera, and - as it turns out - in front of the camera. Experience that she is only happy to share with Chas as they discuss career, craft and process.
Stu wasn't around to bring up STAR WARS but he feels that linking to The Star Wars I Used To Know parody video will suffice.
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FELL (2014) — (w) Natasha Pincus (d) Kasimir BurgessLINKS
Read: Stark Raving Productions IMDB: IMDB and IMDB: FELL by Natasha Pincus Read: CLIVE was on the 2012 Black List. YouTube: The Star Wars I Used To Know———
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Tue, 16 Sep 2014 - 142 - DZ-11: Adventure for the MacGuffin!
Listen to discover why the MacGuffin's emotional weight--not its function--determines whether your audience cares enough to follow the entire adventure.
Stu and Chas are joined by a special guest - Scriptmag contributor Brad Johnson - to discuss how the choice of the MacGuffin can impact on the quality of an action/adventure film. To test this thesis, our heroes compare the auspicious originals of two iconic franchise with their, um, less-than-auspicious 4th instalments (in other words we compare RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK with KINGDOM OF THE CRYSTAL SKULL and THE CURSE OF THE BLACK PEARL with ON STRANGER TIDES) as well as look at two recent & original entries into the genre, namely NATIONAL TREASURE and PRINCE OF PERSIA.
Our heroes uncover how key the relationship between the protagonist and the MacGuffin is and how this can impact on writing in any genre, not just action/adventure. Suprisingly, Brad brings up STAR WARS before Stu does...
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Adventure for the MacGuffin! 00:01:27 – What is a MacGuffin? 00:06:14 – Raiders of the Lost Ark 00:11:59 – Indiana Jones & The Kingdom of the Cystal Skull 00:26:38 – Pirates of the Carribean: Curse of the Black Pearl 00:41:24 – Pirates of the Carribean: On Stranger Tides 00:55:00 – National Treasure 01:17:00 – Princes of Persa: The Sands of Time 01:37:00 – Wrap Up & Key LearningsFILMS
RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK (1981) — (w) Philip Kaufman, George Lucas, Lawrence Kasdan (d) Steven Spielberg INDIANA JONES AND THE KINGDOM OF THE CRYSTAL SKULL (2008) — (w) George Lucas, David Koepp, Jeff Nathanson (d) Steven Spielberg PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: THE CURSE OF THE BLACK PEARL (2003) — (w) Terry Rossio, Ted Elliott (d) Gore Verbinski PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: ON STRANGER TIDES (2011) — (w) Terry Rossio, Ted Elliott, Tim Powers (d) Rob Marshall NATIONAL TREASURE (2004) — (w) Jim Kouf, Cormac Wibberley, Marianne Wibberley, Jim Kouf, Oren Aviv, Charles Segars (d) Jon Turteltaub PRINCE OF PERSIA: THE SANDS OF TIME (2010) — (w) Boaz Yakin, Doug Miro, Carlo Bernard (d) Mike NewellSCRIPTS
Study the script: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK (1981) — Philip Kaufman, George Lucas, Lawrence Kasdan Study the script: INDIANA JONES AND THE KINGDOM OF THE CRYSTAL SKULL (2008) — George Lucas, David Koepp, Jeff Nathanson Study the script: PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: THE CURSE OF THE BLACK PEARL (2003) — Terry Rossio, Ted Elliott Study the script: PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: ON STRANGER TIDES (2011) — Terry Rossio, Ted Elliott, Tim Powers Study the script: NATIONAL TREASURE (2004) — Jim Kouf, Cormac Wibberley, Marianne Wibberley, Jim Kouf, Oren Aviv, Charles SegarsLINKS
Read: You can find Brad Johnson on Twitter or at www.ReadWatchWrite.com Website: Specs & The City: MacGuffins and 'Raiders of the Lost Ark' YouTube: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK - The Greek Chorus/Exposition Scene YouTube: RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK - Showing protagonist's desire for the MacGuffin Read: The Complete Making of Indiana Jones by Rinzler and Bouzereau YouTube: How Indy 4 should have ended YouTube: PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: THE CURSE OF THE BLACK PEARL - Visualising and explaining the MacGuffin YouTube: PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: ON STRANGER TIDES - Where the protagonist says that they do not want the MacGuffin in the middle of the film YouTube: NATIONAL TREASURE - Where the MacGuffin itself actually tells the protagonist to take action———
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Thu, 31 Jul 2014 - 141 - DZ-10: Midpoint Reversals and The Ride
Listen when your second act sags and you need a structural jolt to accelerate audience engagement.
Stu and Chas embark on the first of a series of explorations into the dreaded Second Act. Their first stop is midpoint reversals or shifts, a plot point bang in the middle of ACT II that changes the protagonist's goal, raises the stakes and potentially leaves your audience leaning forward and asking "How the hell is this going to end?".
To get to the bottom of what makes a good midpoint shift (and whether your story needs one or not), Stu and Chas ride through DEATH AT A FUNERAL, PRISONERS, SHORT TERM 12, ALIEN, ALIENS and UP. We also drift across FULL METAL JACKET, PHILOMENA, HOW I LIVE NOW, ELYSIUM, DIE HARD and STAR WARS. Of course. Stu couldn't resist. It's not even funny anymore, is it?
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FILMS
DEATH AT A FUNERAL (2007) — (w) Dean Craig (d) Frank Oz PRISONERS (2013) — (w) Aaron Guzikowski (d) Denis Villeneuve SHORT TERM 12 (2013) — (w) Destin Daniel Cretton ALIEN (1979) — (w) Dan Obannon, Dan Obannon, Ronald Shusett (d) Ridley Scott ALIENS (1986) — (w) James Cameron, David Giler, Walter Hill, James Cameron (d) James Cameron THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — (w) Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy (d) Paul Greengrass FULL METAL JACKET (1987) — (w) Gustav Hasford, Stanley Kubrick, Michael Herr, Gustav Hasford (d) Stanley Kubrick PHILOMENA (2013) — (w) Jeff Pope, Steve Coogan, Martin Sixsmith (d) Stephen Frears HOW I LIVE NOW (2013) — (w) Meg Rosoff, Jeremy Brock, Penelope Skinner, Tony Grisoni (d) Kevin Macdonald ELYSIUM (2013) — (w) Neill Blomkamp DIE HARD (1988) — (w) Roderick Thorp, Jeb Stuart, Steven E De Souza (d) John Mctiernan STAR WARS (1977) — (w) George LucasSCRIPTS
Study the script: DEATH AT A FUNERAL (2007) — Dean Craig Study the script: PRISONERS (2013) — Aaron Guzikowski Study the script: SHORT TERM 12 (2013) — Destin Daniel Cretton Study the script: ALIEN (1979) — Dan Obannon, Dan Obannon, Ronald Shusett Study the script: ALIENS (1986) — James Cameron, David Giler, Walter Hill, James Cameron Study the script: THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy Study the script: FULL METAL JACKET (1987) — Gustav Hasford, Stanley Kubrick, Michael Herr, Gustav Hasford Study the script: PHILOMENA (2013) — Jeff Pope, Steve Coogan, Martin Sixsmith Study the script: ELYSIUM (2013) — Neill Blomkamp Study the script: DIE HARD (1988) — Roderick Thorp, Jeb Stuart, Steven E De SouzaSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 3) - Framing Ripley ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 2) - The Ensemble ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 1) - The Visual Strategies ▶ How does Ripley take control in Alien? ▶ Ripley invades Ash's space in Alien ▶ Facehugger attacks Ripley in Alien DIE HARD: integrating inserts in the action Character Introductions 002: Hans GruberLINKS
Read: Scriptshadow: GSU!!! YouTube: Midpoint from HOW I LIVE NOW YouTube: DEATH AT A FUNERAL trailer Read: Bruce Block's The Visual Story: Creating the Visual Structure of Film, TV and Digital Media Read: RestorationRELATED EPISODES
DZ-01: Do Screenplay Gurus win you Oscars? DZ-07: On Rewriting - How much Bull is left in the Hustle?———
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Tue, 08 Jul 2014 - 140 - DZ-09: Characterising Introductions
Listen if you want your character introductions to pop!
Stu and Chas argue about different techniques for introducing characters and whether character descriptions are even necessary. This is important for writers, as we only have words to compensate for the whole range of cinematic expression. And so Chas and Stu explore techniques like introducing characters through action, having other people discuss the character first, ensuring the introduction represents the character's goal/flaw/theme, and many more.
The scripts Stu and Chas tackle are... [takes a deep breath]... PIRATES OF THE CARIBBEAN: THE CURSE OF THE BLACK PEARL, BLADE, THE DARK KNIGHT, the BREAKING BAD pilot, GIRL WITH THE DRAGON TATTOO, BLADE RUNNER, CHILDREN OF MEN, THE WRESTLER, THE SIXTH SENSE, MISS CONGENIALITY, LOCK STOCK & TWO SMOKING BARRELS, AMELIE, THE WOLF OF WALL STREET, FIGHT CLUB, ROCKY, JAWS, CABIN IN THE WOODS, and (mutters under breath) STAR WARS.
Is that it? Probably missed some. Bugger. Oh well. Have a listen and let us know.
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LINKS
YouTube: Captain Jack Sparrow's intro YouTube: Blade Opening Scene YouTube: The Dark Knight Bank Robbery Scene YouTube: Miss Congeniality Opening YouTube: Children of Men Opening YouTube: The Head, the Tail, the Whole Damn Thing YouTube: Introduction of Amelie's parents (in French, no subtitles) Read: Jane Espenson: That's 'jack-assity', not Jack Cassidy———
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Mon, 23 Jun 2014 - 139 - DZ-08: Status Transactions
Listen to make your character relatinships more dynamic.
Stu and Chas explore an idea they both came across studying theatre: status and by extension (or juxtaposition) power. Is a story where a character changes status or experiences loss (or gains) in power more compelling?
In order to explore this source of drama, Stu and Chas limit themselves to scenes where the status or power of a character shifts without the writer resorting to violence or revelation or plot.
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FILMS
THE KING'S SPEECH (2010) — (w) David Seidler (d) Tom Hooper THE PRINCESS BRIDE (1987) — (w) William Goldman, William Goldman (d) Rob Reiner THE SOCIAL NETWORK (2010) — (w) Aaron Sorkin (d) David Fincher TRUE GRIT (2010) — (w) Ethan Coen, Joel Coen, Charles Portis (d) Joel Coen, Ethan CoenSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE KING'S SPEECH (2010) — David Seidler Study the script: THE PRINCESS BRIDE (1987) — William Goldman, William Goldman Study the script: THE SOCIAL NETWORK (2010) — Aaron Sorkin Study the script: TRUE GRIT (2010) — Ethan Coen, Joel Coen, Charles PortisLINKS
Read: People Triggers: Keith Johnstone's Status Transaction Read: People Triggers: Status Transactions and the Actor Read: Taking Stock - The Theatre of Max Stafford-Clark YouTube: Battle of Wits from THE PRINCESS BRIDE YouTube: Sean Parker restaurant scene from THE SOCIAL NETWORK YouTube: The Art of Negotiating a Dispute from TRUE GRIT YouTube: Cypher's Death in THE MATRIX YouTube: Agent Kujan realises the truth in THE USUAL SUSPECTS YouTube: Get Busy Livin' scene from THE SHAWSHANK REDEMPTION YouTube: Joey tries to make peace in A HISTORY OF VIOLENCE YouTube: Santa's Little Helpers scene in COLLATERAL———
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Tue, 10 Jun 2014 - 138 - DZ-07: On Rewriting - How much Bull is left in the Hustle?
Listen to learn how impactful rewriting can be.
Stu and Chas look at AMERICAN BULLSHIT (the 2010 Black List spec script by Eric Warren Singer) and the film it became… AMERICAN HUSTLE (co-written and directed by David O'Russell), which garnered 10 Oscar nominations in 2014.
With both Singer and O'Russell credited on HUSTLE, Stu and Chas explore what O'Russell changed and what stayed the same from BULLSHIT. By comparing the spec with the eventual on-screen product, Stu and Chas gain valuable insights into the re-writing process: character, theme, voice over, back story and more.
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FILMS
AMERICAN HUSTLE (2013) — (w) David O Russell, Eric Warren Singer (d) David O RussellSCRIPTS
Study the script: AMERICAN HUSTLE (2013) — David O Russell, Eric Warren SingerLINKS
Script: AMERICAN BULLSHIT by Eric Warren Singer Read: The Q&A with Jeff Goldsmith: 7th Annual Screenwriting Nominees Q&A Read: The 2010 BLACK LIST - AMERICAN BULLSHIT is 8th, in between MARGIN CALL and ARGO YouTube: American Hustle - Science Oven* Read: Line by Line: No passive verbs! by Khrob Edmonds Read: DGA Quarterly: Picturing Life with David O Russell———
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Mon, 26 May 2014 - 137 - DZ-06: Key Scenes and Unlocking the Story
Listen if you want to understand how a single key scene between protagonist and antagonist can unlock the entire structure of your story!
Can one scene be the key to unlocking the whole story?
Stu and Chas are joined once again by the inestimable Stephen Cleary to explore his idea of 'key scenes'. Scenes like the diner scene in HEAT. Or the boardroom showdown in MARGIN CALL. These scenes are not only key to a film, they can also be key to developing a story. Why? Stephen's observation is that if you put your protagonist and antagonist in a scene together for a period of time and they will instinctively play out the beats of your whole story... if you have the characters figured out.
An interesting theory and one we put to the test. In addition to HEAT and MARGIN CALL, we look at scenes and sequences from THE GODFATHER, NOTTING HILL, THE DARK KNIGHT, THE RAID 2: BERANDAL and Stu avoids mentioning STAR WARS by working in EMPIRE STRIKES BACK instead.
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FILMS
HEAT (1995) — (w) Michael Mann MARGIN CALL (2011) — (w) Jc ChandorSCRIPTS
Study the script: HEAT (1995) — Michael Mann Study the script: MARGIN CALL (2011) — Jc ChandorSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
▶ Why the fight choreography of Arnie's TOTAL RECALL is so good (and so brutal).LINKS
YouTube: The Dark knight: The Joker's interrogation Read: YouTube: The Godfather: Corleone Family Flashback Read: Michael Mann's Heat: How Research Created a Classic Thriller YouTube: Mann Made From LA Takedown To Heat Part 1 YouTube: Margin Call - Be First, Be Smarter or Cheat———
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Mon, 12 May 2014 - 136 - DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions
Listen to learn about the most powerful tool in screenwriting: narrative POV.
Stu and Chas delve into audience point of view - not character point of view! Does your audience know more, less or the same as your characters? And does changing this within a scene trigger or heighten the desired emotional response?
To test this theory, we look to the genre that changes the audience's point of view the most: thrillers. So we analyse scenes and sequences from THE BOURNE SUPREMACY, ZERO DARK THIRTY and ARGO. As usual though, we can't help ourselves and also consider scenes from GROUNDHOG DAY, PHILOMENA and - of course - Stu refers to STAR WARS.
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FILMS
THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — (w) Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy (d) Paul Greengrass ZERO DARK THIRTY (2012) — (w) Mark Boal (d) Kathryn Bigelow ARGO (2012) — (w) Chris Terrio (d) Ben AffleckSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy Study the script: ZERO DARK THIRTY (2012) — Mark Boal Study the script: ARGO (2012) — Chris TerrioLINKS
YouTube: Hitchcock on Mastering Cinematic Tension Read: Lumina: New Thoughts in Screenwriting Prompted by the Thriller by Stephen Cleary YouTube: Beach and Goa car chase from THE BOURNE SUPREMACY YouTube: The bomb goes off from ZERO DARK THIRTY YouTube: Third checkpoint from ARGO airport sequence———
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Sun, 27 Apr 2014 - 135 - DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette
Listen if you want to make you endings great!
Stu and Chas are joined by their first guest – illustrious script developer and producer Stephen Cleary – to explore how certain films can trigger an outpouring of emotion from the audience. Turns out that Aristotle may have figured it out a few thousand years ago and called it Catharsis.
To examine how Catharsis can be triggered by a sequence of fixed beats, Stu, Chas and Stephen zone in on the last few pages of FIELD OF DREAMS, TOY STORY 3 and SE7EN. And Stu brings up FROZEN. Again.
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FILMS
FIELD OF DREAMS (1989) — (w) Phil Alden Robinson, Wp Kinsella (d) Phil Alden Robinson TOY STORY 3 (2010) — (w) Michael Arndt, John Lasseter, Andrew Stanton, Lee Unkrich (d) Lee Unkrich SE7EN (1995) — (w) Andrew Kevin Walker (d) David FincherSCRIPTS
Study the script: FIELD OF DREAMS (1989) — Phil Alden Robinson, Wp Kinsella Study the script: TOY STORY 3 (2010) — Michael Arndt, John Lasseter, Andrew Stanton, Lee Unkrich Study the script: SE7EN (1995) — Andrew Kevin WalkerLINKS
Script: FROZENby Jennifer Lee - Last 10 pages. For educational purposes only Script: FIELD OF DREAMS by Phil Alden Robinson -- Last 5 pages. For educational purposes only Script: SE7EN by Andrew Kevin Walker -- Last 18 pages. For educational purposes only YouTube: Field of Dreams -- "Ray meets his father" (Youtube) YouTube: Field of Dreams -- "You're not invited" (Youtube) YouTube: Se7en - "The Box" (Youtube) Read: Scriptchat Archives———
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Mon, 14 Apr 2014 - 134 - DZ-03: Making Unlikeable Protagonists Compelling
Listen if you want to make audiences care about deeply flawed protagonists!
In this episode, Stu and Chas try to work out what stops a-holes protoganists from pushing the audience out of the movie.
To work this out, we tackle the first 20 pages of HOT FUZZ, AS GOOD AS IT GETS and GROUNDHOG DAY. And we break down how in each script the protagonist's flaw is stated out loud to the audience and to the character within a handful of pages. And how this changes the question from "what's wrong with this guy?" to "how will he ever change?".
The other tools we discuss:
The yin-yang oscillation — the peaks and troughs in our sympathy, where cruelty is followed by a beat that complicates it (e.g. the dog peeing before Melvin throws it down the chute, so we get the motivation even as we reject the act). Laugh at, not just with — making the unlikable bits so extreme the audience laughs rather than recoils. The GRAN TORINO trick. Steve Kaplan's definition of comedy: an ordinary person struggling against insurmountable odds without the skills to win, who never gives up hope. How a protagonist doesn't always have to be compelling. In HOT FUZZ it's the situation — the car crash you can see coming.We also wander through DUE DATE, SUPERBAD, ANCHORMAN's pantsless desk-scotch, GRAN TORINO's weaponised racism, DUCKMAN, GIRLS, THE OFFICE (David Brent the Office versus the US Steve Carell) and the British tradition of letting its leads be proper a-holes.
PS: In ANCHORMAN... um... they renamed the character of Alicia Corningstone to Veronica Corningstone (Christina Applegate) in the shooting script. We keep on referring to her as Alicia as that is what she is referred to in the screenplay. Sorry.
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"Stating the flaw early sets up a dramatic question for the audience... The question becomes: *when will he realize* or *how will he realize?* And you're actually wanting to see how they will ultimately change." — Stu Willis @ 00:25:52
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:35 – What Makes an Unlikable Protagonist Compelling? 00:04:01 – › Steve Kaplan's comedy definition and why flaws must be visible 00:07:35 – › Four craft tools for building audience empathy with a flawed lead 00:09:19 – HOT FUZZ 00:13:35 – › The yin-yang structure: building up then deconstructing the hero 00:17:21 – › Stating the flaw early sets the dramatic question 00:20:12 – › Fish out of water as the engine of comedy and compulsion 00:27:01 – AS GOOD AS IT GETS 00:30:22 – › Why the dog scene must be funny, not repellent 00:33:44 – › How performance beats in big print control audience sympathy 00:39:11 – › Carol as the one person who can handle Melvin 00:44:47 – › Small acts of care as the first signs of change 00:50:38 – GROUNDHOG DAY 00:55:29 – › Bold structural decisions in the opening 00:59:39 – › Foreshadowing the trap without revealing it 01:03:00 – › Why the first 20 minutes work without a conventional hook 01:08:10 – Key Learnings & Wrap UpFILMS
HOT FUZZ (2007) — (w) Edgar Wright, Simon Pegg (d) Edgar Wright AS GOOD AS IT GETS (1997) — (w) James L Brooks, Mark Andrus, Mark Andrus (d) James L Brooks GROUNDHOG DAY (1993) — (w) Danny Rubin, Harold Ramis, Danny Rubin (d) Harold Ramis GRAN TORINO (2008) — (w) Nick Schenk, Nick Schenk, Dave Johannson (d) Clint Eastwood ANCHORMAN: THE LEGEND OF RON BURGUNDY (2004) — (w) Will Ferrell, Adam Mckay (d) Adam MckaySCRIPTS
Study the script: HOT FUZZ (2007) — Edgar Wright, Simon Pegg Study the script: AS GOOD AS IT GETS (1997) — James L Brooks, Mark Andrus, Mark Andrus Study the script: GROUNDHOG DAY (1993) — Danny Rubin, Harold Ramis, Danny Rubin Study the script: ANCHORMAN: THE LEGEND OF RON BURGUNDY (2004) — Will Ferrell, Adam MckayLINKS
Website: Steve Kaplan Comedy Website: Epiphany YouTube: Hot Fuzz - Opening Montage - Angel is Awesome! YouTube: Hot Fuzz - Angel is promoted to the country YouTube: Hot Fuzz - Janine tells Angel his flaw YouTube: Harold Ramis on the Metaphor of Groudhog Day Read: Jason Reitman's Live Reading of Groundhog Day YouTube: Groundhog Day - Re-shot Opening YouTube: Groundhog Day - Clip Read: Scriptnotes Podcast on Groundhog Day YouTube: ANCHORMAN - Ron Hits on Veronica———
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Mon, 31 Mar 2014 - 133 - DZ-02: Do the Screenplay Gurus score big at the Box Office?
Listen if you need to know which guru frameworks actually deliver in Act Three.
Part 2 of our Screenplay Gurus series takes the same lens from Part 1 — Vogler, Snyder and Hauge — and points it at the two highest-grossing original films of 2013: GRAVITY and FROZEN. No franchise, no sequel. Just the two films that audiences went to see in the biggest numbers that year, and the question of what their scripts actually look like when you run them against the guru formulas.
The short answer is: both films cleave much more closely to these structures than the award-season dramas we looked at in Part 1. Which is interesting — but not as interesting as how they deviate when you look more carefully.
GRAVITY maps onto Vogler's Hero's Journey in surprising depth: the umbilical tether as threshold crossing, Matt Kowalski as Obi-Wan, the hallucinated ghost in the pod giving the "use the Force" instruction. The structure isn't just present — it's legible, almost mythological. FROZEN brings a genuine dual-protagonist puzzle (who is actually driving the story — Anna or Elsa?) and a third act that plays out under its own rules rather than anybody's formula.
What starts to emerge is that the frameworks are more useful at some points than others. Vogler has real things to say about Act 3; Snyder's "finale — finish it" turns out to be pretty thin guidance for actually generating that emotional hit. And as Chas lands at the end of the episode: the three-act model itself might not be the useful unit. Sequences might be. Though you'll have to wait quite a few episodes until we tackle them!
The craft questions in this episode:
When a framework beat is present but compressed — a half-page refusal of the call, three lines of dialogue — what is it actually doing for the story? FROZEN has a protagonist who barely changes and a secondary character who changes enormously. Who is actually driving? Does it matter? If the three-act model makes Act 2 and Act 3 feel like a single blob, what happens if you think in sequences instead?We also go deep on the frameworks' different coverage of the Dark Night of the Soul — which Stu argues is less a formula beat and more a question every writer should be able to answer for their character. What is the lowest point? What does it take to get out of it? That turns out to be something these frameworks are, and aren't, equipped to help with.
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"I think as soon as you are stretching them in any way, they're losing their value as a rigid tool." — Chas Fisher @ 00:00:57
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:14 – Do Blockbusters Follow the Guru Formulas? 00:00:22 – › Why tentpole films suit archetypal structures better than biopics 00:02:18 – › How animation's iterative process shapes story before the page is final 00:07:20 – GRAVITY 00:10:37 – › Opening and closing images as the survival-rebirth mirror 00:14:13 – › The catalyst as herald announcement and its limits as a call to adventure 00:19:54 – › Debate sequence as escalating refusal to acknowledge danger 00:24:45 – › Where Act 1 breaks and why both Vogler and Snyder readings are valid 00:33:48 – › The mentor's tether as umbilical cord and threshold crossing 00:39:44 – › Midpoint: Ryan assumes Matt's voice and starts driving the story 00:44:12 – › All is lost, Dark Night of the Soul, and the ghost-of-Obi-Wan solution 00:48:56 – › Road back, resurrection in the water, and return with the elixir 00:54:40 – FROZEN 00:57:45 – › Who is the protagonist when the secondary character has the bigger arc 01:00:01 – › Long first act, dual characters, and the coronation as catalyst 01:04:34 – › Tests, allies, and the promise of the premise in the mountain sequence 01:07:06 – › Midpoint: Anna struck in the heart and the false peak of the plan 01:12:05 – › Where Vogler's ordeal and Snyder's bad-guys-close-in diverge 01:17:08 – › Resurrection, the act of true love, and the elixir Elsa receives 01:21:45 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:23:45 – Next Episode Preview & Sign OffFILMS
GRAVITY (2013) — (w) Alfonso Cuaron, Jonas Cuaron (d) Alfonso Cuaron FROZEN (2013) — (w) Jennifer Lee, Chris Buck, Jennifer Lee, Shane Morris (d) Chris Buck, Jennifer LeeSCRIPTS
Study the script: GRAVITY (2013) — Alfonso Cuaron, Jonas Cuaron Study the script: FROZEN (2013) — Jennifer Lee, Chris Buck, Jennifer Lee, Shane MorrisLINKS
Read: The Q&A with Jeff Goldsmith: Iron Man 3 Q&A YouTube: Framestore's jaw-dropping Gravity Show and Tell (YouTube) Read: The Q&A Podcast with Jeff Goldsmith on Frozen Read: Scriptnotes Podcast - Frozen with Jennifer LeeEPISODES IN THE SCREENPLAY GURUS SERIES
DZ-01: Do Screenplay Gurus win you Oscars? DZ-02: Do the Screenplay Gurus score big at the Box Office?———
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Mon, 17 Mar 2014 - 132 - DZ-01: Do Screenplay Gurus win you Oscars?
Listen if you want to know whether Blake Snyder, Michael Hauge and Christopher Vogler's structural theories actually apply to Academy Award-nominated screenplays
Three of the most widely read structure books in screenwriting — Snyder's Save the Cat, Vogler's The Writer's Journey, and Michael Hauge's Six Stages — all make essentially the same claim: this is how great films are built. In our debut episode, we run that claim against two Oscar-nominated films to see if it holds: PHILOMENA and DALLAS BUYERS CLUB.
We map both against Snyder, Hauge, and Vogler, looking for where the beats land, where they don't, and — more usefully — what those gaps reveal about how the films actually work. As Chas puts it: "the answer as to whether these structural theories apply is actually less important than what the act of testing them against great films teaches us
PHILOMENA turns out to be a dual-protagonist script that makes the frameworks interesting precisely because it doesn't fit cleanly.
DALLAS BUYERS CLUB seemingly has a cleaner structure — the A-plot is Ron Woodruff's drug-smuggling operation — but the more interesting structural question is the B-story: Stu identifies it as "the battle for Ron's soul," with Rayon and Eve staging Ron's transformation from a man "sick in both body and soul" into something else.
The structural question we keep returning to: if a great film breaks the rules, does that mean there are no rules, or that it found something better?
And we skim over a few other ideas: why we picked these films over other nominees, the problem with Page 12 catalysts, and whether "Save the Cat" moments are actually doing what Snyder says they are.
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"They aren't the Bible. They aren't the holy grail of screenwriting. You need to do more than read these books to become a screenwriter." — Chas Fisher @ 00:03:36
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:06 – Do Screenplay Gurus Win You Oscars? 00:02:25 – › The case for empirical analysis over guru formulas 00:04:18 – › Why these two Oscar nominees were chosen to test the theories 00:07:03 – PHILOMENA 00:08:56 – › Save the Cat mapped against a dual-protagonist script 00:15:37 – › Where the refusal of the call disappears into a flashback sequence 00:22:10 – › How escalating reveals replace conventional second-act structure 00:28:45 – › Fun and games, the midpoint, and a 16-page gap from Snyder's prescription 00:35:35 – › All Is Lost and Dark Night of the Soul across two protagonists 00:44:11 – › Why Hauge's percentages fit a dual-protagonist script better than Snyder's pages 00:51:31 – › Vogler's reward and road back as the stronger model for act three 01:01:16 – DALLAS BUYERS CLUB 01:06:04 – › The break into act two and the decision that happens off screen 01:11:36 – › Rayon, Eve, and the battle for Ron's soul as the B story 01:16:07 – › A bust-and-recovery rhythm replacing conventional midpoint structure 01:24:09 – › How escalating antagonism substitutes for a visible act-three break 01:30:26 – › Ron's personal victory as the only climax a biopic needs 01:33:02 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:35:30 – › Next episode: testing gurus on mainstream box office hitsFILMS
PHILOMENA (2013) — (w) Jeff Pope, Steve Coogan, Martin Sixsmith (d) Stephen Frears DALLAS BUYERS CLUB (2013) — (w) Craig Borten, Melisa Wallack (d) Jean Marc ValleeSCRIPTS
Study the script: PHILOMENA (2013) — Jeff Pope, Steve Coogan, Martin Sixsmith Study the script: DALLAS BUYERS CLUB (2013) — Craig Borten, Melisa WallackLINKS
Read: The Q&A Podcast with Jeff Goldsmith - Philomena Read: The Q&A Podcast with Jeff Goldsmith - Dallas Buyers Club Read: The Writer's Journey Structure by Christopher Vogler Read: Scrivener Read: Ingrid's Notes on THE WRITER'S JOURNEY Read: SM Worth links to a few different Scrivener Templates including one for the Hero's Journey Read: Save The Cat Beatsheet by Blake Snyder Read: The Five Key Turning Points Of All Successful Scripts by Michael HaugeEPISODES IN THE SCREENPLAY GURUS SERIES
DZ-01: Do Screenplay Gurus win you Oscars? DZ-02: Do the Screenplay Gurus score big at the Box Office?———
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Sat, 01 Mar 2014 - 131 - DZ-00: Welcome to Draft Zero
Listen if you're new to the podcast and want to understand our philosophy on screenwriting craft!
Welcome to Draft Zero. A message from 2019 to those starting with our first episodes dating from 2014. We’ve learned a lot in five years. So where do you begin?
Since launching our podcast, we’ve embarked on an ambitious mission: to enhance our writing skills by dissecting the very elements we grapple with in our own projects. From thematic structure to character development, we study successful films and scripts to glean insights that not only improve our own craft but also enable us to share valuable resources with our listeners.
Basically we do our homework and share it with you: leaving you with (hopefully!) golden nuggets.
Attention first-time listeners! We’d like to highlight that our episodes are not necessarily linear, nor do they follow a strict curriculum of lessons. Instead, we jump from topic to topic, tackling micro-elements such as inducing catharsis in scenes or mastering pacing through white space on the page. We understand that this might not suit everyone; thus, we encourage new writers to explore our website and the “Beginner’s Guide to Draft Zero,” where we’ve categorized our episodes into manageable themes like character work, scene development, and thematic exploration.
Remember, this podcast isn’t about following a structured course; it’s about opening up the conversation around screenwriting. Whether you are an aspiring writer or someone who enjoys dissecting media narratives, we do our best to provide insights. We’re constantly learning ourselves and sharing what we’ve discovered. The ultimate goal is to foster growth, creativity, and community within the field of filmmaking.
Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Rob, Matteo, Daniel and Carrie. They’re good humans.
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"We're trying to do your homework for you." — Chas Fisher @ 00:01:50
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00:00:10 – Introduction to Draft Zero 00:01:14 – Improving Our Writing Craft 00:04:18 – The Beginner's Guide and how to navigate the back catalogue 00:06:03 – Learning Through Experience 00:07:39 – The Importance of Getting Started 00:08:40 – Closing Thoughts for Listeners———
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Sat, 01 Feb 2014 - 130 - DZ-46: Structure & Point of View
Listen if you want to understand how narrative point of view can organise your entire story structure
Waaaaaaaaaay back in DZ-5, Stu and Chas examined how shifting narrative point of view (i.e. what the audience knows in relation to the characters on screen) heightens emotions in any given scene. We've now taken that micro idea and applied it to the macro: how can deciding what the audience knows and when in relation to the characters organise your story? Are whole sequences or even acts driven by the audience following a character, feeling concerned about a character, empathising with a character or being absorbed in the irony of knowing more than all the characters interacting on screen.
To tackle this topic, Stu and Chas dive in to films that make very conscious structural choices in relation to narrative POV, namely: GET OUT, DUNKIRK and the underrated German film THE LIVES OF OTHERS (with honourable mentions to LA CONFIDENTIAL and MANCHESTER BY THE SEA).
Wait till the end to hear poor Stu's mind absolutely blown in relation to the Kuleshov effect.
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00:06:21 – Introduction 00:10:57 – Manchester By The Sea 00:19:57 – Get Out 00:50:15 – Dunkirk 01:31:00 – The Lives of Others 02:11:32 – Wrap UpFILMS
DUNKIRK (2017) — (w) Christopher Nolan GET OUT (2017) — (w) Jordan Peele THE LIVES OF OTHERS (2006) — (w) Florian Henckel Von DonnersmarckSCRIPTS
Study the script: DUNKIRK (2017) — Christopher Nolan Study the script: GET OUT (2017) — Jordan PeeleSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Perp & Victim 2: Opening Kills in Horror (2000s+)LINKS
Watch: Vimeo: Get Out - Alternate Ending YouTube: Vox: The sound illusion that makes Dunkirk so intense Read: The Kuleshov effectRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions DZ-10: Midpoint Reversals and The Ride DZ-21: Scene Transitions and the Hook———
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Tue, 19 Dec 2017 - 129 - DZ-126: Secrets and Clues
Listen if you want to understand how hidden information drives character motivation and plot structure!
“Getting information puts your character in danger. And danger rewards your character with information." — One of three ideas we steal from game design in this episode. In this two part series, we talk about how secrets, clues and hidden information motivate characters and may (or may not) help you plot from a character perspective. Part One (this episode) looks at WAKE UP DEAD MAN; while Part Two looks at SIDE EFFECTS, and the pilot episode of SHRINKING.
The other two (related) ideas are:
Landmark information (characters just have it), Secret (they know it's there, need to unlock it), and Hidden (invisible until they pay the cost) Narrative velocity — are characters pushed forward or are they pulled forward?To that end, in this episode Stu, Chas and Mel start with the murder mystery (ostensibly the easier deep-dive): Rian Johnson’s WAKE UP DEAD MAN. But this is a complex film made even more complex by being a dual-protagonist film. Uhuh. Benoit Blanc is pulled through the story by his need to solve the case; Father Judd pushed through, against his will, to prove his innocence. Breaking down how that plays out — and why it matters for the kind of escalation each character can sustain — is the heart of the episode.
And inevitably we go on some tangents: pointers, plants, and underpinnings (from our Everything Everywhere All At Once episode) fair play in locked-room mysteries, Narrative POV (as always) and node-based plotting and what dungeon-crawl game design has to do with writing a web of clues.
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"Information puts players in danger and danger rewards characters with information, right? That's kind of the loop with like thriller game design." — Stu Willis @ 00:05:40
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:18 – What do we mean by Secrets and Clues? 00:04:17 – › Landmark, hidden, and secret information defined 00:08:10 – › Narrative velocity as push and pull for characters 00:13:22 – WAKE UP DEAD MAN 00:17:56 – › Key learnings preview: push-pull and narrative velocity 00:32:33 – › Mapping character awareness of secrets through WAKE UP DEAD MAN 00:58:21 – › Distinguishing secrets, clues, and hidden information 01:13:17 – › Benoit Blanc's character arc and the choice of grace 01:22:50 – KEY LEARNINGS & WRAP UP 01:24:22 – › Character drives how secrets are hidden and revealed 01:25:34 – › Narrative velocity and escalating stakes reveal characterFILMS
WAKE UP DEAD MAN (2025) — (w) Rian JohnsonSCRIPTS
Study the script: WAKE UP DEAD MAN (2025) — Rian JohnsonLINKS
Read: DIY & dragons: Landmark, Hidden, Secret Read: The Alexandrian » Advanced Node-Based Design Read: Ascii Dreams: The Quest for Quests (Part 1) Read: Ascii Dreams: The Quest for Quests (Part 2) Read: Mel's KNIVES OUT: A Rose by Any Other Name Would Not Clue Us InEPISODES IN THE SECRETS AND CLUES SERIES
DZ-126: Secrets and Clues DZ-127: Secrets and Clues 2 - The Cost of RevelationRELATED EPISODES
DZ-90: Setups & Payoffs in EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE———
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Tue, 05 May 2026 - 128 - DZ-125: Oscars One-shot - BLUE MOON
Listen if you want to understand how narrative POV, screenplay format, and dialogue craft can elevate a contained biopic into an Oscar-nominated film
BLUE MOON is a talky, period-drama that film about an obscure songer-writer in the 1940s. Yet, it attracted world-class talent AND Academy Award nominations, including for it's script. Join Chas & Mel as they explore how narrative POV, interweaving relationships, hooky dialogue, and even the screenplay format itself make the script for BLUE MOON so great.
While Stu is still on show and we are between the 2026 Oscar nominations and the actual ceremony, our patreons selected BLUE MOON for this one-shot and boy are Mel and Chas glad they did. They dive into many lessons learned in previous episodes, like our character-driven episode… or analysis of French scenes in Adolescence… or the story-telling power that comes from the audience knowing the ending from biopics.
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"When I say rules, I mean the prescriptive rules of when someone posts something on screenwriting and everyone goes *Oh, you broke all the rules*. I'm saying this is good. I'm saying most of those rules are suggestions or most of those rules are given to you when you are learning how to write for a reason." — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:38:42
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:32 – What Makes a Contained Biopic Compelling? 00:02:19 – Flashforward Insights: POV, French scenes, dialogue craft, and structure 00:04:32 – BLUE MOON: Plot Summary and Structural Overview 00:08:00 – › How script format signals emotional breaks in a real-time story 00:13:34 – Controlling narrative POV 00:17:13 – › Tragedy versus the life he would have chosen 00:24:09 – › Narrative POV as the film's core structural tool 00:27:49 – Using screenplay FORMAT to reflect the emotional story 00:31:56 – › French scenes and real-time spatial staging 00:35:40 – › How rule-breaking formatting signals emotional truth 00:39:27 – Interweaving relationships: Hart's Relationships as the A, B and C Stories 00:44:50 – › Hart and Rogers: the collision of artistic integrity and commercial success 00:49:14 – › Hart and Elizabeth: desire, repetition, and the just-not-that-way callback 00:53:08 – › The bar regulars as audience surrogates and mirror to Hart's self-awareness 00:56:46 – Repetition and pop culture references in dialogue 00:59:48 – › Repetition as lyrical structure in dialogue craft 01:03:49 – › Tonal variety and mixing registers in witty scripts 01:07:54 – Key Learnings 01:09:48 – › The hidden craft beneath real-time, single-location scripts 01:13:42 – › How cultural touchstones establish stakes without exposition 01:16:02 – Thanks patreons and Oscar-nominated listener!FILMS
BLUE MOON (2026) — (w) Robert Kaplow (d) Richard LinklaterLINKS
Read: BLUE MOON - Scene Headings BreakdownRELATED EPISODES
DZ-01: Do Screenplay Gurus win you Oscars? DZ-68: Using POV to structure KNIVES OUT DZ-118: ADOLESCENCE -- How Questions Create Dramatic Tension DZ-90: Setups & Payoffs in EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE DZ-35: Driving Characters or Character Driven? DZ-63: Tools for Better Dialogue 2 - Hook and Eye———
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Thu, 26 Feb 2026 - 127 - DZ-124: Making the Despicable Compelling
Listen if you need audiences to root for characters who do terrible things
Mel and Chas continue to explore what Noir (the genre) can teach writers of all other genres. In particular:
How to keep the audience on side of characters doing reprehensible things; How to control your audience understanding of those reprehensible actions; and Distinguishing between characters undergoing transformative arcs against discovering their true naturesIn finding the common craft tools of Noir over 100 years, this Part 2 looks at two modern noirs – DEVIL IN A BLUE DRESS (1995) and WOMAN OF THE HOUR (2024) – after Part 1 looked at the classic DOUBLE INDEMNITY and THE LONG GOODBYE.
Despite Chas claiming to have edited this episode it was, in fact, Chris Walker who saved the day and got this done. Thanks Chris.
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"I think these films have got really strong control over the questions and that's how they get us to follow, compelling us to follow characters who are doing terrible things." — Chas Fisher @ 01:06:08
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Using noir as a lens 00:01:56 – DEVIL IN A BLUE DRESS 00:07:06 – › Period setting, race, and noir's embedded worldview 00:10:30 – › Voiceover as access to morally compromised decisions 00:22:02 – › How the film justifies rooting for Easy's transgressions 00:29:09 – › Character worldview versus film worldview in noir 00:31:33 – WOMAN OF THE HOUR 00:37:15 – › Why WOMAN OF THE HOUR qualifies as noir 00:43:25 – › The system as collective villain enabling the killer 00:53:12 – › Depiction without endorsement, empathy without sympathy 01:04:30 – Key Learnings 01:08:50 – Thank you Patreons!FILMS
DEVIL IN A BLUE DRESS (1995) — (w) Carl Franklin, Walter Mosley (d) Carl Franklin WOMAN OF THE HOUR (2024) — (w) Ian Mcdonald (d) Anna KendrickLINKS
Shot Zero: Noir shots in WOMAN OF THE HOUREPISODES IN THE NOIR SERIES
DZ-123: Flawed Characters in Noir DZ-124: Making the Despicable CompellingRELATED EPISODES
DZ-123: Flawed Characters in Noir DZ-03: Making Unlikeable Protagonists Compelling DZ-110: Voiceover———
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Fri, 30 Jan 2026 - 126 - DZ-123: Flawed Characters in Noir
Listen if you want to write morally compromised characters without endorsing their choices.
In this two part series, Mel and Chas use Noir (the genre) as a lens to interrogate flawed characters. How can characters doing reprehensible things still engage audiences? How can you ensure representation isn’t endorsement? And whether these characters undergo transformative arcs, or simply reveal their true natures?
Part 1 (DZ-123) focuses on two (now classic) noirs: DOUBLE INDEMNITY and THE LONG GOODBYE.
While Part 2 (DZ-124) looks at two more contemporary examples DEVIL IN A BLUE DRESS and WOMAN OF THE HOUR.
Despite Chas claiming to have edited this episode it was, in fact, Chris Walker who saved the day and got this done by the end of 2025. Thanks Chris.
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"This is the philosophical question, right? When you get drunk, do you change what you do or do you simply allow your inhibitions to fall and do what you would normally want to do?" — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:42:04
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:17 – Flawed Characters and Noir 00:03:06 – › Writing morally compromised characters without endorsing their worldview 00:08:41 – › Defining film noir as genre, style, and worldview 00:14:27 – › Noir's reach across decades of screenwriting 00:16:40 – DOUBLE INDEMNITY 00:21:41 – › Diegetic confession and its structural function 00:27:17 – › Telling the audience the crime upfront removes justification burden 00:32:24 – › How everyman framing sustains complicity in a morally bankrupt protagonist 00:41:43 – › Whether morally compromised characters genuinely change or self-reveal 00:49:17 – › Film worldview versus character desire: crime without endorsement 00:53:38 – THE LONG GOODBYE 01:00:17 – › Save the cat: establishing a morally complex protagonist 01:06:26 – › Transgression, personal code, and the inevitability of noir failure 01:14:13 – › Character change versus worldview shift at the ending 01:21:15 – Wrap Up and Key LearningsFILMS
DOUBLE INDEMNITY (1944) — (w) Raymond Chandler, James M Cain, Billy Wilder (d) Billy Wilder THE LONG GOODBYE (1973) — (w) Leigh Brackett, Raymond Chandler (d) Robert AltmanSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE LONG GOODBYE (1973) — Leigh Brackett, Raymond ChandlerSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Blocking a Sneak: DOUBLE INDEMNITYLINKS
Read: Mel's A Brief History of Queer Coding in Film Part 1EPISODES IN THE NOIR SERIES
DZ-123: Flawed Characters in Noir DZ-124: Making the Despicable Compelling———
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Wed, 31 Dec 2025 - 125 - 1dZ-01: Arkyvrs - A Mansion Most Vile - Ep1
What happens when a group of filmmakers play a ragtag group of filmmakers in a gritty sci-fi horror?
"Ignite the fire within and explore unknown territory" - Werner Herzog.
This episode is unusual, even by Draft Zero standards. It's an "Actual Play Podcast" where Chas, Stu, & Mel are joined by Kim Ho and Luke Clark to play MOTHERSHIP, the sci-fi horror game we talked about in episodes DZ-121 and DZ-122. Stu is the GM while everyone else is a ragtag crew of freelance filmmakers. We debrief the experience (so far) at the end of the episode)
Mel plays Zara, the glamorous face of the operation. Chas plays Winston, the cynical and egoistical "photojournalist". Kim is Cal, the scrappy scrounger and sound recordists, while Luke is Tarsos the steadfast producer of the group. The crew are enlisted to record a sensationalist report on a missing corporate president before the mercenary retrieval team arrives.
And yeah, this means we're soft-launching yet another project that's called 1dZ, which looks at how we can use tools from ttrpgs in screenwriting… and vice versa.To get future episodes go to: http://www.1d-zero.com/
00:00:11 - Intro for DZ Listeners00:01:51 - Meet the Snortin' Betsy00:06:22 - A Mansion Most Vile (Ep 1)01:52:32 - Debrief through TOMBS
CHAPTERSRELATED EPISODES
DZ-121: Escalating Antagonism 1: SinnersDZ-122: Escalating Antagonism 2: Rebel Ridge + Meet the ParentsLINKS
Tuesday Knight GamesJoshua Kramer: A Mansion Most VileAlewood Games: ArkyvrNobody Wake the BugbearCampaign SuppliesMore Draft Zero is brought to you more often by our awesome Patreons. Especially Lily, Paulo, Alexandre, Malay, Jennifer, Thomas, Randy, Jesse, Sandra, Theis, and Khrob.
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Sun, 26 Oct 2025 - 124 - DZ-122: Escalating Antagonism Across Genres
Listen to learn how thinking of your hero as the horror (for your villains) makes your script dynamic.
In this episode Chas, Stu and guest Kim Ho continue their exploration into the power(s) of antagonism and how focusing on them can develop story.
While Part 1 looked at the horror film SINNERS, in Part 2 we venture into genres beyond horror with the action-thriller REBEL RIDGE, and the comedy classic MEET THE PARENTS.
To both these films we apply the generative story framework TOMBS (Transgression – Omens – Manifestation – Banishment – Slumber) and are surprised at just how well it maps. TOMBS comes from the MOTHERSHIP sci-fi horror table-top role-playing game. Which we love.
We explore how TOMBS, and thinking about antagonism in general, allows writers to deepen their understanding of their characters, their relationship of the heroes with the antagonists, and generate story fuel in a way that escalates the story.
We discuss how thinking of your hero as the horror for your villains helps everything become more dynamic.
Oh, and we talk about launching an actual play podcast. Which is happening. Stay tuned!
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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"There's a great line from Don Johnson later where he says, the deal was fair. The issue is that you felt that you were allowed to offer it. He tells him that he has transgressed against the rules of the laws or the rules of this system of this world." — Chas Fisher @ 00:12:09
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:12 – Escalating Antagonism Part 2 00:03:29 – REBEL RIDGE 00:09:30 – › Writing loglines from the antagonist's perspective 00:14:36 – › Tombs cycle maps onto hero and villain escalation 00:25:07 – › Solve, survive, save structure in action films 00:33:16 – › Self-restraint as survival within systemic corruption 00:45:30 – MEET THE PARENTS 00:51:55 – › Greg's lying as the true transgression engine 00:57:41 – › Structural turning points and escalating disaster beats 01:01:28 – › Jack versus Greg's insecurity as twin sources of antagonism 01:19:33 – › Applying TOMBS structure to map omens and manifestation 01:30:29 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:34:38 – › Mapping antagonism sources to escalate story conflict 01:38:53 – › Expanding beyond Western storytelling structures 01:41:38 – Thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
REBEL RIDGE (2024) — (w) Jeremy Saulnier MEET THE PARENTS (2000) — (w) Jim Herzfeld, John Hamburg (d) Jay RoachLINKS
IMDB: Kim Ho Explore: Mothership YouTube: The Philosophy of Final Destination Read: The Philosophy of Horror or Paradoxes of the Heart by Noël Carroll YouTube: GinnyDI - "This Game used 5 steps to scare the crap out of me" Listen: 1dZ-01: Arkyvrs - A Mansion Most Vile - Ep1EPISODES IN THE ESCALATING ANTAGONISM SERIES
DZ-121: Escalating Antagonism in SINNERS DZ-122: Escalating Antagonism Across GenresRELATED EPISODES
DZ-49: Antagonists! 1 - vs Humans———
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Wed, 01 Oct 2025 - 123 - DZ-121: Escalating Antagonism in SINNERS
Listen to strengthen your story by focusing on the antagonistic forces in your script.
We often struggle to develop the middle stages of a story. Could this be because we focus on our protagonists’ journeys and plot structure more than on how the antagonistic powers are awakened, wronged, discovered, gathering strength and revealing themselves?
In this episode, Chas and Stu are joined by professional screenwriter and playwright Kim Ho to explore how a generative story cycle (from tabletop role-playing game MOTHERSHIP) can be used to develop stories, not just write them better. This cycle is TOMBS: Transgression – Omens – Manifestation – Banishment – Slumber. Kim also contrasts this cycle with the Onset, Discovery, Confirmation, Confrontation cycle identified by horror philosopher Noel Carroll, as well as the philosophy of the FINAL DESTINATION franchise as analysed by The Morbid Zoo.
By applying the TOMBS cycle to Ryan Coogler’s amazing 2025 original feature SINNERS, we discover how focusing on the rising power of the various sources of antagonism can generate narrative fuel (and make your second Act sing); force your protagonists to Survive, Solve or Save (pick one); and how this escalation in antagonism can be mapped quite separately from your protagonists’ character arcs.
To prove that TOMBS does not just work for horror stories, we polled our patreons for which other genres to explore. Stay turned for the next episode (DZ-122) where we apply the TOMBS cycle to thriller REBEL RIDGE and comedy classic MEET THE PARENTS.
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"when you use those structures that are out there, they tend to be around plot and they tend to think primarily from the protagonist's point of view. And using this system, we can actually look at the forces of antagonism in a story." — Chas Fisher @ 00:06:31
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold open 00:00:18 – What is T.O.M.B.S? 00:06:31 – › How TOMBS shifts focus to antagonistic forces 00:15:22 – › Reading the five stages of the TOMBS cycle 00:24:12 – › Transgression as thematic and social boundary violation 00:31:04 – SINNERS 00:36:01 – › Delayed horror manifestation and the TOMBS framework 00:45:31 – › Mapping transgression and omens across dual antagonists 00:57:48 – › Confirmation, confrontation, and the stages of horror 01:08:09 – › Survive, solve, save as competing character objectives 01:17:51 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:23:51 – Thank you patreons!FILMS
SINNERS (2025) — (w) Ryan CooglerSCRIPTS
Study the script: SINNERS (2025) — Ryan CooglerLINKS
IMDB: Kim Ho Explore: Mothership YouTube: The Philosophy of Final Destination by the Morbid Zoo Read: The Philosophy of Horror by Noel CarrollEPISODES IN THE ESCALATING ANTAGONISM SERIES
DZ-121: Escalating Antagonism in SINNERS DZ-122: Escalating Antagonism Across GenresRELATED EPISODES
DZ-49: Antagonists! 1 - vs Humans———
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Fri, 29 Aug 2025 - 122 - DZ-120: Subtext is Overrated!
Listen if you're struggling to write subtext without it feeling forced!
Or, how focusing on good drama will result in good subtext. We often hear how subtext is important for good screenwriting. We're here to tell you it isn't. Good subtext is a result of good drama, and your focus should be on creating that good drama. But how?
In this episode, Chas Fisher and Stu Willis are joined by screenwriter and teacher Tom Vaughn (Winchester) to delve into the world of subtext.
We kick off the discussion by talking through Tom's article "Why Subtext is Overrated" and break down his core idea that subtext is a byproduct of character goals, tactics and fears.
We explore this further through close examination of "the other way" scene from MICHAEL CLAYTON, "the strudel" scene from INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS (both known for their subtext) and the "new years" sequence from THE SUBSTANCE.
Inevitably discussion also turns to the relationship of subtext to emotional truth, theme, symbolism, dramatic irony and filmmaker's subtext.
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"You can't market subtext, man." — Tom Vaughn @ 00:36:51
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CHAPTERS
00:00:20 – Intro: What is Subtext? 00:00:21 – Cold Open 00:18:59 – MICHAEL CLAYTON 00:23:18 – › How character tactics generate subtext organically 00:27:26 – › Scene structure breaks down three beats of deniability 00:35:25 – › Subtext requires narrative groundwork to land 00:42:59 – INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS 00:46:34 – › French scene structure and dramatic setup 00:53:38 – › Filmmaker subtext versus character-driven tension 01:08:35 – › Writing the score: action lines as emotional music 01:13:48 – THE SUBSTANCE 01:17:41 – › Originality vs. universality in thematic storytelling 01:23:42 – › Reading the script's literal big print as filmmaker subtext 01:35:46 – › Irony and denial as competing interpretations of the ending 01:42:23 – › Subtext through fear: the date scene as contrast 01:46:13 – Wrap up & Key Learnings 01:48:00 – › Two layers of subtext: character awareness vs. filmmaker control 01:49:18 – › Subtext as spectrum between explicit and implicit meaningFILMS
MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — (w) Tony Gilroy INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS (2009) — (w) Quentin Tarantino THE SUBSTANCE (2024) — (w) Coralie FargeatSCRIPTS
Study the script: MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — Tony Gilroy Study the script: INGLOURIOUS BASTERDS (2009) — Quentin Tarantino Study the script: THE SUBSTANCE (2024) — Coralie FargeatLINKS
Read: The New Literalism Plaguing Today's Biggest Movies Read: Emotional Truth Over Subtext: Unlocking Compelling Scenes in Your Screenwriting Website: Story and Plot YouTube: Raising the Stakes - What is Subtext?RELATED EPISODES
DZ-40: Tactics and Scenes DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston DZ-119: Final Character Choices & Great Endings———
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Fri, 01 Aug 2025 - 121 - DZ-119: Final Character Choices & Great Endings
Listen if you want to understand how to better dramatise a character's internal journey
In this episode, Stu and Chas focus solely on the final choices made by protagonists and how that reflects their character journey and successfully, or not, dramatises the internal.
We compare and contrast different uses of narrative POV in respect to these final choices. And in particular whether and when the audience is made aware of the options available to the character, the act of making the choice, and the consequences of the choice.
We breakdown examples from DUNGEONS & DRAGONS: HONOR AMONG THIEVES, FINDING NEMO, MICHAEL CLAYTON, PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN and TALK TO ME.
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"A character has to make the most difficult decision of their life, and it becomes the crisis because each alternative poses a loss as well as a gain. And so, therefore, characters have to weigh what really matters most to them." — Stu Willis @ 00:23:48
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Opening 00:00:18 – Why Final Choices? 00:03:49 – › Narrative point of view and the order of choice, decision, consequence 00:07:03 – › How withholding character decisions shapes audience perception 00:10:45 – DUNGEONS & DRAGONS 00:15:57 – › The hero's choice: want vs. need, self vs. family 00:19:09 – FINDING NEMO 00:23:30 – › Crisis decision, catharsis beats, and the anatomy of a powerful ending 00:28:45 – MICHAEL CLAYTON 00:33:26 – › The Snowpiercer moment: dramatising binary choice visually 00:40:37 – › Hero's choice made off-camera and revealed through Karen's perspective 00:48:36 – › Character arc, theme, and the cost of moral compromise 00:53:11 – PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN 00:58:28 – › Withheld plans and dramatic tension in the third act 01:05:52 – › Posthumous agency and the hero's choice after death 01:13:45 – › Logic problems and the power of cinema over narrative precision 01:16:38 – TALK TO ME 01:19:39 – › Story structure and setup of TALK TO ME 01:27:36 – › The withheld decisive act at the climax 01:35:11 – › Ambiguity versus clarity in the film's meaning 01:41:45 – Key Learnings 01:44:37 – › Setup work that empowers climactic decisions 01:50:13 – Thanks awesome patreons!FILMS
DUNGEONS & DRAGONS: HONOR AMONG THIEVES (2023) — (w) John Francis Daley, Jonathan Goldstein, Michael Gilio (d) John Francis Daley, Jonathan Goldstein FINDING NEMO (2003) — (w) Andrew Stanton, Bob Peterson, David Reynolds (d) Andrew Stanton, Lee Unkrich MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — (w) Tony Gilroy PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN (2020) — (w) Emerald Fennell TALK TO ME (2022) — (w) Danny Philippou, Bill Hinzman (d) Danny Philippou, Michael PhilippouSCRIPTS
Study the script: FINDING NEMO (2003) — Andrew Stanton, Bob Peterson, David Reynolds Study the script: MICHAEL CLAYTON (2007) — Tony Gilroy Study the script: PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN (2020) — Emerald FennellSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
The Gags of the Scene - Dungeons and Dragons Perp & Victim 2: Opening Kills in Horror (2000s+)LINKS
YouTube: Michael Arndt - What makes an insanely good ending? YouTube: Every Frame a Painting - Snowpiercer - Look Left or RightRELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette DZ-33: Protagonist vs Hero - Dawn of Character Function DZ-34: Game of Choices - Decision Making and Character Implications DZ-58: Game of Thrones - Character Exposition DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh———
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Wed, 18 Jun 2025 - 120 - DZ-118: ADOLESCENCE -- How Questions Create Dramatic Tension
Listen when you need tension without external stakes--subtext, stillness, and thematic weight do the work.
In this episode, Stu and Chas delve into the cultural phenomenon of ADOLESCENCE. We try to find the craft tools that have made the show so compelling and such a catalyst for conversation.
In particular, we breakdown how the show’s emphasis on questions creates tension: not just tension through plot, but tension through character, and ultimately tension through theme.
We analsyse the show episode-by-episode, and discuss how the overall structure skilfully shifts from a plot-heavy police procedural towards a thematic-heavy melodrama and the impact that has on our experience.
We discuss how the decision to shoot the show in a series of “oners” affects the writing and what tools we can take from that to apply to our own writing (even if we’re not writing it to be a one-shot): POV characters, handovers, French scenes, emotional events, and more.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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"The absence of plot does not mean the absence of tension." — Chas Fisher @ 00:00:00
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:13 – Why ADOLESCENCE? Craft tools behind a cultural phenomenon 00:03:35 – › Melodrama, stillness, and the emotional contract with audiences 00:07:28 – › Unity of time as a narrative constraint and creative tool 00:09:38 – EPISODE ONE: Did Jamie do it, the audience question vs character objectives 00:13:10 – › Every procedure scene tracks impact, not investigation 00:19:29 – › POV strategy withholds Jamie to centre Eddie's emotional event 00:27:35 – › Who is the protagonist when plot belongs to the detectives 00:32:18 – EPISODE TWO: School as world, motivation as a character question 00:36:03 – › Luke's emotional event with his son unlocks the plot 00:39:24 – › Melodrama broadens the world through shallow but purposeful characters 00:44:35 – › A dialogue scene resolves character questions and opens thematic ones 00:46:47 – EPISODE THREE: Briony and the forensic interview as character excavation 00:51:12 – › Win conditions are hidden when the goal is understanding, not confession 00:55:07 – › Jamie's rage, restricted access, and what we project onto him 00:57:49 – EPISODE FOUR: Social realism melodrama and a light plot engine 01:00:19 – › The van incident as a vehicle for Eddie's sense of agency 01:04:13 – › Responsibility, inherited anger, and the thematic endgame 01:09:05 – › Incomplete questions invite the audience to finish the argument 01:19:05 – Melodrama: Ordinary People, Big Emotion, and Genre as Emotional Contract 01:23:32 – Scene-Level Tools: POV, French Scenes, Handovers, and Tension Through Questions 01:30:51 – › Introducing characters before they appear controls audience questions 01:36:59 – › Handovers and French scenes solve pacing inside a continuous take 01:44:22 – › The point of view character of a scene is whoever is most impacted 01:51:12 – › Using a character question to resolve a plot problem 01:52:56 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:58:27 – Patreon ThanksSHOWS
ADOLESCENCE 1x1 — Philip Barantini (d), Jack Thorne, Stephen Graham (w) ADOLESCENCE 1x2 — Philip Barantini (d), Jack Thorne, Stephen Graham (w) ADOLESCENCE 1x3 — Philip Barantini (d), Jack Thorne, Stephen Graham (w) ADOLESCENCE 1x4 — Philip Barantini (d), Jack Thorne, Stephen Graham (w)LINKS
Watch: Crafting Adolescence's Tense One-Take Episodes with Stephen Graham via BAFTA Watch: The Making Of Adolescence: The One-Shot Explained Read: 'Adolescence' Episode 3 Script By Stephen Graham & Jack ThorneRELATED EPISODES
DZ-67: Writing Passive Protagonists & Melodrama DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston DZ-101: Oners - Creating Immediacy & Anchoring Action on the Page DZ-70: Joker & Melodrama———
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Thu, 01 May 2025 - 119 - DZ-117: Pulling Off Tonal Shifts
Listen if you want to write tonal pivots that land on the page without a director's toolkit.
Following on from our episodes on establishing tone through action lines and through character, this is what we have been building up to: how to pull off a tonal switch… that does NOT throw the audience out of the film. And, in particular, how to pull that off on the page when writers don’t have framing, lighting, music, editing, etc. at our disposal?
With that goal in mind, Mel and Chas dissect specific moments on the pages of SHAUN OF THE DEAD, SORRY TO BOTHER YOU and SWISS ARMY MAN.
While there are definite craft tools identified - rhythm of action lines, varying use of unfilmmables and metaphors, establishing language patterns - the two big takeaways are:
(1) pulling off a tonal shift takes a lot of setup; and (2) when the time comes, contrast on the page is key.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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"Not only does it allow us to accept the mother's death, but it allows them to really go for emotion because they've already taught us that throughout the film, there will be these moments." — Chas Fisher @ 00:00:00
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:25 – What do we mean by tonal shift? 00:08:35 – Distinguishing between genre shift and tonal shift 00:13:08 – Shaun of the Dead 00:45:41 – Sorry to Bother You 01:28:07 – Swiss Army Man 02:02:10 – Key learnings and wrap up 02:06:35 – Patreon thanksFILMS
SHAUN OF THE DEAD (2004) — (w) Simon Pegg, Edgar Wright (d) Edgar Wright SORRY TO BOTHER YOU (2018) — (w) Boots Riley SWISS ARMY MAN (2016) — (w) Daniel Kwan, Daniel ScheinertSCRIPTS
Study the script: SHAUN OF THE DEAD (2004) — Simon Pegg, Edgar Wright Study the script: SORRY TO BOTHER YOU (2018) — Boots Riley Study the script: SWISS ARMY MAN (2016) — Daniel Kwan, Daniel ScheinertSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Framing [between] Them: SHAUN OF THE DEADLINKS
YouTube: Every Frame A Painting - Edgar Wright - How to Do Visual ComedyEPISODES IN THE TONE SERIES
DZ-117: Pulling Off Tonal ShiftsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print DZ-107: Establishing Tone through Character———
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Mon, 31 Mar 2025 - 118 - DZ-116: Writing Physical Comedy
Listen to learn how formatting--white space, caps, dashes--becomes your comedy toolkit without a director.
Mel joins Chas to tackle physical comedy. We limited our homework selection to extended scenes (as opposed to moments and sight gags) in live action projects and – with the help of our Patreons – selected early sequences from BRINGING UP BABY, the pilot for HAPPY ENDINGS and that wonderful food poisoning scene in BRIDESMAIDS.
We discover how these incredible writers take their time (on the page) to set up geography, framing and running gags. We also get tips on judicious use ALL CAPS, ellipses and M-dashes to recreate visual gags… and when to just let a paragraph go long and draw attention to itself.
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"The words on the page and the repetition are mimicking the edit, so we can visualize the humor and the repetition of it." — Chas Fisher @ 00:19:03
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:19 – Writing Physical Comedy: Scope, Constraints, and Homework Selection 00:03:55 – › Defining screwball, farce, and slapstick as distinct forms 00:06:52 – › How three case studies represent different slapstick approaches 00:10:27 – BRINGING UP BABY 00:15:04 – › Slug lines as editing rhythm and geography 00:18:15 – › Repetition in action lines mirrors physical comedy beats 00:22:31 – › Camera direction versus character eyeline to frame visual gags 00:28:20 – › Script-to-screen reordering of physical comedy sequences 00:31:44 – Thank you, Arc Studio Pro! 00:34:34 – HAPPY ENDINGS PILOT 00:38:53 – › How tone is established through action lines and formatting 00:44:09 – › Setting up running gags early to fuel later physical beats 00:54:59 – › Directing the camera on the page to control comedic framing 00:58:15 – BRIDESMAIDS 01:02:11 – › Framing the BRIDESMAIDS food poisoning scene setup 01:08:00 – › How action lines build and escalate physical comedy on the page 01:20:03 – › When setup earns dialogue-only visual comedy 01:27:31 – Key learnings 01:33:56 – Thank you amazing Patreons!FILMS
BRIDESMAIDS (2011) — (w) Annie Mumolo, Kristen Wiig (d) Paul Feig BRINGING UP BABY (1938) — (w) Dudley Nichols, Hagar Wilde, Hagar Wilde (d) Howard Hawks GAME NIGHT (2018) — (w) Mark Perez (d) John Francis Daley, Jonathan GoldsteinSHOWS
HAPPY ENDINGS 1x1 "Pilot" — Anthony Russo, Joe Russo (d), David Caspe (w)SCRIPTS
Study the script: BRIDESMAIDS (2011) — Annie Mumolo, Kristen Wiig Study the script: BRINGING UP BABY (1938) — Dudley Nichols, Hagar Wilde, Hagar Wilde Study the script: GAME NIGHT (2018) — Mark PerezSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Small and Large Physical Comedy: BRINGING UP BABY The Game of the Scene - GAME NIGHT ▶ How is this oner from GAME NIGHT so seamless?RELATED EPISODES
DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace———
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Wed, 26 Feb 2025 - 117 - DZ-115: A Christmas Special - Rewatching & Rituals
Listen if you want to understand what makes holiday films enduring parts of our seasonal rituals!
In this “backmatter” episode of Draft Zero, Stu, Chas, and Mel Killingsworth embark on a festive exploration of what makes holiday films so engaging and so re-watchable that they can become part of our rituals. To that end, we breakdown the charm of of Christmas films like KISS KISS BANG BANG, RIDERS OF JUSTICE, and IT’S A WONDERFUL LIFE.
We discuss what defines a holiday movie, the power of nostalgia, the importance of ensembles to a sense of family, and how voiceover, snappy dialogue and intricate plots can make something rewatchable. For each of us, we see these films as gateways to introspection and shared experiences during the holidays.
And we are briefly joined by filmmaker (and friend of the podcast) Damien Cassar who talks us through the meaning of nostalgia and it’s relationship with the "pain of homecoming", and how Christmas/Holiday films provide comfort and a sense of belonging amid ever-changing societal dynamics.
Merry Christmas!
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"What makes it rewatchable is not the Christmas elements. Like that's sort of what makes it rewatchable are all of the structure. The fact that like a lot of good noir mysteries, you forget exactly how things get solved." — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:30:20
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:01:00 – What do we mean by Holiday Movies? 00:18:52 – Kiss Kiss Bang Bang 00:41:16 – Riders of Justice 01:03:45 – Sponsorship: Arc Studio Pro 01:06:30 – It's A Wonderful Life 01:48:37 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:51:03 – On Nostalgia 01:54:28 – Many thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
KISS KISS BANG BANG (2005) — (w) Brett Halliday, Shane Black (d) Shane Black RIDERS OF JUSTICE (2020) — (w) Anders Thomas Jensen IT'S A WONDERFUL LIFE (1946) — (w) Frances Goodrich, Albert Hackett, Frank Capra (d) Frank CapraSCRIPTS
Study the script: KISS KISS BANG BANG (2005) — Brett Halliday, Shane Black Study the script: IT'S A WONDERFUL LIFE (1946) — Frances Goodrich, Albert Hackett, Frank Capra———
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Mon, 23 Dec 2024 - 116 - DZ-114: Climaxes in CHALLENGERS
Listen to understand how withholding resolution can make your story great!
While Stu is on show, Mel and Chas sit down to analyse the meaning behind the ending of 2024's CHALLENGERS, especially when - upon reading the script - the most impactful moment of the ending on screen (for Chas in particular) is not written on the page.
Following on from episodes on Filmmakers Talking Directly To The Audience as well as previous explorations into Choices and Decisions (and hopefully serving as a prelude to our episode on Hero's Choice - aka DZ-119), Mel and Chas explore the choices the characters make in that final moment, what happens when filmmakers obscure character motivation, and ultimately how that final moment in CHALLENGERS impacts theme.
This conversation ends up being a deep exploration of what is the experience on the audience (and its impact on the perceived theme) when a story cuts out at the climax without further resolution.
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"It's nice that the climax of the movie is actually at the end of the movie like to me the movie climaxes at the point where it cuts to black which is awesome yeah." — Chas Fisher @ 00:13:10
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:24 – BREAKING DOWN THE ENDING OF CHALLENGERS 00:03:50 – › Plot summary and structural architecture of the film 00:08:48 – › How backstory layering builds dramatic tension in the final match 00:14:51 – Can one action line change everything? 00:19:36 – › Script vs screen: what the final point actually shows 00:27:35 – › Whose ending is it: Tashi's story vs the reunion embrace 00:33:42 – › Reading the tropes: why polyamory felt inevitable 00:39:41 – This episode is brought to you by Arc Studio Pro 00:42:29 – Giving characters decisions 00:47:46 – › Giving characters agency through deliberate decision-making 00:52:10 – Meta subtext 00:53:53 – Choices + feeling = theme? 00:55:17 – › Do the characters make choices in the final moment 01:00:25 – › Character feeling and what the film ultimately says 01:06:03 – Ending on the climax 01:09:27 – Key Learnings 01:15:59 – Thank you patreons!FILMS
CHALLENGERS (2024) — (w) Justin Kuritzkes (d) Luca GuadagninoSCRIPTS
Study the script: CHALLENGERS (2024) — Justin KuritzkesLINKS
Website: How that crazy final tennis ball POV tumbling scene in 'Challengers' was made Website: Challengers ending explained | Writer Justin Kuritzkes on epic final scene Sponsor: Arc Studio for $30 off a pro subscription!RELATED EPISODES
DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The Audience DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-119: Final Character Choices & Great Endings———
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Fri, 29 Nov 2024 - 115 - DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The Audience
Listen if you want to explore how you can make your creative hand visible through meta-storytelling and structural choices!?!
In our final (ha!) episode looking at Talking Directly to the Audience, we turn away from character-and-text based craft tools to look at other ways that filmmakers - whether they be directors, writers, editors, or anyone else - can make the audience feel their 'hand' more. To that end, Mel, Stu and Chas dive into ADAPTATION, STORIES WE TELL and THE FORTY-YEAR-OLD VERSION.
We discuss structure (in particular how to structure more meta stories), the influence of TikTok and YouTube in portraying character authenticity, how to set up scenes where your characters can actually debate what your story is really about., and get into the gritty of where "in the story world" the communication from the filmmakers is.
Ultimately, in exploring these three powerful films through this lens, we discover that these tools give filmmakers more control in conveying their theme. Quelle surprise.
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"I would guess that some of the most watched content in the world has people talking directly to the camera and that's stuff that people watch on YouTube." — Stu Willis @ 00:06:13
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:28 – The Meta of Meta 00:04:20 – › How filmmakers speak without breaking immersion 00:07:48 – › Mapping the craft levers for filmmaker-to-audience communication 00:11:01 – ADAPTATION 00:14:11 – › How filmmakers communicate through diegetic versus direct address 00:20:30 – › When fiction blurs with reality in meta-storytelling 00:29:23 – › Structural devices versus overt meta-communication across all three films 00:34:28 – › What the work wants from its audience 00:36:43 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:39:40 – Adaption (Part 2) 00:42:23 – STORIES WE TELL 00:44:24 – › Exposing the apparatus of documentary filmmaking 00:49:44 – › Reconstructed Super 8 footage and the ethics of misdirection 00:57:07 – › Sarah Polley's absence as subject and presence as author 01:07:55 – › Mapping diegetic control across the film's storytelling layers 01:12:13 – THE FORTY YEAR OLD VERSION 01:19:29 – › Black-and-white cinematography and the Woody Allen inversion 01:23:13 – › Locating the filmmaker's voice on the meta-storytelling spectrum 01:33:20 – › Extracting portable craft techniques from autobiographical filmmaking 01:43:39 – › Authenticity, truth, and what each film is ultimately arguing 01:48:14 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:50:48 – › Black-and-white, artifice, and meta-techniques as thematic anchors 01:56:27 – › Sound design, structural play, and further viewing recommendations 02:01:24 – Many thanks to our Patreons <3FILMS
ADAPTATION (2002) — (w) Charlie Kaufman, Susan Orlean (d) Spike Jonze STORIES WE TELL (2012) — (w) Sarah Polley THE FORTY-YEAR-OLD VERSION (2020) — (w) Radha BlankEPISODES IN THE TALKING DIRECTLY TO THE AUDIENCE SERIES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The AudienceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-53: Antagonists! 5 - vs Audience DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall———
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Sun, 22 Sep 2024 - 114 - DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall
Listen to understand how breaking the 4th wall directly involves the audience in a character's emotional present.
As part of our series on how filmmakers can directly communicate to the audience, we finally examine the most blatant tool of them all: when character look directly down the barrel of the camera… and thus look directly at us, the viewer. Chas, Stu and Mel take the craft tools/levers they identified in previous episodes and use them to examine the tv-version-of HIGH FIDELITY ("Top Five Breakups"), ABBOTT ELEMENTARY ("Attack Ad)") and - of course - FLEABAG.
By examining how “in-world” the camera is, who is talking, and whom the character is talking to (i.e. who we are in the relationship), we end up discovering how breaking the 4th wall can involve the audience in the emotional present of the character and also grants the character a degree of narrative control (a craft lever that can be dialled in and out).
Separately, in a Backmatter to this episode (which can be found on our Patreon page), Mel and Chas answer a listener question and take a deep dive into how breaking the 4th wall changes the RELATIONSHIP between you - the viewer - and character.
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"She's trying to work herself out in some ways. Like it's the reason a lot of people write in their diary or self-talk or do have a running monologue or encourage that. Like she's trying to understand and explain herself and in doing so maybe hopefully help herself." — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:35:50
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:16 – What is "barrelling"? or Breaking the Fourth Wall 00:05:32 – › Narrative control as a resource in fourth wall breaking 00:09:50 – › How voiceover levers apply to barrelling the camera 00:13:44 – HIGH FIDELITY: "Top Five Heartbreaks" 00:19:59 – › Fourth wall breaks as emotional present, not flashback 00:25:21 – › Rob's narrative control and unreliable self-knowledge 00:35:19 – › What Rob wants from the audience she's confiding in 00:37:32 – ABBOTT ELEMENTARY: "Attack Ad" 00:44:37 – › What each character wants when addressing the camera 00:49:27 – › The documentary crew's agenda and point of view 00:54:01 – › How the mockumentary form is extended and played with 00:59:29 – › Format rigidity compared across mockumentary shows 01:01:27 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 01:04:09 – FLEABAG: 01:05:22 – › Establishing Fleabag's conceit and season two structure 01:09:28 – › How fourth wall breaks become intrusive and uncontrolled 01:20:12 – › Running from and returning to the camera as emotional avoidance 01:31:45 – › Need versus want: what Fleabag seeks from the audience 01:37:34 – › Why breaking the fourth wall externalises the internal 01:40:54 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:43:38 – › Why granting narrative control limits fourth wall breaking 01:50:48 – Thank You Patreons!SHOWS
HIGH FIDELITY 1x1 "Top Five Heartbreaks" — Jeffrey Reiner, Jesse Peretz (d), Sarah Kucserka, Veronica West (w) ABBOTT ELEMENTARY 2x7 "Attack Ad" — Matt Sohn (d), Justin Tan (w) FLEABAG 2x4 — Harry Bradbeer (d), Phoebe Waller Bridge (w)LINKS
Sponsor: ArcStudio - $30 off a pro subscription!EPISODES IN THE TALKING DIRECTLY TO THE AUDIENCE SERIES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The AudienceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB———
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Wed, 31 Jul 2024 - 113 - DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB
Listen to learn how unreliable narrators shape storytelling through voiceover, structure, and control.
In this episode, Stu and Mel (sans Chas!) take a deep dive into FIGHT CLUB and its use of the unreliable narrator. This is a bridging episode between our previous episode on VOICEOVER and our forthcoming episode on TALKING TO CAMERA as Fight Club does both.
We dissect the film's disconnected sequence-driven structure and how the voiceover ’stitches’ the film together. And then we look at what makes ‘Jack’ an unreliable narrator and how his control over the storytelling impacts us.
Thanks to Chris Walker for his excellent editing this episode.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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"I mean, no wonder the manosphere jumped on this film, because it's all about men who don't take responsibility for their actions. And so they're like, that really resonates with me and how my life is not in my control, even though clearly Jack at this point has control over the entire narrative." — Stu Willis @ 00:34:44
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CHAPTERS
00:00:01 – Cold Open 00:00:20 – FIGHT CLUB 00:07:23 – › Voiceover temporality and the narrator's point of origin 00:09:22 – › Sequence-by-sequence breakdown of structural antagonists 00:21:08 – › How voiceover stitches loose sequences into unified story 00:24:57 – Unreliable Narrators 00:28:02 – › Fourth wall breaks as audience antagonism 00:33:07 – › Narrator's control over story presentation 00:39:37 – › The projectionist sequence as meta-narrative device 00:44:40 – › Unreliable narration, sympathy, and character agenda 00:49:09 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 00:54:07 – Many thanks to our Patrons!FILMS
FIGHT CLUB (1999) — (w) Chuck Palahniuk, Jim Uhls (d) David FincherSCRIPTS
Study the script: FIGHT CLUB (1999) — Chuck Palahniuk, Jim UhlsEPISODES IN THE TALKING DIRECTLY TO THE AUDIENCE SERIES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The AudienceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-53: Antagonists! 5 - vs Audience DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover———
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Tue, 02 Jul 2024 - 112 - DZ-110: Voiceover
Listen to explore how voiceover can set tone, reveal character, enhance empathy, and create tension.
How can you use Voiceover without it feeling like a cheat?
In this episode, we finally delve into the world of VOICEOVERS (as part of our larger series exploring craft tools that allow characters & storytellers to talk directly to the audience). Chas, Stu and Mel deep dive into the VERONICA MARS pilot, Disney’s THE EMPEROR’S NEW GROOVE, and the Michael Bay epic PAIN & GAIN.
In exploring what makes these particular examples of Voiceover great (and not feel like a cheat or a well-worn trope), we apply the four levers identified in our Part 1 (in particular ‘when in time is the Voiceover coming from’). In this episode we discover how Voiceover can set tone, reveal character motivations, enhance viewer empathy, or even create tension.
Don’t forget to check out the Backmatter (to this episode) answering Patreon Abigail’s question —
"I'm currently writing a screenplay where the twist relies on the audience believing the narrator is a different character until Act III. Thus, have been thinking a lot about casting and audience voice recognition, etc. Would be interested in hearing thoughts on this."
Thanks to Chris Walker for his excellent editing this episode.
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"The tone is huge in a noir show in particular. This is like a noir show set in high school. And the voiceover kicks that off and keeps it consistent all the way throughout." — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:10:33
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:23 – Voiceover craft levers to pull 00:03:48 – VERONICA MARS (Pilot) 00:07:15 – › How voiceover compresses narrative and sets tone 00:12:34 – › Who Veronica talks to and what she wants from the audience 00:19:41 – › Voiceover as a tool for revealing character motivation and lies 00:27:23 – › Cumulative effect of voiceover choices on tone and empathy 00:32:43 – THE EMPEROR'S NEW GROOVE 00:36:36 – › Voiceover as unreliable narrator and the low-point frame 00:40:27 – › Temporal origin of voiceover and its effect on character 00:44:08 – › Voiceover tense, omniscience, and empathy maintenance 00:49:53 – › Consistent voiceover strategy across the whole screenplay 00:54:11 – PAIN & GAIN 00:57:29 – › Multiple voiceover characters and their introduction pattern 01:02:29 – › Temporal origin of voiceovers and the court case frame 01:09:50 – › Voiceover as dramatic irony and audience positioning 01:24:28 – › Cumulative thematic effect of collective voiceover 01:31:30 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:33:19 – › Temporal origin of voiceover as the master lever 01:39:34 – Thanks Patreons!FILMS
THE EMPEROR'S NEW GROOVE (2000) — (w) David Reynolds, Mark Dindal, Chris Williams, Mark Walton (d) Mark Dindal PAIN & GAIN (2013) — (w) Christopher Markus, Stephen Mcfeely (d) Michael BaySHOWS
VERONICA MARS 1x1 "Pilot" — Mark Piznarski (d), Rob Thomas (w)LINKS
Listen: Backmatter for DZ-110: VoiceoverEPISODES IN THE TALKING DIRECTLY TO THE AUDIENCE SERIES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The AudienceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-18: Michael Bay - F*ing the Frame and P*ing the Page DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience———
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Fri, 31 May 2024 - 111 - DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience
Listen if you've wondered what a character actually wants when they're talking directly to the audience!?
What are the different ways a filmmaker can ask something of the audience?
Chas and Stu are joined by Mel in this prelude episode to upcoming episodes on Voiceover (DZ-110, DZ-111) and Breaking the 4th Wall (DZ-112). In this episode, we attempt to taxonomise the different ways filmmakers can ask something directly of their audience.
To this end, we identify 4 levers that can be pulled:
1. Diagetic to non-diagetic (in story world to outside story world) 2. Who is talking? From story-teller to a character 3. Whom are they talking to? Themselves or directly to the audience? 4. From when in time is the communication coming?
They then take these levers and ask a series of questions, including:
What does the communication want from the audience? Does the audience know who’s talking? How reliable is the information? How aware is who is communicating of the audience?They then apply these questions and levers to… deep breath…: STAR WARS, ROBOCOP, STARSHIP TROOPERS, KILLERS OF THE FLOWER MOON, MINORITY REPORT, CHILDREN OF MEN, NEVER HAVE I EVER, ARRESTED DEVELOPMENT, STRANGER THAN FICTION, DUNE, OPPENHEIMER, YELLOWJACKETS, HUSTLERS, THE OFFICE, MASTERCHEF, ZOMBIELAND, FLEABAG, PRETTY LITTLE LIARS, THE BIG LEBOWSKI, SPONTANEOUS, BLACKKKLANSMAN, AMERICAN FICTION, AMERICAN SPLENDOR, THE KILLER, VERONICA MARS, FIGHT CLUB, SHUTTER ISLAND, SIXTH SENSE, HAUNTING OF BLY MANOR. FALL OF THE HOUSE OF USHER, GOODFELLAS, EMPERORS NEW GROOVE, THE TRUMAN SHOW, HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER, DIE HARD, THE BIG SHORT, THE USUAL SUSPECTS, DERRY GIRLS, THE LAST JEDI, THE LAST DUEL, RASHOMON, BONES AND ALL, ARCHIVE 81, SANS SOLEIL, F IS FOR FAKE, THE PRINCESS BRIDE, THE BALLAD OF BUSTER SCRUGGS, JULIUS CAESAR, GUARDIANS OF THE GALAXY Vol. 1
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"If you don't have anything dramatic to say, don't say it at all." — Stu Willis @ 00:00:00
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:49 – Distinguishing talking directly to the audience 00:04:32 – Different levers to pull 00:09:20 – Who is communicating? 00:15:01 – › Mapping the spectrum from title cards to character narrators 00:20:37 – › When narration blurs the line between diegetic and meta 00:26:13 – Does the audience know who's talking? 00:29:47 – › What narrators want from their audience 00:32:21 – › Filmmakers speaking directly without breaking the fourth wall 00:40:00 – From when is the communication coming? 00:40:50 – How reliable is the communication? 00:46:08 – How aware are the characters? 00:49:56 – › What does the speaker want from their audience 00:53:46 – › Emotional vs intellectual effects of direct address 00:58:35 – Analysing edge cases 01:04:00 – › Writer's intent versus character's intent in voiceover 01:07:37 – What effects do these have on the audience? 01:11:51 – › Monologue length and its emotional effect on audiences 01:16:00 – Key learnings and wrap-up 01:19:00 – Thanks patreons!FILMS
FIGHT CLUB (1999) — (w) Chuck Palahniuk, Jim Uhls (d) David Fincher FLEABAG (2016) — (w) Phoebe Waller Bridge THE BIG SHORT (2015) — (w) Adam Mckay, Charles Randolph (d) Adam Mckay F FOR FAKE (1973) — (w) Orson Welles STAR WARS (1977) — (w) George LucasSCRIPTS
Study the script: FIGHT CLUB (1999) — Chuck Palahniuk, Jim Uhls Study the script: THE BIG SHORT (2015) — Adam Mckay, Charles RandolphEPISODES IN THE TALKING DIRECTLY TO THE AUDIENCE SERIES
DZ-109: Talking DIRECTLY to your audience DZ-110: Voiceover DZ-111: Unreliable Narrators and FIGHT CLUB DZ-112: Breaking the 4th wall DZ-113: Tools For Filmmakers To Talk To The AudienceRELATED EPISODES
DZ-15: World Building Rules, Okay? DZ-54: Thematic Sequences DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston———
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Wed, 01 May 2024 - 110 - DZ-108: The Emotional Event with Judith Weston
Listen to understand why a scene's power lives in what shifts between characters, not what happens to them.
How and why should every scene have an emotional event?
For the first episode of our tenth anniversary year, we are joined by Judith Weston to talk about Emotional Events. What is an emotional event? Well, it’s a way of thinking about scenes through relationships rather than plot. Instead of asking how a scene moves the plot forward, ask how the scene alters the relationship between characters. While emotional events are ostensibly a tool for directors to interpret scenes, we believe that the emotional event starts with the writer(s).
But it is an idea better illustrated through examples and discussion rather than sound bites. To that end, we breakdown scene from OPPENHEIMER, CASINO ROYALE (the Daniel Craig one), and PAST LIVES and explore how the emotional event is written (and not written) on the page.
Through a close reading of each scene, we talk about subtext, power dynamics, status transactions, tactics, beats and much much more. Because Chas, Stu and Judith are also reading the scripts there lot of discussion about table reads and how to get the most out of them.
For those unfamiliar with Judith, she is a famed teacher of writers, directors and actors with a focus on the directing or actors. Her books Directing Actors and The Film Director’s Intuition are basically industry standards.
You can find Judith Weston (and her books!) at her website: https://judithweston.com/web/
Thanks to Chris Walker for his excellent editing this episode.
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"I think they're both testing each other. I think, you know, Oppenheimer wants the job, but he knows that Groves wants somebody who will test him. They want the friction. They like the friction. They both work best with friction." — Judith Weston @ 00:30:37
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:30 – What is an emotional event? 00:05:18 – › How the relationship changes defines the scene 00:10:49 – › Reading aloud to let the words live unprepared 00:13:48 – OPPENHEIMER 00:19:01 – › Breaking a scene into beats and emotional wins 00:28:54 – › How beat shifts are physicalized and marked on screen 00:39:53 – › Exposition works when buried in relationship dynamics 00:44:09 – › Core relationships as structural delivery systems for acts 00:46:16 – CASINO ROYALE 00:49:07 – › How actors overrode the script's male gaze 00:52:38 – › Shared vulnerability as the scene's emotional event 00:55:57 – › How stage directions can direct actors from the page 00:59:35 – PAST LIVES 01:06:49 – › Emotional beat changes and the language of scaffolding 01:11:22 – › How each line negotiates a relationship shift 01:27:28 – › Arthur's final act of kindness closes the triangle 01:30:20 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:36:05 – Thanks to our Patreons!FILMS
OPPENHEIMER (2023) — (w) Christopher Nolan CASINO ROYALE (2006) — (w) Neal Purvis, Robert Wade, Paul Haggis, Ian Fleming (d) Martin Campbell PAST LIVES (2023) — (w) Celine SongSCRIPTS
Study the script: OPPENHEIMER (2023) — Christopher Nolan Study the script: CASINO ROYALE (2006) — Neal Purvis, Robert Wade, Paul Haggis, Ian Fleming Study the script: PAST LIVES (2023) — Celine SongLINKS
Website: Judith WestonRELATED EPISODES
DZ-08: Status Transactions DZ-40: Tactics and Scenes———
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Sun, 31 Mar 2024 - 109 - DZ-107: Establishing Tone through Character
Listen if you want to understand how character actions and reactions shape a film's tone
In this episode, Chas and Stu continue their deep dive into how to write tone by examining films with “light” (we use the phrase loosely) tones: LADY BIRD, EMILY THE CRIMINAL, THE BALLAD OF BUSTER SCRUGGS, and SPONTANEOUS. We also talk a surprising amount about DUNE and CRAZY STUPID LOVE.
We focus on the relationship between character & tone and how the writers of these films use dramatisation to create their unique tones. We talk minimalism vs maximalism, dialogue, character actions & reactions, emotional dynamic range, and rules of the world vs given circumstances.
Stu proposes a new triangle to help us understand the dials we as writers have to affect tone:
The given circumstances of the story, How that effects character actions & reactions, How the audience are told about those elements.Thanks to Chris Walker for his excellent editing this episode.
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"Emily feels a rush of blood to the head. And the blood, to me, kind of connects it to the feral thing, right? Like it's just got a little bit of an animalistic quality to it in terms of the kind of language system they're using it." — Stu Willis @ 00:42:31
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:23 – Tone & Character 00:03:21 – › The tone triangle: given circumstances, character reaction, audience feeling 00:09:38 – › Diegetic vs non-diegetic levers and the writer's control over tone 00:15:26 – Ladybird 00:18:43 – › How opening scenes encode a film's emotional range 00:22:37 – › Underplaying drama to teach audiences what to laugh at 00:29:42 – › How dialogue mechanics carry tonal instruction on the page 00:33:20 – EMILY THE CRIMINAL 00:36:22 – › Sparse big print and character-revealing given circumstances 00:44:34 – › How action and reaction encode tone and theme 00:53:25 – › Dialogue styling and emotional proximity to character 00:57:43 – THE BALLAD OF BUSTER SCRUGGS 01:02:51 – › How character reaction creates comedic contrast with violence 01:13:32 – › Given circumstances, audience expectation, and world rules 01:17:28 – SPONTANEOUS 01:20:57 – › Action lines as character voice and tonal instruction 01:26:31 – › Humor as audience permission to engage with horror 01:34:03 – › Tonal complexity versus emotional range across films 01:38:11 – › Shared laughter as a device for building connection 01:39:38 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:42:38 – › Tonal contrast as emotional contract with audience 01:46:13 – › Character reactions as the root of tonal clarity 01:51:58 – Many thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
LADY BIRD (2017) — (w) Greta Gerwig EMILY THE CRIMINAL (2022) — (w) John Patton Ford THE BALLAD OF BUSTER SCRUGGS (2018) — (w) Ethan Coen, Joel Coen (d) Joel Coen, Ethan Coen SPONTANEOUS (2020) — (w) Aaron Starmer, Brian Duffield (d) Brian DuffieldSCRIPTS
Study the script: LADY BIRD (2017) — Greta Gerwig Study the script: THE BALLAD OF BUSTER SCRUGGS (2018) — Ethan Coen, Joel CoenLINKS
Read: Tom Vaughan / Story and Plot: Controlling the tone in your screenwritingEPISODES IN THE ESTABLISHING TONE SERIES
DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print DZ-107: Establishing Tone through CharacterRELATED EPISODES
DZ-82: Dramatising Given Circumstances in WATCHMEN DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print———
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Thu, 29 Feb 2024 - 108 - DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story?
Listen you're not sure whether your idea has enough fuel for 90 pages.
In this episode, Chas, Stu and Mel attempt to answer a listener question: “In your own pre-writing process, how do you know you have enough for a feature? And do you have a specific pre-writing method you're going to?”
Thus we launch into a discussion on our writing processes and the varying usefulness of tools such as log lines, turning points, beat sheets, synopsis, treatments, and scene breakdowns. We also tackle the challenges encountered while developing an idea to first draft, such as balancing the pace of the story, developing distinct character voices, character choices, plot changes, pacing, and thematic clarity.
Is this backmatter? Or is it development tools? You decide! Hahaha.
Thanks so much to Chris Walker for his excellent editing on this episode!
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"for me, that's actually in a lot of ways easier to write. You don't need to conclude anything. And you can hopefully if you sell it, then you get a room of people and then it's all of your problems, you know, as opposed to just your problem and you're banging your head up against the wall on page 80 going, Oh my God, what have have I done?" — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:05:41
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:16 – The Listener Question: Do You Have Enough for a Feature? 00:00:30 – › Why features demand a known ending before you start 00:02:38 – Our Development Processes 00:05:20 – › Deciding format before asking if you have enough story 00:09:20 – › Narrative fuel as a concept and when to test it 00:13:42 – › Why the midpoint is the first structural tent pole to find 00:17:35 – › Cards, brainstorming, and capturing scenes before plot 00:20:06 – › How TV bible development differs from feature outlining 00:25:15 – Developing from Concept 00:28:53 – › Mel's four-stage process from voice note to scriptment 00:33:06 – › Theme as the organising principle before you outline 00:38:55 – › Character and plot as mutually dependent in development 00:44:09 – › Loglines from other characters' points of view 00:45:26 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:48:12 – Expanding Your Idea 00:51:24 – › Sequence structure as a test for narrative fuel 00:55:34 – › Turning points driven by character decisions, not events 01:00:01 – › When genre dictates how fixed your major beats should be 01:06:19 – › From bullet outline to scriptment: when to move to pages 01:09:36 – › Summarising dialogue scenes before writing them 01:15:29 – Long Short Documents 01:20:34 – › The therefore-and-but test applied to outlines 01:23:07 – › Prose treatments as a low-cost pitch and development tool 01:27:22 – Consistent Problems with First Drafts 01:28:53 – › Pacing imbalance between over-written and under-written sequences 01:31:27 – › Character voice, empathy, and choices that don't land 01:34:28 – Many Thanks to Our Patreons!EPISODES IN THE DEVELOPMENT TOOLS SERIES
DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story? DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2 DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4 DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3———
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Sun, 31 Dec 2023 - 107 - DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print
Listen if you want to use an unusual tone in your screenplay.
Chas and Stu finally start their long-mooted exploration of tone with a series that examines films and shows with unusual tones and dives into how the writers establish those tones in the first 5 pages.
How does your script want your reader to experience violence in your story? Humour? Sex? Prejudice?
To answer these questions, this episode look at how films with “darker” or “sadder” tones teach the reader what they can laugh at, namely: THE NICE GUYS, THE BANSHEES OF INISHERIN and the pilot for YELLOWJACKETS.
Together they learn how to better talk about tone, how to frame tone for a scene or sequence, and what levers writers can use on the page to compensate for cinematic tools like music, performance, composition, lighting, design, editing, etc etc etc.
Future episodes plan to explore establishing lighter or quirkier tones, as well as tools in shifting or changing tone on the page.
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"He is writing our experience as the audience to us as we're reading it." — Chas Fisher @ 00:40:40
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:32 – What is tone? 00:05:36 – › Tone defined through the rhetorical triangle 00:09:27 – › Teaching the audience the rules of tone 00:16:36 – › Word and narrative choices as tonal tools 00:25:00 – THE NICE GUYS 00:31:48 – › How Shane Black's prose style establishes tone on the page 00:39:39 – › Complicity, strangeness, and tonal shift within the opening scene 00:49:49 – › How repetition and rhythm sell comedy in action lines 00:55:07 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:57:23 – THE BANSHEES OF INISHERIN 01:00:17 – › Surrealism, sparseness, and McDonagh's tonal commitment 01:05:43 – › How script mood is built through environment and repetition humour 01:21:42 – › What the opening pages teach us about tonal contracts with the audience 01:25:06 – YELLOWJACKETS 01:28:07 – › Establishing three tones across three timelines in a pilot 01:34:49 – › How big print language and POV shifts create horror dread 01:43:06 – › Tonal transitions between scenes using comedy and environment 01:50:16 – › Writing style shifts that signal tone within action lines 01:53:30 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:57:23 – › Being bolder with tone in Australian screenwriting 02:00:14 – › Signalling authorial judgment in satirical writing 02:04:40 – Many thanks to our Patreons!FILMS
THE NICE GUYS (2016) — (w) Shane Black, Anthony Bagarozzi (d) Shane Black THE BANSHEES OF INISHERIN (2022) — (w) Martin McdonaghSHOWS
YELLOWJACKETS 1x1 "Pilot" — Karyn Kusama (d), Bart Nickerson, Ashley Lyle (w)SCRIPTS
Study the script: THE NICE GUYS (2016) — Shane Black, Anthony Bagarozzi Study the script: THE BANSHEES OF INISHERIN (2022) — Martin McdonaghEPISODES IN THE ESTABLISHING TONE SERIES
DZ-105: Establishing Tone through Big Print DZ-107: Establishing Tone through CharacterRELATED EPISODES
DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination DZ-61: Unfilmables 2 - Moments of Awe———
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Thu, 30 Nov 2023 - 106 - DZ-104: Characters Alone - Dramatizing the Internal
Listen to understand how solitude reveals character interiority and deepens audience connection
In this episode, we explore the audience's connection with characters through the lens of characters being alone.
Chas and Stu breakdown scenes (and their scripts) from AFTERSUN, SENSE AND SENSIBILITY and THE EQUALIZER to discuss the significance of solitude in giving the audience insight into a character’s interiority. We talk how big print can reflect character; how finding moments for vulnerability allows characters to drop their masks; and how staging can help these moments occur organically.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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"I've been for a long time trying to improve my ability to what I call dramatize the internal and I think this is a really good opportunity to do this." — Chas Fisher @ 00:01:43
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CHAPTERS
00:00:02 – Cold Open 00:00:24 – Intro: Character's Alone 00:13:04 – AFTERSUN 00:16:28 – › Reading the rave interstitial scene aloud on the page 00:22:06 – › Balcony dancing scene: solitude framed through glass and white space 00:31:55 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:34:16 – SENSE AND SENSIBILITY 00:40:13 – › Writing character interiority without unfilmables 00:48:51 – › Solitude as structural device: the teacup scene 00:53:02 – › Externalising emotion through environment and action 00:59:59 – THE EQUALIZER 01:03:30 – › Solitude as a window into character interiority 01:09:57 – › Close reading: how the opening alone scenes paint McCall's character 01:15:05 – › Decision-making moments and the cost of returning to violence 01:20:53 – › Button scenes and the aftermath of action on character 01:25:02 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:28:34 – Many thanks to our Patreons!FILMS
AFTERSUN (2022) — (w) Charlotte Wells SENSE AND SENSIBILITY (1995) — (w) Emma Thompson, Jane Austen (d) Ang Lee THE EQUALIZER (2014) — (w) Richard Wenk (d) Antoine FuquaSCRIPTS
Study the script: AFTERSUN (2022) — Charlotte WellsLINKS
Read: Shot Zero Read: RestorationRELATED EPISODES
DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination DZ-93: Talismans (Part 1) DZ-94: Talismans (Part 2) DZ-99: Scene Questions———
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Wed, 01 Nov 2023 - 105 - DZ-103: Game of the Scene 2 - Triangle of Sadness, The Favourite
Listen to understand how games force characters to interact and reveal themselves (through competency, decisions, and rule-breaking)
In part two of this two parter, Stu and Chas go further into the game (of the scene) and look at how games force characters other than the protagonist to interact. We deep dive into the wonderful social satires of TRIANGLE OF SADNESS and THE FAVOURITE.
We discuss how games reveal character through competency and decisions, how resources and skills impact the tactics that characters employ, and the difference between referees, rule lawyers, rule makers and rule breakers.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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"games are about a series of choices and relatedness is the way that they build interaction so you can see how that is actually really useful for characters because what you actually want to do is put your characters in a situation where they're competent enough to be challenged but you don't want them to be destroyed." — Stu Willis @ 00:09:50
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00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:19 – Sponsor: ScriptUp 00:01:45 – Why Games Force Every Character to Play: Competence, Tactics, and Interrelatedness 00:05:09 – › Listener examples: rule-switching in THE PRINCESS BRIDE 00:07:18 – › Games as a character engagement tool: competence, autonomy, and relatedness 00:10:50 – TRIANGLE OF SADNESS (Parts 1 and 2) 00:14:21 – › The captain and Dimitri: ideology as a drinking game 00:20:12 – › How the game escalates entitlement into catastrophe 00:24:11 – › Carl and Yaya: win conditions emerging across shifting arenas 00:31:13 – › How the game reveals mutual manipulation and honest compatibility 00:35:37 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:38:25 – TRIANGLE OF SADNESS (Part 3) 00:40:34 – › Abigail distributes the octopus: resources rewrite the power hierarchy 00:44:54 – › Rule makers versus referees: who interprets the rules holds the power 00:49:13 – › Asymmetric games and why players with different resources can't see each other's path to victory 00:52:51 – THE FAVOURITE 00:57:10 – › The arena as playground, battleground, and prison across three acts 01:00:49 – › Abigail and Masham: literal chase reveals social and physical power inverted 01:06:05 – › Three shooting scenes: competence, escalation, and the blood-spatter declaration 01:13:26 – › The mud bath: Sarah's resources are shared history and the ability to make Anne laugh 01:19:29 – › Poisoning as a rule break only one player conceived as possible 01:25:28 – › Why Sarah loses: hubris and failing to recognise a different game was being played 01:30:34 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:34:11 – › Games as a structural tool across a whole feature or series 01:37:51 – › Applying the game lens to macro story structure 01:40:30 – Thanks to our Patreons!FILMS
TRIANGLE OF SADNESS (2022) — (w) Ruben Ostlund THE FAVOURITE (2018) — (w) Tony Mcnamara, Deborah Davis (d) Yorgos LanthimosSCRIPTS
Study the script: TRIANGLE OF SADNESS (2022) — Ruben Ostlund Study the script: THE FAVOURITE (2018) — Tony Mcnamara, Deborah DavisLINKS
IMDB: Molli and Max in the Future Read: Letterboxd - Molli and Max in the FutureEPISODES IN THE GAME OF THE SCENE SERIES
DZ-102: Game of the Scene - Bluey, John Wick 4 DZ-103: Game of the Scene 2 - Triangle of Sadness, The FavouriteRELATED EPISODES
DZ-40: Tactics and Scenes DZ-99: Scene Questions DZ-102: Game of the Scene - Bluey, John Wick 4———
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Sun, 01 Oct 2023 - 104 - DZ-102: Game of the Scene - Bluey, John Wick 4
Listen to make your scene writing more dynamic (by looking at the underlying game)
Stu and Chas turn their attention to a topic that has long eluded them: the game of the scene. We look at how considering the game that characters are playing — its rules, arenas, players, referees, and win conditions — can help you write more dynamic scenes.
This will be a two-parter, and for this half, we talk BLUEY, “The Quiet Game” (from Season 2) and “Phones” (from Season 3), and JOHN WICK 4. We also touch on GAME NIGHT and LIFE OF BRIAN.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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"So I think there's the referees, there's the arena, the victory conditions important and it leads into this other idea, speaking of board games, of like the path to victory." — Stu Willis @ 00:09:44
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:18 – Sponsor: ScriptUp 00:01:52 – Intro: What do we mean by Game of the Scene? 00:15:06 – THE LIFE OF BRIAN: "WHAT HAVE THE ROMANS EVER DONE FOR US?" 00:20:03 – BLUEY 00:23:22 – › How the quiet game's rules create scene power dynamics 00:29:33 – › PHONES: learning the rules to change the game 00:35:08 – Sponsor: Arc Studio Pro 00:37:56 – JOHN WICK 4 00:43:16 – › Rules as the engine of satisfying action scenes 00:47:14 – › Scene breakdown: the Osaka Continental negotiation 00:56:14 – › Scene breakdown: poker table reveals who can break the rules 01:00:07 – › The staircase duel and adhering to rules as victory strategy 01:04:04 – › Scene breakdown: the church as a game of seeking peace 01:14:34 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:17:41 – › Win conditions, character decisions, and the GOAT framework 01:22:17 – Many thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
JOHN WICK: CHAPTER 4 (2023) — (w) Shay Hatten, Michael Finch (d) Chad StahelskiSHOWS
BLUEY 2x37 — (w) Joe Brumm BLUEY 3x16 "Phones" — Joe Brumm (w)SCRIPTS
Study the script: JOHN WICK: CHAPTER 4 (2023) — Shay Hatten, Michael FinchLINKS
Read: Shot Zero on Game Night's Hot Potato SequenceEPISODES IN THE GAME OF THE SCENE SERIES
DZ-102: Game of the Scene - Bluey, John Wick 4 DZ-103: Game of the Scene 2 - Triangle of Sadness, The FavouriteRELATED EPISODES
DZ-40: Tactics and Scenes DZ-99: Scene Questions DZ-100: Scenes through Swords———
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Thu, 31 Aug 2023 - 103 - DZ-101: Oners - Creating Immediacy & Anchoring Action on the Page
Listen to understand how screenwriters direct the camera without calling shots.
Chas, Stu and Mel reunite to talk about writing the feel of camerawork in screenplays. We use “oners” — a long-playing continuous take — as a lens to talk about how some writers have “directed” from the page. We talk immediacy, camera positions, handovers, and anchoring action and more.
We breakdown the famous Copacabana shot from GOODFELLAS, the awe-inspiring chase sequence from THE ADVENTURES OF TINTIN, and the heart pounding ‘Zed attack’ from CHILDREN OF MEN. We also briefly discuss THE BOURNE IDENTITY, HEREDITARY, THE BEAR, ALL THE PRESIDENTS MEN and TOUCH OF EVIL.
And we do this breakdown by closely reading the actual words on the page!
So thanks to Meegan May (of Starship Q Star) for performing the big print / action lines. Script Pages available on our Patreon -> https://www.patreon.com/posts/dz-99-scene-82312058
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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"You're meant to be swept along with this action. In Children of Men, the script's... just bang, bang, bang. You can almost tell that it's happening simultaneously because of the mini slugs, you know, in the road, in the car, outside, inside. It's all felt as one." — Mel Killingsworth @ 00:06:55
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CHAPTERS
00:00:13 – Cold Open 00:00:23 – Sponsor: ScriptUp 00:01:58 – Directing from the Page: Writing the Feel of Camerawork 00:07:26 – › Writing camera direction versus writing the feeling of a shot 00:09:50 – BOURNE IDENTITY & HEREDITARY 00:13:15 – › Narrative purpose as the test for any oner 00:16:30 – GOODFELLAS 00:16:57 – › Excerpt: the Copacabana follow shot 00:18:22 – › How breathless prose mirrors Karen's point of view 00:25:00 – › Modernising the we-see style for spec scripts 00:32:48 – THE ADVENTURES OF TINTIN 00:34:14 – › Excerpt: the Bagghar chase set piece 00:37:23 – › Capitalisation and handovers as the connective tissue of a oner 00:43:48 – › Anchoring action through micro-plotting and clear victory conditions 00:49:34 – CHILDREN OF MEN 00:53:38 – › Excerpt: the Zed ambush 01:00:32 – › Mini slugs and car-interior POV as 360-degree orientation 01:06:17 – › Real-time big print and the moment-by-moment obligation of action lines 01:12:24 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:16:50 – › Intentionality as the writer's true directorial compass 01:21:03 – Thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
GOODFELLAS (1990) — (w) Nicholas Pileggi, Martin Scorsese (d) Martin Scorsese THE ADVENTURES OF TINTIN (2011) — (w) Edgar Wright, Joe Cornish, Steven Moffat (d) Steven Spielberg CHILDREN OF MEN (2006) — (w) Timothy J Sexton, David Arata, Alfonso Cuaron, Mark Fergus, Hawk Ostby, P D James (d) Alfonso CuaronSCRIPTS
Study the script: GOODFELLAS (1990) — Nicholas Pileggi, Martin Scorsese Study the script: THE ADVENTURES OF TINTIN (2011) — Edgar Wright, Joe Cornish, Steven Moffat Study the script: CHILDREN OF MEN (2006) — Timothy J Sexton, David Arata, Alfonso Cuaron, Mark Fergus, Hawk Ostby, P D JamesSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Time and space in staging "Oners" Time and space in staging "Oners" Time and space in staging "Oners"LINKS
SCRIPTS: The script Pages are available on our Patreon WATCH: Goodfellas, The"Copacabana" shot WATCH: The Adventures of TinTin, "Get that bird!" WATCH: Children of Men, "Zed's attack" WATCH: The Bourne Identity, "Escaping The American Embassy" WATCH: All The President's Men, "The Dahlberg Scene"RELATED EPISODES
DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination DZ-61: Unfilmables 2 - Moments of Awe DZ-62: Unfilmables 3 - As Ifs & Emotional Context———
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Mon, 03 Jul 2023 - 102 - DZ-100: Scenes through Swords
Listen if you want to know why the distance between two characters matters more than what they say.
In this slightly unusual episode of Draft Zero (but also incredibly on brand), Stu and philosopher-swordsperson Damon Young discuss how the lessons they have learned from martial arts can be applied to scenes. In particular, they discuss how approaching an opponent in a sword fight can be analogous to how characters approach conflict, such as: the distance between the characters, who chooses to engage first, how to feint, how to lure an attack by leaving yourself vulnerable, etc.
They reference classic conflicts such as Clarice interviewing Dr. Lecter in SILENCE OF THE LAMBS, when Miranda puts down Andrea in THE DEVIL WEARS PRADA, and the final showdown between Obi-Wan and Darth Maul in the animated series THE CLONE WARS.
You can find Damon Young here: https://www.damonyoung.com.au/
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"I'm really interested in crafts, in the way we move from little bits of knowledge that we have to work through painstakingly one step at a time to a more fluid knowledge that we can deploy on the fly, as it were." — Damon-Young @ 00:04:25
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:02:45 – Interview with Damon Young 00:06:25 – › Distance and vulnerability between combatants and characters 00:19:19 – › Timing, kairos, and the perfectly placed strike in DEVIL WEARS PRADA 00:27:11 – › Adaptation versus fixation, the CLONE WARS duel as character revelation 00:40:51 – › Try-fail cycles, spent blades, and exhausted dramatic action 00:52:06 – › Asymmetry of vulnerability and unequal terms of engagement 00:59:19 – Thanks patreons!FILMS
THE SILENCE OF THE LAMBS (1991) — (w) Ted Tally, Thomas Harris (d) Jonathan Demme THE DEVIL WEARS PRADA (2006) — (w) Aline Brosh Mckenna, Lauren Weisberger (d) David FrankelSHOWS
THE CLONE WARS 3x20 "Citadel Rescue" — Steward Lee (d), Matt Michnovetz (w)SCRIPTS
Study the script: THE SILENCE OF THE LAMBS (1991) — Ted Tally, Thomas Harris Study the script: THE DEVIL WEARS PRADA (2006) — Aline Brosh Mckenna, Lauren WeisbergerLINKS
Read: Damon Young Read: Damon Young (@damonyoung@mas.to)RELATED EPISODES
DZ-29: Showdowns & Scene Structure DZ-54: Thematic Sequences DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart DZ-85: Choices & Decisions 2 - The Farewell & Wrath of Man———
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Mon, 29 May 2023 - 101 - DZ-99: Scene Questions
Listen if learn how to structure individual scenes through the questions you pose to your audience!
Inspired by our earlier episodes on sequences, Chas and Stu narrow their focus to look at the atomic unit of screen storytelling: the scene. In particular, we breakdown how question and answers prompted in the audience structure individual scenes.
We talk plot, character, and theme questions (and their hybrids) by analysing scenes from LOKI, THE LAST CRUSADE, THE BOURNE SUPREMACY, QUEEN AND SLIM, and DO THE RIGHT THING. We also briefly discuss SUCCESSION, DUNGEONS & DRAGONS: HONOUR AMONG THIEVES, and ANDOR.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:17 – ScriptUp Sponsorship 00:01:56 – What are Scene Questions? 00:16:30 – LOKI 00:23:24 – THE LAST CRUSADE 00:29:51 – › How filmmakers control audience attention by suppressing plot questions 00:33:03 – THE BOURNE SUPREMACY 00:38:40 – › Removing plot questions to surface character questions 00:43:21 – › Where character scenes appear in plot-driven structures 00:45:50 – QUEEN AND SLIM 00:49:19 – › How plot intervenes to escalate a character scene 00:56:31 – › Character revelation under pressure and the midpoint gun-draw turn 01:03:03 – DO THE RIGHT THING 01:06:15 – › Classifying scene questions: character, plot, or thematic 01:09:15 – › How directing and cinematography shape audience questions 01:12:09 – › Scene modulation: shifting from thematic to plot-driven tension 01:15:03 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:20:23 – › Applying scene questions to pacing in a rewrite 01:28:23 – › Point of view shapes which questions a scene raises 01:29:09 – › When narrative cinema steps outside dramatic questioning 01:33:02 – Many thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
LOKI (2021) — (w) Michael Waldron INDIANA JONES AND THE LAST CRUSADE (1989) — (w) Jeffrey Boam, Menno Meyjes, George Lucas (d) Steven Spielberg THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — (w) Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy (d) Paul Greengrass QUEEN & SLIM (2019) — (w) Lena Waithe, Lena Waithe, James Frey (d) Melina Matsoukas DO THE RIGHT THING (1989) — (w) Spike LeeSCRIPTS
Study the script: INDIANA JONES AND THE LAST CRUSADE (1989) — Jeffrey Boam, Menno Meyjes, George Lucas Study the script: THE BOURNE SUPREMACY (2004) — Robert Ludlum, Tony Gilroy Study the script: QUEEN & SLIM (2019) — Lena Waithe, Lena Waithe, James Frey Study the script: DO THE RIGHT THING (1989) — Spike LeeSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Five Shots: DO THE RIGHT THING Love/Hate in DO THE RIGHT THINGRELATED EPISODES
DZ-43: Driving Sequences - Character and Plot Intensity DZ-45: Arguments of the Scene DZ-54: Thematic Sequences———
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Mon, 01 May 2023 - 100 - DZ-98: Ensembles 3 - Character Function & Theme
Listen if you're writing an ensemble storiy and want to understand how different characters serve different narrative and thematic functions!
In Part 3 (the final part? Ha!) of our exploration into ensemble stories, Stu, Chas & Mel examine films whose genres do not conventionally require a ton of characters or that use those ensembles in unconventional ways. In particular, adding whole storylines that are separate from the main character’s story. To that end, we dive into three films that were horrifically snubbed by the Oscars: THE WOMAN KING, RIDERS OF JUSTICE and NOPE.
We breakdown the effects of choosing to use an ensemble on the narrative function of characters, their skills, the webs they exist within, and, ultimately, the story’s theme. Plus we re-apply and re-contextualise the tools uncovered in previous episodes in how to service all these characters.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:01:35 – Intro: Character Function 00:08:43 – The Woman King 00:50:00 – Riders of Justice 01:20:36 – Nope 01:47:00 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:59:06 – Many thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
THE WOMAN KING (2022) — (w) Maria Bello, Dana Stevens, Dana Stevens (d) Gina Prince Bythewood RIDERS OF JUSTICE (2020) — (w) Anders Thomas Jensen NOPE (2022) — (w) Jordan PeeleSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE WOMAN KING (2022) — Maria Bello, Dana Stevens, Dana Stevens Study the script: NOPE (2022) — Jordan PeeleLINKS
Read: Mel on The Möbius Strip Storytelling of NOPE Read: Mel on Riders of Justice: Tidings of Trauma and JoyEPISODES IN THE ENSEMBLES SERIES
DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble? DZ-97: Ensembles 2 - Servicing Characters DZ-98: Ensembles 3 - Character Function & ThemeRELATED EPISODES
DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble? DZ-97: Ensembles 2 - Servicing Characters———
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Fri, 31 Mar 2023 - 99 - DZ-97: Ensembles 2 - Servicing Characters
Listen if you're writing ensemble stories and want to discover tools for giving all your characters adimension
In Part 2 of our exploration into ensemble stories, Stu, Chas and Mel examine films whose plot and genre require a lot of characters. Thus we tackle a team sports film (PITCH PERFECT), a murder mystery (GLASS ONION), a slasher (SCREAM 2022) and a family holiday flick (THE FAMILY STONE).
By looking at these films, we discover tools for writers to service characters and give them more dimension. These tools include: shifting group dynamics; the spectrum of private to public behaviour; breaking POV, and quintessential group introductions.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:01:46 – Intro: Servicing Characters 00:14:40 – Pitch Perfect 00:37:54 – Glass Onion 01:09:20 – Scream 5 01:32:17 – The Family Stone 02:13:22 – Key Learnings & Wrap UpFILMS
PITCH PERFECT (2012) — (w) Kay Cannon, Mickey Rapkin (d) Jason Moore GLASS ONION: A KNIVES OUT MYSTERY (2022) — (w) Rian Johnson SCREAM (2022) — (w) James Vanderbilt, Guy Busick (d) Tyler Gillett, Matt Bettinelli Olpin THE FAMILY STONE (2005) — (w) Thomas BezuchaSCRIPTS
Study the script: PITCH PERFECT (2012) — Kay Cannon, Mickey Rapkin Study the script: GLASS ONION: A KNIVES OUT MYSTERY (2022) — Rian Johnson Study the script: SCREAM (2022) — James Vanderbilt, Guy BusickEPISODES IN THE ENSEMBLES SERIES
DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble? DZ-97: Ensembles 2 - Servicing Characters DZ-98: Ensembles 3 - Character Function & ThemeRELATED EPISODES
DZ-09: Characterising Introductions DZ-43: Driving Sequences - Character and Plot Intensity DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble?———
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Tue, 28 Feb 2023 - 98 - DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble?
Listen if you're working on a story with multiple protagonists and want to understand what makes an ensemble different from a single-protagonist narrative
In the first part of our series on ensembles, Chas, Stu and Mel start by laying the groundwork for our future episodes. And we begin by asking the seemingly innocuous question: What do we mean by calling a story an ensemble?
As we unpack our own assumptions, biases and thoughts, we ask (and attempt to answer) more questions: How does an ensemble differ from a single protagonist or two hander? Why does this distinction even matter? What challenges What genres inherently are ensembles? And what do we hope to learn from the series?
We ice-skate over myriad films including JURASSIC PARK, ALIEN, TOP GUN vs TOP GUN: MAVERICK, DEATH AT A FUNERAL, WAR OF THE WORLDS vs INDEPENDENCE DAY, LORD OF THE RINGS vs WILLOW, OCEAN’S 11 vs OUT OF SIGHT, THIEF vs HEAT, AWAY FROM HER, DIRTY DOZEN, SAVING PRIVATE RYAN, SE7EN, READY OR NOT. Look, there’s heaps. We talk a lot of movies. Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode. <3 Chris!
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:09 – ScriptUp Sponsorship 00:00:48 – Intro to Ensembles: Series Scope and Episode Roadmap 00:04:17 – What Makes a Story an Ensemble? 00:07:40 – › Character interaction, not just character count, defines ensemble 00:11:39 – › Character questions and agendas as markers of individuation 00:17:09 – › How genre conventions shape ensemble versus single-protagonist focus 00:22:44 – › Structural rhythms of splitting and reassembling the group 00:26:51 – A Taxonomy of Ensemble Genres 00:29:57 – › Why heist films structurally demand an ensemble cast 00:35:41 – › Scale and disaster films as ensemble drivers 00:39:21 – › Hangout and holiday films as inherently ensemble forms 00:43:59 – › Murder mystery versus detective story on the ensemble spectrum 00:47:25 – ArcStudio Sponsorship 00:48:32 – Group Dynamics: How Characters Interact Within the Ensemble 00:53:19 – › Competitive, Combative, and Collaborative as the core dynamic framework 00:59:25 – › How couplets and shifting alliances generate ensemble momentum 01:01:20 – › Character archetypes as shorthand when screen time is compressed 01:05:15 – › Why shared context explains why these characters occupy the same story world 01:08:39 – Wrap Up & Hopeful Learnings 01:12:32 – › Cohesion, integration, and what ensemble demands of theme 01:15:15 – Patreon ThanksFILMS
JURASSIC PARK (1993) — (w) Michael Crichton, David Koepp, Michael Crichton (d) Steven Spielberg ALIEN (1979) — (w) Dan Obannon, Dan Obannon, Ronald Shusett (d) Ridley Scott HEAT (1995) — (w) Michael Mann TOP GUN: MAVERICK (2022) — (w) Eric Warren Singer, Ehren Kruger, Christopher Mcquarrie, Justin Marks, Peter Craig (d) Joseph Kosinski OCEAN'S ELEVEN (2001) — (w) Ted Griffin (d) Steven SoderberghSCRIPTS
Study the script: JURASSIC PARK (1993) — Michael Crichton, David Koepp, Michael Crichton Study the script: ALIEN (1979) — Dan Obannon, Dan Obannon, Ronald Shusett Study the script: HEAT (1995) — Michael Mann Study the script: TOP GUN: MAVERICK (2022) — Eric Warren Singer, Ehren Kruger, Christopher Mcquarrie, Justin Marks, Peter Craig Study the script: OCEAN'S ELEVEN (2001) — Ted GriffinSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 3) - Framing Ripley ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 2) - The Ensemble ALIEN Aesthetic (Pt 1) - The Visual Strategies ▶ How does Ripley take control in Alien? ▶ Ripley invades Ash's space in Alien ▶ Facehugger attacks Ripley in Alien ▶ Why the fight choreography of Arnie's TOTAL RECALL is so good (and so brutal).LINKS
Sponsor: ScriptUp - use promo code DZ10 to get 10% off Spsonor: ArcStudio - for $30 off a subscription!EPISODES IN THE ENSEMBLES SERIES
DZ-96: Ensembles 1 - What do we mean by an ensemble? DZ-97: Ensembles 2 - Servicing Characters DZ-98: Ensembles 3 - Character Function & Theme———
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Tue, 31 Jan 2023 - 97 - DZ-95: Backmatter - Building and Maintenance
Listen listen to hear why first acts keep shrinking--and whether yours should too
Time for our annual backmatter episode, where we drop any ruse of any objectivity, and fully embrace our subjective opinions!
In this episode we discuss: potential topics for 2023; the ostensible shortening of first acts; balancing new projects vs current projects; how to maintain hope in the face of an industry as fickle as ours; and end with a discussion of Andor vs Obi-Wan. Yup, Star Wars is the new Die Hard. Get over it.
FYI we recorded this episode with both of us in the same room (for a more casual atmosphere )but that means there’s more technical gremlins like crosstalk. Our apologies in advance!
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode. <3 Chris!
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00:00:09 – Cold Open 00:00:39 – What's Coming in 2023 00:05:56 – › Ensemble films and efficient character tools 00:10:28 – › Fictional podcasts and audio drama as minimum viable product 00:14:50 – › Monologues, rhetoric, and characters speaking to the audience 00:25:42 – Are First Acts Getting Shorter? 00:27:03 – › Streaming, audience patience, and the pressure on early pages 00:32:10 – › Cold opens, inciting incidents, and buying time for character 00:40:09 – Balancing New Projects Against Current Work 00:43:55 – › Cognitive load, burnout, and finding the space to write 00:48:05 – › Sunk cost, paid work, and protecting time for new material 00:49:48 – Maintaining Hope in a Fickle Industry 00:51:22 – › Action over optimism: hope as a process not a feeling 00:54:21 – Lessons from 2022 00:56:41 – ANDOR vs. OBI-WAN KENOBI 00:56:56 – › What Kenobi got right despite its problems 01:00:17 – › Plot armor, scale, and why Obi-Wan never felt under genuine threat 01:05:10 – › How ANDOR earns tension by surrounding the known survivor 01:09:49 – › Thematic scenes, characters alone, and what rebellion costs 01:14:38 – Thanks to Our Patreons!SHOWS
ANDOR — (w) Tony Gilroy OBI-WAN KENOBILINKS
Read: LISTEN: Starship Q StarEPISODES IN THE BACKMATTER SERIES
DZ-17: Where's my gold-plated ensuite? DZ-36: Backmatter - Time Risk and Fixing Movies DZ-47: Backmatter - A Lost Jedi, White Knighting, and Writers-On-Set DZ-57: Backmatter - Aesthetics and Forgiveness in Writing DZ-64: Backmatter - Controlling your Work, Treatments, and Writing Styles DZ-77: Backmatter - Prioritising and choosing projects DZ-86: Backmatter - Minimum Viable Product DZ-95: Backmatter - Building and Maintenance———
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Sat, 31 Dec 2022 - 96 - DZ-94: Talismans (Part 2)
Listen to write objects that accumulate powerful meanings across your story and create unspoken emotional payoffs.
In part two of our two-part series on TALISMANS, we break down the beats used to turn objects (in a broad sense) into talismans; how talismans can track character journeys and transitions; and how they can be used to create powerful moments without words.
While Part 1 looked a range of talismans in a bunch of different movies, in this episode we deep dive into just three examples. We look at how Thor’s crisis of masculinity is articulated through his relationship with Mjolnir and Stormbreaker in THOR: LOVE AND THUNDER; how the yearning love in PORTRAIT OF A LADY ON FIRE is communicated through paintings and music; and how the impact of an emotional affair is charted through key locations in INTHE THE MOOD FOR LOVE.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:01:15 – Talismans (Part 1) Followup 00:08:37 – Forging a Talisman (The Beats) 00:23:22 – Thor: Love and Thunder 00:59:52 – Portrait of a Lady on Fire 01:32:39 – In the Mood for Love 01:59:39 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 02:06:10 – Thanks to our PatreonsFILMS
THOR: LOVE AND THUNDER (2022) — (w) Taika Waititi, Jennifer Kaytin Robinson (d) Taika Waititi PORTRAIT OF A LADY ON FIRE (2019) — (w) Celine Sciamma IN THE MOOD FOR LOVE (2000) — (w) Wong Kar Wai, Liu Yichang (d) Wong Kar WaiSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
PORTRAIT OF A LADY ON FIRE is a ghost story PORTRAIT OF A LADY ON FIRE is a ghost storyLINKS
Read: Go Into The Story - Talismans Read: Go Into The Story - Story TalismansEPISODES IN THE TALISMANS SERIES
DZ-93: Talismans (Part 1) DZ-94: Talismans (Part 2)RELATED EPISODES
DZ-92: Insightful Recognition in Powerful Endings DZ-93: Talismans (Part 1)———
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Thu, 01 Dec 2022 - 95 - DZ-93: Talismans (Part 1)
Listen to so you can write talismans that are powerful tools for accessing character!
In this series, Chas and Stu discuss TALISMANS. Physical objects that are imbued with meaning by a character or characters. They’re a powerful tool to access inner character.
In this first part, we lay the groundwork to discuss talismans and present something of a taxonomy. What makes talismans powerful? What makes them different from MacGuffins or characters? What types of Talismans are there? In the second part, we will breakdown THOR: LOVE AND THUNDER, IN THE MOOD FOR LOVE, and another film.
Examples we cover here include: TOP GUN, SEARCHING FOR BOBBY FISCHER, BETTER CALL SAUL, LORD OF THE RINGS, CASTAWAY, NO COUNTRY FOR OLD MEN, THE DARK KNIGHT, THOR: LOVE AND THUNDER, RONIN, PULP FICTION, RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK, BREAKING BAD, BACK TO THE FUTURE, THE TERMINATOR, TITANIC, INCEPTION, STAR WARS (of course), THE MATRIX, ANDOR (spoilers!), LITTLE MISS SUNSHINE, MAD MAX: FURY ROAD, and PULP FICTION.
Thanks to Chas Fisher & Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:03:15 – Talismans in our own lives 00:08:41 – Scott Myer's definition of Talismans 00:18:58 – What are not Talismans? 00:21:48 – Wardrobe 00:28:26 – Talismans vs Characters 00:43:18 – Talismans vs MacGuffins 00:49:33 – Photos 00:53:53 – Jewellery 01:02:22 – Weapons & Tools 01:10:02 – Vehicles 01:12:03 – Letters & Journals 01:14:19 – Andor (Spoilers) 01:16:20 – Talismans and Rituals 01:24:14 – Wrap Up & Key LearningsFILMS
THOR: LOVE AND THUNDER (2022) — (w) Taika Waititi, Jennifer Kaytin Robinson (d) Taika Waititi IN THE MOOD FOR LOVE (2000) — (w) Wong Kar Wai, Liu Yichang (d) Wong Kar Wai CAST AWAY (2000) — (w) William Broyles Jr (d) Robert Zemeckis THE DARK KNIGHT (2008) — (w) Jonathan Nolan, Christopher Nolan, David S Goyer, Christopher Nolan (d) Christopher Nolan MAD MAX: FURY ROAD (2015) — (w) George Miller, Nico Lathouris, Brendan Mccarthy (d) George MillerSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE DARK KNIGHT (2008) — Jonathan Nolan, Christopher Nolan, David S Goyer, Christopher Nolan Study the script: MAD MAX: FURY ROAD (2015) — George Miller, Nico Lathouris, Brendan MccarthyLINKS
Read: Go Into The Story - Talismans Read: Go Into The Story - Story TalismansEPISODES IN THE TALISMANS SERIES
DZ-93: Talismans (Part 1) DZ-94: Talismans (Part 2)RELATED EPISODES
DZ-11: Adventure for the MacGuffin! DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh———
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Mon, 31 Oct 2022 - 94 - DZ-92: Insightful Recognition in Powerful Endings
Listen if you want to write endings that make audiences pause and ponder (in a good way, obvs)
Stu & Chas set out to explore what makes certain endings powerful, in particular those of LA LA LAND, INCEPTION, NO COUNTRY FOR OLD MEN and TURNING RED. The lens they bring to those endings is Aristotle’s moment of “anagnorisis” (don’t worry - we can’t pronounce it either), traditionally when a character moves from ignorance to knowledge (particularly of self).
But in analysing these films, Chas and Stu discover that endings can be particularly powerful when the characters experience insightful recognition in others, or in the world, or - perhaps most powerfully - when the anagnorisis is aimed at the audience. In other words, are there craft tools for your ending to prompt an audience to ask itself the question “What was that all about?”? Turns out, we think there are.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:00:48 – Insightful recognition in endings 00:03:39 – What the hell is "anagnorisis"? 00:12:04 – LA LA LAND 00:30:45 – INCEPTION 00:35:14 – NO COUNTRY FOR OLD MEN 01:00:04 – TURNING RED 01:18:18 – Wrap up & Key Learnings 01:24:26 – Thanks patreons!FILMS
LA LA LAND (2016) — (w) Damien Chazelle INCEPTION (2010) — (w) Christopher Nolan NO COUNTRY FOR OLD MEN (2007) — (w) Cormac Mccarthy, Ethan Coen, Joel Coen (d) Joel Coen, Ethan Coen TURNING RED (2022) — (w) Domee Shi, Domee Shi, Julia Cho, Julia Cho, Sarah Streicher (d) Domee ShiSCRIPTS
Study the script: LA LA LAND (2016) — Damien Chazelle Study the script: INCEPTION (2010) — Christopher Nolan Study the script: NO COUNTRY FOR OLD MEN (2007) — Cormac Mccarthy, Ethan Coen, Joel CoenLINKS
Read: HULK PRESENTS THE MYTH OF THE THREE ACT STRUCTURE Read: Lindsay Doran on the psychology of story-telling Sponsor: ScriptUp use promo code DZ10 to get 10% offRELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette———
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Thu, 29 Sep 2022 - 93 - DZ-91: Raising (different kinds of) Stakes
Listen listen if you're writing a biopic or any story where the audience already knows how it ends.
Chas, Stu and Mel take a deep dive into stakes, using then lens of biopics to help us think about them. If an audience already knows the “plot” outcome of a story, then how do you create stakes to make a story tense for the audience?
To explore this, we deep dive into HIDDEN FIGURES (about the NASA Friendship 7 mission), DOWNFALL (the final days of Berlin in WW2), and BRIGHT STAR (the life and death of romantic poet John Keats). We unpack the ideas around internal, external and philosophical /moral stakes and propose some new terminology that may help us write stakes more effectively.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:04:41 – What even are stakes? 00:24:26 – Hidden Figures 01:00:46 – Downfall 01:33:38 – Bright Star 02:10:33 – Key Learnings 02:18:57 – Thanks Patreons!FILMS
HIDDEN FIGURES (2016) — (w) Allison Schroeder, Theodore Melfi (d) Theodore Melfi DOWNFALL (2004) — (w) Bernd Eichinger (d) Oliver Hirschbiegel BRIGHT STAR (2009) — (w) Jane Campion, Andrew Motion (d) Jane CampionSCRIPTS
Study the script: HIDDEN FIGURES (2016) — Allison Schroeder, Theodore Melfi———
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Wed, 31 Aug 2022 - 92 - DZ-90: Setups & Payoffs in EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE
Listen to understand how setups, payoffs, and reversals create narrative cohesion even when your story is fkn bonkers.
In this one-shot, Chas and Stu jump into the utter chaos of EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE. Y'know, nultiverses, butt-plug action sequences, hot-dog fingers, a raccoon chef, a nihilist bagel. All the good stuff. And yet it lands emotionally in a way that feels inevitable.
So of-course we break it down in a masterclass in setups and payoffs — specifically, how payoffs do two jobs at once: they reward the audience for paying attention, and they stitch what would otherwise be an episodic swirl into something that feels like a single, coherent whole.
The framework we land on has three parts (with debt to William Dunn):
Pointers — setups the audience is meant to notice. They point forward and create tension or expectation. Plants — setups you only understand in hindsight. The joyful surprise of oh, that's where that came from. Stitches (or underpinnings) — a third category: connective tissue that was never meant to be noticed at all. It just makes the fabric hold.From there, we deep dive down how EEAAO earns all three. Raccacoonie starts as a throwaway joke, then appears as a half-visible visual seed, then tracks Evelyn's relationship arc across three separate beats. The opening 13 minutes crams in more setups than you register on first watch — and then we talk about why that invisibility is the craft. And the ending turns out to be a payoff for something planted in the very first scene of the film.
In particular, we focus on its use of setups, payoffs and reversals; breakdown the difference between Pointers and Plants and Stitches; deep dive into its Michael Arndt inspired ending. And, of course, we talk hotdog fingers and butt-plugs.
We also tackle the film's macro structure: the midpoint reversal where the mission shifts from defeating to saving Joy, the competing philosophical stakes (nihilism versus kindness, but more precisely, control versus empathy), and what Michael Arndt's climax structure reveals about how the ending's repeated beat finally lands hardest
"No one's meant to notice this scaffolding. But it needs to be there — because otherwise people would be like, where did that come from?"
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"And it does all of that with fucking butt plug action sequences and hot dog fingers." — Chas Fisher @ 00:00:00
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:00:43 – Anywhere Anything At The Same Time: What Makes Setups and Payoffs Work 00:03:26 – › How payoffs reward attention and stitch a film into a cohesive whole 00:05:53 – › Pointers, plants, and a third category: stitches 00:10:40 – Plot Summary and Structural Architecture 00:13:22 – › The opening 15 minutes and the status quo of Evelyn's world 00:17:10 – › Midpoint reversal: the mission shifts from defeating to saving Joy 00:22:46 – › Setup, reversal, and payoff at the macro structural level 00:29:51 – Pointers, Plants, and Stitches: How the Film Layers Information 00:33:53 – › Ratatouille as throwaway joke, visual seed, and character payoff 00:39:08 – › How each alternate universe tracks a relationship, not just a skill 00:43:27 – › Verse-jumping rules established through repetition and withholding 00:50:35 – › When setups are ambiguous: pointer or plant depending on the audience 00:56:17 – The Ending and Michael Arndt's Climax Structure 01:00:43 – › Competing values: kindness versus nihilism as the philosophical stakes 01:05:05 – › Evelyn fights with kindness and lets Joy go as the decisive act 01:13:09 – › Why the repeated beat lands hardest at the father confrontation 01:17:59 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:21:46 – › Invisible scaffolding and the writer's craft of deliberate concealment 01:23:48 – › Using plot intrusions as setups for future payoffs 01:29:44 – Patreon ThanksFILMS
EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE (2022) — (w) Daniel Kwan, Daniel Scheinert (d) Daniel Scheinert, Daniel KwanSCRIPTS
Study the script: EVERYTHING EVERYWHERE ALL AT ONCE (2022) — Daniel Kwan, Daniel ScheinertRELATED EPISODES
DZ-04: Catharsis and the Post-Coital Cigarette DZ-06: Key Scenes and Unlocking the Story DZ-10: Midpoint Reversals and The Ride———
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Wed, 27 Jul 2022 - 91 - DZ-89: Opening Sequences
Listen if you want to understand how great opening sequences establish character, genre, and theme while defying genre conventions
Inspired by her tweet on how subversive an opening OCEAN’S ELEVEN has, Chas and Stu invited amazing writer/director Jessica Ellis onto the show to deep dive into opening sequences. How does a good opening setup character, genre, and theme?
In exploring how best to open your story - instead of looking at the almost mandatory studio note of “dropping you in the action” - Stu, Chas and Jess look at the inventive openings of OCEAN’S ELEVEN, LONG SHOT, ARRIVAL and A SERIOUS MAN. Each of these films opens in a way that seems to defy its genre conventions and yet still provide all the set-up it needs to perfectly tell its story.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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00:00:56 – Intro 00:12:04 – Ocean's Eleven 00:30:26 – Long Shot 01:01:32 – Arrival 01:22:22 – A Serious Man 01:41:17 – Wrap Up 01:46:47 – Patreon thanksFILMS
OCEAN'S ELEVEN (2001) — (w) Ted Griffin (d) Steven Soderbergh LONG SHOT (2019) — (w) Dan Sterling, Liz Hannah, Dan Sterling (d) Jonathan Levine ARRIVAL (2016) — (w) Eric Heisserer (d) Denis Villeneuve A SERIOUS MAN (2009) — (w) Joel Coen, Ethan CoenSCRIPTS
Study the script: OCEAN'S ELEVEN (2001) — Ted Griffin Study the script: ARRIVAL (2016) — Eric Heisserer Study the script: A SERIOUS MAN (2009) — Joel Coen, Ethan CoenLINKS
Read: What Lies WestEPISODES IN THE SEQUENCES SERIES
DZ-43: Driving Sequences - Character and Plot Intensity DZ-54: Thematic Sequences DZ-89: Opening SequencesRELATED EPISODES
DZ-15: World Building Rules, Okay? DZ-43: Driving Sequences - Character and Plot Intensity DZ-44: Marvel - First Acts and Establishing Characters———
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Tue, 31 May 2022 - 90 - DZ-88: Drama in Genre clothing
Listen if you're writing a genre film but sense your story wants to become something else entirely.
Stu and Chas reunite with TV writer & director Kodie Bedford to look at how some films start out as genre but gradually become character dramas. Or, as Stu never said on the episode "Genre in the streets, Drama in the sheets".
Together, they break down HUSTLERS, PIG and POWER OF THE DOG, to see how these films use their genre trappings to hook their audience while ultimately delivering something else entirely. We discuss chapter breaks, inciting incidents, character questions, theme and MORE.
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00:00:01 – Intro 00:00:56 – Drama in Genre Clothing 00:02:21 – Sam Elliot on Power of the Dog 00:03:19 – Lessons from Keeping Genre Fresh 00:08:14 – Hustlers 00:43:58 – Pig 01:16:24 – The Power of the Dog 01:55:02 – Key Learnings and Wrap UpFILMS
HUSTLERS (2019) — (w) Lorene Scafaria PIG (2021) — (w) Michael Sarnoski, Michael Sarnoski, Vanessa Block (d) Michael Sarnoski THE POWER OF THE DOG (2021) — (w) Jane Campion, Thomas Savage (d) Jane CampionSCRIPTS
Study the script: HUSTLERS (2019) — Lorene Scafaria Study the script: THE POWER OF THE DOG (2021) — Jane Campion, Thomas SavageLINKS
Website: Kodie Bedford: Breaking down characters and worldsEPISODES IN THE TWISTING GENRE SERIES
DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh DZ-88: Drama in Genre clothingRELATED EPISODES
DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh———
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Sun, 01 May 2022 - 89 - DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh
Listen when you're writing within a genre but terrified you'll deliver something your audience has already seen.
In tackling this enormous topic, Stu and Chads enlist professional TV writer and director Kodie Bedford, someone who has somehow managed to defy genre pigeon-holing by writing mystery, comedy and vampire shows.
The three of them look at GET OUT, PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN and THE INVISIBLE MAN (with reference to PARASITE, JOHN WICK, TAKEN, KNIVES OUT and more) to see what tools the writers have used to deliver on the expectations of a genre while moving that genre on, without writing something stale.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:57 – Intro: Keeping Genre Fresh 00:03:10 – What is Genre? 00:16:30 – Get Out 00:45:10 – Promising Young Woman 01:25:08 – The Invisible Man 01:59:18 – Wrap Up 02:11:44 – Thanks to our Patreons!FILMS
GET OUT (2017) — (w) Jordan Peele PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN (2020) — (w) Emerald Fennell THE INVISIBLE MAN (2020) — (w) Leigh Whannell, H G Wells, Leigh Whannell (d) Leigh WhannellSCRIPTS
Study the script: GET OUT (2017) — Jordan Peele Study the script: PROMISING YOUNG WOMAN (2020) — Emerald FennellSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Perp & Victim 2: Opening Kills in Horror (2000s+)LINKS
Website: Kodie Bedford: Breaking down characters and worldsEPISODES IN THE TWISTING GENRE SERIES
DZ-87: Keeping Genre Fresh DZ-88: Drama in Genre clothingRELATED EPISODES
DZ-54: Thematic Sequences DZ-68: Using POV to structure KNIVES OUT DZ-69: PARASITE & Audience Questions———
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Mon, 28 Mar 2022 - 88 - DZ-86: Backmatter - Minimum Viable Product
Listen for screenwriting lessons from 2021, strategies for pitching projects, and insights on running a writers workshop
In their annual full backwater episode, Stu and Chas let out their pandemic hair, drop the ruse of objectivity, and allow themselves to have even more options about writing and the business of writing.
In this Backmatter entry, they go deep on: future episode topics; their screenwriting lessons from 2021 (especially on control); pitching projects; the minimum viable product & minimum loveable thing; and share their exper iences with running a writers workshop/group.
There are no Star Wars references in this episode, but there are plenty of Die Hard ones. Die Hard is the new Star Wars. Get over it.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Backmatter 00:03:02 – Looking Forward - Episode Ideas 00:19:40 – Looking Back - Screenwriting Lessons 00:49:46 – Looking Now - Processes 01:28:26 – OutroFILMS
DIE HARD (1988) — (w) Roderick Thorp, Jeb Stuart, Steven E De Souza (d) John MctiernanSCRIPTS
Study the script: DIE HARD (1988) — Roderick Thorp, Jeb Stuart, Steven E De SouzaSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
DIE HARD: integrating inserts in the action Character Introductions 002: Hans GruberEPISODES IN THE BACKMATTER SERIES
DZ-17: Where's my gold-plated ensuite? DZ-36: Backmatter - Time Risk and Fixing Movies DZ-47: Backmatter - A Lost Jedi, White Knighting, and Writers-On-Set DZ-57: Backmatter - Aesthetics and Forgiveness in Writing DZ-64: Backmatter - Controlling your Work, Treatments, and Writing Styles DZ-77: Backmatter - Prioritising and choosing projects DZ-86: Backmatter - Minimum Viable Product DZ-95: Backmatter - Building and Maintenance———
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Tue, 01 Feb 2022 - 87 - DZ-85: Choices & Decisions 2 - The Farewell & Wrath of Man
Listen when you want to show a character refusing to change despite every opportunity to do so.
In our second part of our “series” on Choices & Decisions, we take a deep dive into THE FAREWELL and WRATH OF MAN, with a sidebar on NOMADLAND.
In THE FAREWELL, we consider how the choice/decision to lie underpins every sene of the film (to great effect).
In NOMADLAND, we consider how using choice and decision is a great way to show how a character doesn’t change.
And in WRATH OF MAN, we look at how non-linear narrative - and its decoupling of choice, decisions and consequence (wouldn’t that be a detripling???) impacts the audience experience, especially how we feel about characters.
The terminology we settled on in Part 1 was:
CHOICE: Are the options presented to the character. DECISION: Is the knowing consideration of the choice and resulting action. CONSEQUENCE: is the resulting outcome from the choice.Thanks to Chris for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:01:38 – Decisions & Choices Recap 00:03:41 – The Farewell 00:28:58 – Nomadland 00:37:39 – Wrath of Man 01:36:54 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:45:06 – BackmatterFILMS
THE FAREWELL (2019) — (w) Lulu Wang WRATH OF MAN (2021) — (w) Ivan Atkinson, Marn Davies, Guy Ritchie (d) Guy Ritchie NOMADLAND (2021) — (w) Chloe ZhaoSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE FAREWELL (2019) — Lulu Wang Study the script: NOMADLAND (2021) — Chloe ZhaoSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Editing as Imperfect Memory in THE FAREWELLLINKS
Read: Damon Young Read:EPISODES IN THE CHOICES AND DECISIONS SERIES
DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart DZ-85: Choices & Decisions 2 - The Farewell & Wrath of ManRELATED EPISODES
DZ-34: Game of Choices - Decision Making and Character Implications DZ-48: One-Shot - Blade Runner 2049 – Agency vs Choice DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart———
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Wed, 17 Nov 2021 - 86 - DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart
Listen how the separation of choice, decision, and consequence (for a character) creates emotional impact.
In order to better understand dramatising of character, Chas and Stu take a very draft zero look at very specific tool: choices and decisions. We analyse three films through the decisions made by their characters. In particular, how the audience understanding of: the choice available, the considered decision itself, and the consequence changes how we feel about these characters. And how separating those three things can create different emotional effects on your audience.
We debate this in the episode, but this is the terminology we settle on:
CHOICE: Are the options presented to the character. DECISION: Is the knowing consideration of the choice and resulting action. CONSEQUENCE: is the resulting outcome from the choice.Part 1 (this part) establishes what we mean by choice and decision, and then takes a deep dive into BOOKSMART, directed by Olivia Wilde, and written by Emily Halpern, Sarah Haskins and Susanna Fogel. We all discuss FLEABAG, SEVEN, and old favourite, Star Wars.
Part 2 will turn our analytical eye on THE FAREWELL and WRATH OF MAN.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Introduction 00:01:36 – Choices vs Decisions 00:19:51 – Booksmart 01:01:41 – Decisions & Structure 01:05:50 – Mills' decision in Se7en 01:07:50 – Key Learnings and Wrap UpFILMS
BOOKSMART (2019) — (w) Sarah Haskins, Emily Halpern, Katie Silberman, Susanna Fogel (d) Olivia Wilde SE7EN (1995) — (w) Andrew Kevin Walker (d) David Fincher STAR WARS (1977) — (w) George Lucas THE FAREWELL (2019) — (w) Lulu Wang WRATH OF MAN (2021) — (w) Ivan Atkinson, Marn Davies, Guy Ritchie (d) Guy RitchieSHOWS
FLEABAG — (w) Phoebe Waller BridgeSCRIPTS
Study the script: BOOKSMART (2019) — Sarah Haskins, Emily Halpern, Katie Silberman, Susanna Fogel Study the script: SE7EN (1995) — Andrew Kevin Walker Study the script: THE FAREWELL (2019) — Lulu WangSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Editing as Imperfect Memory in THE FAREWELLEPISODES IN THE CHOICES AND DECISIONS SERIES
DZ-84: Choices & Decisions 1 - Booksmart DZ-85: Choices & Decisions 2 - The Farewell & Wrath of ManRELATED EPISODES
DZ-34: Game of Choices - Decision Making and Character Implications DZ-48: One-Shot - Blade Runner 2049 – Agency vs Choice———
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Sat, 30 Oct 2021 - 85 - DZ-83: A Very Thematic Stand-up Special!
Listen if you want to understand how stand-up comedians grip audiences and build emotional arcs (and what narrative tools screenwriters can borrow from comedy)!
Standup comedians can keep audiences gripped to their every word for over an hour, and often bring them to emotional climaxes by the end. So how do they do it and what tools can apply to scripted narratives?
For this deep dive into standup, Stu and Chas are joined by the super-talented comic and podcaster Alice Fraser. Which is rather fortuitous. Because not only are we schooled on comedy techniques, but because Alice also has a Masters in Narrative Rhetoric.
So as we dive in to NANETTE by Hannah Gadsby, BABY COBRA by Ali Wong and IT’S THE FIREWORKS TALKING by Daniel Kitson (with more than a passing reference to Alice’s own show SAVAGE and INSIDE by Bo Burnham), we analyse narrative structure, transitions, set-ups and pay-offs used by stand-ups…
But we end up focusing on exploring thematic tools - particularly the Aristotelean concepts of the rhetorical triangle:
- logos (how the story is told); - ethos (who the storyteller is); and - pathos (how the audience emotionally engages).
With these powers combined, storytellers of all kinds can produce work of thematic power and resonance. Or just funny.
And in backmatter, we discuss adapting Savage for the recorded stage with Alice!
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"If you introduce this idea in a harmless form, then they're willing to swallow it later. When, if you presented it raw out front, they would recoil." — Alice Fraser @ 00:11:22
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Q: What can screenwriters learn from the storytelling techniques used by stand-up comedians? 00:03:25 – Alice Fraser on Comedy 00:07:54 – › Comedy as a tool for confronting difficult emotional truths 00:12:03 – › Presence, politics, and visual storytelling in BABY COBRA and NANETTE 00:15:44 – › How format shapes stand-up structure across cultures 00:22:33 – Comedy tools to be explored 00:26:21 – NANETTE by Hannah Gadsby 00:29:03 – › Ethos, logos, pathos as structural framework for comedy 00:34:04 – › Unifying themes and audience-driven meaning in stand-up 00:41:38 – › Joke structure as incomplete story and the fugue form 00:45:15 – › Jokes as distance, intimacy, and audience manipulation 00:48:47 – Transitions in and out of theme 00:52:39 – › American vs. British structural approaches to stand-up narrative 00:58:42 – › Catharsis mechanics and the retrospective reframe 01:05:51 – › Tension as meta-commentary on gender and unresolved pain 01:08:32 – BABY COBRA by Ali Wong 01:13:02 – › Club bits vs. connective tissue in long-form comedy structure 01:20:05 – › Reprise as structural skeleton: the trunk and branch model 01:29:26 – › Audience participation, the Betty Crocker principle, and earned subtext 01:34:39 – › Heightened dialogue and visual imagery conjured through language 01:37:57 – IT'S THE FIREWORKS TALKING by Daniel Kitson 01:42:47 – › What stand-up reveals about art that moves audiences 01:49:02 – › Language as colour grading and hyper-real specificity 01:55:30 – › Status shifts as a structural tool in comedy and drama 02:00:06 – › Character voice as persona and the narrator's ethos 02:04:45 – Key Learnings 02:07:41 – › Layering emotional groundwork for recontextualization 02:14:39 – Backmatter - Adapting SAVAGE 02:17:03 – › Performing tension for unseen audiences 02:22:53 – › Wide shots, private moments, and embodied scripts 02:24:35 – › Adapting the illusion of intimacy to screen 02:28:17 – › Narrator versus character and the writer's personaFILMS
NANETTE (2017) — (w) Hannah Gadsby (d) Madeleine Parry, Jon Olb BABY COBRA (2016) — (w) Ali Wong (d) Jay Karas INSIDE (2021) — (w) Bo Burnham IT'S THE FIREWORKS TALKING (2007) — (w) Daniel KitsonLINKS
Listen: Alice Fraser's Savage Part 1 Listen: Alice Fraser's Savage Part 2 Watch: Alice Fraser's Savage on Amazon Listen: Hannah Gadsby on the Working it Out podcast with Mike Birbiglia Listen: Daniel Kitson's It's The Fireworks Talking (2007) Sponsor: Script Up! Use promo code DZ10 to get 10% off———
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Wed, 08 Sep 2021 - 84 - DZ-82: Dramatising Given Circumstances in WATCHMEN
Listen if you're drowning your readers in world-building and can't figure out how to make it awesome!
In this final podcast release of last year’s run of LiveSoLation episodes, Chas and Stu are joined by Uber-geek Mel Killingsworth (who else?) in an epic exploration of how Dave Gibbons’ and Alan Moore’s seminal graphic novel WATCHMEN is adapted differently in Zack Snyder’s 2009 film and Damon Lindelof’s 2019 HBO television show.
For this podcast release, we focus on a single craft tool: GIVEN CIRCUMSTANCES. Traditionally an acting tool, we look at how it is also a useful writing tool: how is your story world different to your audience’s lived world and how best to communicate that?
In terms of WATCHMEN (as you will hear), there is so much given circumstances to convey — in terms of alternate history, superhero rules, political rules, character backstory, character worldview — that is done excellently in both the movie and the TV show that this becomes a masterclass in exposition.
We also touch on narrative structure and tone: how presenting the exact same information in a different order or through a different tonal lens can change how it lands for an audience. But this is explored much more fully in the very-visual companion YouTube videos.
While this episode may not be for the feint of heart, we feel it is one of our best. Hope you do too. Quantity has a quality of its very own.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Introduction 00:01:02 – Watching the Watchmen 00:06:13 – Summaries 00:17:07 – Given Circumstances 00:38:39 – The Characters 00:51:07 – Theme & Characters 01:02:13 – Narrative Structure & Theme 01:27:07 – Worldview 01:33:47 – Dr Manhattan 01:51:50 – Wrap UpFILMS
WATCHMEN (2009) — (w) David Hayter, Alex Tse (d) Zack SnyderSHOWS
WATCHMEN — (w) Damon LindelofSCRIPTS
Study the script: WATCHMEN (2009) — David Hayter, Alex TseSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
How To Transition #001 - MATCH CROSSFADES The Eyes Have It: WATCHMEN The Eyes of WATCHMENLINKS
Read: Watchmen by Alan Moore YouTube: Narrative Structure and Given Circumstances in WATCHMEN YouTube: Adapting the Watchmen - Comic to Movie, or: how changing the tone changes the theme YouTube: Cal Abar Heaven Is Pretend speech - Watchmen S01E04RELATED EPISODES
DZ-37: Excelling at Exposition (Part 1) DZ-38: Excelling at Exposition (Part 2)———
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Wed, 18 Aug 2021 - 83 - DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4
Listen if you're preparing to pitch a project and want to understand how to create compelling visual materials
Chas and Stu are joined by writer/director/producer/multi-hyphenate Marc Furmie of Rezistor Studios to talk all things pitch decks and look books. Coming from an advertising and music video background, Marc shares his experience in putting together visual materials to pitch a project. We discuss the difference between pitch decks and lookbooks, how they help you sell your projects, what buyers are looking for, television vs features, and how do we make yours better?
This is a podcast cutdown of the live stream that was done with Marc. So if you'd like to see what we are discussing (including a critique of a listener's pitch deck) then check out our YouTube recording: https://youtu.be/T5u1uzKNVQs.
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YouTube: DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books (Full Video) Read: Rezistor Studios Website: Eagle Image Library Website: Adobe Fonts Website: Da FontEPISODES IN THE DEVELOPMENT TOOLS SERIES
DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story? DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2 DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4 DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3———
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Wed, 30 Jun 2021 - 82 - DZ-80: Interweaving Timelines 3 - Little Women
Listen to explore non-chronological structures can make work thematically resonant.
In our final part, part 3, of our Interweaving Timelines series, we — Chas, Stu & Mel — take a deep dive into Greta Gerwig's 2019 adaptation of Little Women. In her adaptation of Louisa May Alcott's iconic novels, Greta chose to interweave the seperate timelines of Little Women and it's sequel, Good Wives, to create a thematically and emotionally potent work. This differs from all the other adaptations, which have chosen to keep the chronological storytelling of the source material.
We compare Gerwig's choices and their resulting effects with Gilliam Armstrong & Robin Swicord's more faithful (and chronological) 1994 version. It's almost like a scientific experiment!
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Introduction 00:00:37 – ScriptUp Sponsorship 00:02:00 – Little Women - 2019 vs 1994 00:06:35 – 2019's Interweaving Timelines 00:15:29 – Summarising the plot points 00:31:39 – Initial contrasts with chronological telling 00:35:32 – Laurie's Proposal 00:54:10 – Amy and Laurie's courtship 01:03:34 – Beth's Death 01:26:44 – Book burning and ice skating 01:36:51 – How the structure expresses theme 01:44:06 – Key Learnings and Wrap Up 01:59:02 – BackmatterFILMS
LITTLE WOMEN (2019) — (w) Greta Gerwig, Louisa May Alcott (d) Greta Gerwig LITTLE WOMEN (1994) — (w) Louisa May Alcott, Robin Swicord (d) Gillian ArmstrongSCRIPTS
Study the script: LITTLE WOMEN (2019) — Greta Gerwig, Louisa May AlcottSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Art of the Title Sequence: LITTLE WOMENLINKS
Listen: Scriptnotes, Ep 433: The One with Greta GerwigEPISODES IN THE INTERWEAVING TIMELINES SERIES
DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer DZ-79: Interweaving Timelines 2 - The Social Network DZ-80: Interweaving Timelines 3 - Little WomenRELATED EPISODES
DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer DZ-79: Interweaving Timelines 2 - The Social Network———
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Mon, 31 May 2021 - 81 - DZ-79: Interweaving Timelines 2 - The Social Network
Listen to understand how manage stakes when you're using flashforwards.
In this Part 2 of Interweaving Timelines (aka The Stu Monologue Episode), Mel, Chas and Stu tackle Sorkin/Fincher's The Social Network. As you’ll hear, it is clearly Stu’s favourite of the examples we cover and, ah, not Mel’s favourite. While all three bring their own biases and opinions on the reality of Facebook as it has become, we do manage to put the destruction of democracy to one side to actually analyse the meticulous craft that this film displays.
We analyse Sorkin’s on-the-page skill with time jumps, managing intercutting and introducing characters - as well as explore how the flash-forward technique manages the absence of stakes (i.e. we know Facebook exists) and creates a different emotional experience to the flashbacks of Destroyer. Finally, and most importantly, we look at how the interweaving timelines change how the audience feel about Mark Zuckerberg (as portrayed in this film).
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Introduction 00:01:48 – The Social Network 00:07:36 – The flash forward structure 00:18:46 – Why did we pick this film? 00:29:41 – What are the stakes? 00:42:45 – Time jumps & transitions 00:52:59 – Audience's perception of Mark 01:00:45 – Storyteller cuts 01:09:20 – Sorkin vs Fincher 01:16:07 – Wrap up & key learnings 01:23:15 – BackmatterFILMS
THE SOCIAL NETWORK (2010) — (w) Aaron Sorkin (d) David FincherSCRIPTS
Study the script: THE SOCIAL NETWORK (2010) — Aaron SorkinEPISODES IN THE INTERWEAVING TIMELINES SERIES
DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer DZ-79: Interweaving Timelines 2 - The Social Network DZ-80: Interweaving Timelines 3 - Little WomenRELATED EPISODES
DZ-43: Driving Sequences - Character and Plot Intensity DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer———
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Fri, 30 Apr 2021 - 80 - DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer
Listen when you're writting multiple timelines and struggling to anchor your reader to one timeline's perspective.
Stu and Chas are joined by Mel Killingsworth to dissect interweaving timelines. Not anthology films. Not Cloud Atlas. But films where two plot lines featuring the same characters, but from different timelines, are woven together.
How do you manage stakes when you know a character’s future? What questions does this prompt in the viewer? And how the hell do you orient the reader?
To answer these questions, it will take three episodes. In this Part 1, our intrepid team (and Mel’s 42 pages of homework) tackle the 2018 film DESTROYER directed by Karen Kusama, written by Hay & Manfredi and starring Nicole Kidman.
Meanwhile, Part 2 will cover THE SOCIAL NETWORK and Part 3 will compare the 1994 Gillian Armstrong version with 2019 Greta Gerwig version of LITTLE WOMEN. Whew.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:10 – Intro 00:01:46 – Interweaving Timelines? 00:14:54 – Destroyer & Timelines 00:35:28 – Indicating Timelines 00:39:21 – Ordering the Key Events 00:51:50 – Theme & Timelines 01:06:44 – Questions prompted by the ending 01:20:58 – Key Learnings & Wrap Up 01:37:37 – BackmatterFILMS
DESTROYER (2018) — (w) Matt Manfredi, Phil Hay (d) Karyn KusamaSCRIPTS
Study the script: DESTROYER (2018) — Matt Manfredi, Phil HayLINKS
Website: A Game Designer's Analysis Of QAnonEPISODES IN THE INTERWEAVING TIMELINES SERIES
DZ-78: Interweaving Timelines 1 - Destroyer DZ-79: Interweaving Timelines 2 - The Social Network DZ-80: Interweaving Timelines 3 - Little WomenRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions DZ-46: Structure & Point of View———
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Thu, 01 Apr 2021 - 79 - DZ-77: Backmatter - Prioritising and choosing projects
Listen if you're starting a new co-writing relationship, managing multiple projects, or wondering how to prioritize your next screenplay.
In their now-annual full backmatter episode, Stu and Chas let their hair down, drop the guise of objectivity, and allow themselves to have an even more subjective opinion about writing and the business of writing.
In this particular Backmatter entry, they wax lyrical on deep breath: character journeys, hyperlink cinema, keeping genre fresh, beginning a new co-writing relationship, managing multiple projects, choosing your next project, and - naturally - Star Wars (and Ready or Not)
BTW the system using folders is actually from Anthony Johnston.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:02:55 – DZ update 00:11:18 – Mooting future topics 00:39:51 – Questions to ask of a new co-writing relationship 00:49:56 – Why is pressure different to stakes and obstacles? 00:55:22 – How to manage multiple projects? 01:07:08 – How to pick your next project? 01:19:54 – The Mandalorian Season 2FILMS
READY OR NOT (2019) — (w) Guy Busick, R Christopher Murphy (d) Tyler Gillett, Matt Bettinelli OlpinSHOWS
THE MANDALORIAN 2x1 — (w) Jon FavreauSCRIPTS
Study the script: READY OR NOT (2019) — Guy Busick, R Christopher MurphyLINKS
Read: Brandon Sanderson Read: Anthony JohnstonEPISODES IN THE BACKMATTER SERIES
DZ-17: Where's my gold-plated ensuite? DZ-36: Backmatter - Time Risk and Fixing Movies DZ-47: Backmatter - A Lost Jedi, White Knighting, and Writers-On-Set DZ-57: Backmatter - Aesthetics and Forgiveness in Writing DZ-64: Backmatter - Controlling your Work, Treatments, and Writing Styles DZ-77: Backmatter - Prioritising and choosing projects DZ-86: Backmatter - Minimum Viable Product DZ-95: Backmatter - Building and Maintenance———
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Sun, 28 Feb 2021 - 78 - DZ-76: Spotlight on Sofia Coppola
Listen to discover how Sofia Coppola crafts character performance on the page and uses whitespace to create her distinctive cinematic voice
Following the success of the Tips from Tarantino episode, we have again decided to look at three different scripts from over the course of a long screenwriting career from a single writer to see what we can learn. Our beloved patreons not only selected Sofia Coppola as said writer, but also selected the scripts to analyse: LOST IN TRANSLATION, THE BLING RING and THE BEGUILED.
Stu and Chas are joined by repeat Draft Zero offender Melanie Killingsworth and are surprised to find that Coppola does not often write the tone or experience of her films into her scripts (given how specific her tone is and how unique the experiences of her films are). Instead, we are treated to a masterclass in writing character performance on the page - actor catnip, if you will - as well as Coppola’s insightful use of whitespace.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode, and to Carissa Lee for reading the script excerpts.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:02:12 – Sofia Coppola & Writing to Direct 00:13:49 – Lost in Translation 00:54:07 – The Bling Ring 01:18:24 – The Beguiled 01:34:53 – Wrap Up & Key Learnings 01:45:28 – Backmatter: Cultural Portray in Lost in TranslationFILMS
LOST IN TRANSLATION (2003) — (w) Sofia Coppola THE BLING RING (2013) — (w) Sofia Coppola THE BEGUILED (2017) — (w) Thomas Cullinan, Sofia Coppola (d) Sofia CoppolaSCRIPTS
Study the script: LOST IN TRANSLATION (2003) — Sofia Coppola Study the script: THE BLING RING (2013) — Sofia Coppola Study the script: THE BEGUILED (2017) — Thomas Cullinan, Sofia CoppolaLINKS
Scriopts: DZ-76 Sofia Coppola Collated Scripts Read: The Guardian - Hit film gets lost in racism row Read: Latent racism in 'Lost in Translation'EPISODES IN THE FILMMAKER SPOTLIGHT SERIES
DZ-18: Michael Bay - F*ing the Frame and P*ing the Page DZ-76: Spotlight on Sofia Coppola DZ-13: True That - Tips from TarantinoRELATED EPISODES
DZ-13: True That - Tips from Tarantino DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination———
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Mon, 01 Feb 2021 - 77 - DZ-75: Fury Road & Visual Storytelling
Listen to hear how visual storytelling can carry an entire narrative with minimal dialogue.
Stu and Chas are joined by filmmaker, podcaster and writer Lia Matthew Brownn to deep dive into FURY ROAD and its astounding visual storytelling, both on the page and on screen. We talk about setups and payoffs, given circumstances, image systems, environmental storytelling, and how the relationship between Furiosa and Max is built over the course of the story with very little dialogue (besides Tom Hardy’s grunts and the odd bellow of “MEDIOCRE!”). You can also watch the complete live stream on YouTube or just the breakdown of the Furiosa/Max fight (which isn’t in the podcast) here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f8uYAbEcQeQ&feature=youtu.be
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Fury Road & Visual Storytelling 00:01:07 – Why Fury Road? 00:06:17 – World Building & Given Circumstances 00:23:19 – World Building & Plot Points 00:30:50 – Setups & Payoffs 00:35:03 – Who is the Protagonist? 00:35:08 – Max & Furiosa's Arc 01:00:44 – Stray Observations 01:05:28 – Wrap UpFILMS
MAD MAX: FURY ROAD (2015) — (w) George Miller, Nico Lathouris, Brendan Mccarthy (d) George MillerSCRIPTS
Study the script: MAD MAX: FURY ROAD (2015) — George Miller, Nico Lathouris, Brendan MccarthyLINKS
Read: Buy Lia's book! The Cinema of Survival -- Mad Max: Fury Road Read: Cinephillia and Beyond - In Search of Our Better Selves: The Rebirth, Redemption and Road Warriors of George Miller's Mad Max: Fury Road Read: The Art of Mad Max Max Fury Road YouTube: Breaking down the Max vs Furiosa Fight - Storyboards vs FilmedRELATED EPISODES
DZ-33: Protagonist vs Hero - Dawn of Character Function———
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Thu, 31 Dec 2020 - 76 - DZ-74: Midsommar & Folk Horror
Listen if you want to understand how folk horror works as a genre and how Ari Aster uses it to explore grief and toxic relationships
Draft Zero return with their next YouTube livestream! Stu and Chas are joined by previous guest (and successful screenwriter) C.S. McMullen for a deep dive into MIDSOMMAR! We analyse the film through the lens of Folk Horror, but tackle broader topics such as horror vs dread, rising tension, transgressions, unfilmables, and portraying toxic relationships.
You can also watch the recorded live stream on YouTube.
Audio quotations used for educational purposes only. Timestamps indicated below. Chapter markers included in the mp3.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Misommar & Folk Horror 00:00:15 – Why Midsommar? 00:03:54 – What makes horror "folk"? 00:18:20 – The First Ritual 00:32:17 – Transgressions 01:07:32 – Grief & The Ending 01:23:18 – The May Queen 01:40:04 – Wrap Up & An ExerciseFILMS
MIDSOMMAR (2019) — (w) Ari AsterSCRIPTS
Study the script: MIDSOMMAR (2019) — Ari AsterLINKS
Read: Watch: Midsommar Read: Watch: The Wicker ManRELATED EPISODES
DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination DZ-61: Unfilmables 2 - Moments of Awe DZ-62: Unfilmables 3 - As Ifs & Emotional Context———
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Tue, 01 Dec 2020 - 75 - DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3
Listen if you're preparing treatments, loglines, or outlines to pitch to producers or agencies.
In developing our stories and scripts, we have probably written some combination of treatments and loglines and outlines. Some of us have probably even sent these development materials out to producers or agencies when “selling” a project — as a step towards getting someone to read or gulp produce your material. If so... have you written them differently? Should you have? You probably should have...
In this final part from the epic recording on short documents, Stephen explores how we should craft the words on the page and structure these documents differently when they are to sell the project as opposed to develop the project. Something that Chas and Stu badly need to hear, learn and apply right now.
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EPISODES IN THE DEVELOPMENT TOOLS SERIES
DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story? DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2 DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4 DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3RELATED EPISODES
DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis – Development Tools 2———
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Wed, 21 Oct 2020 - 74 - DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2
Listen tolearn concrete tools for developing theme in the early stages of your writing.
Continuing our look at tools used in development, Chas & Stu are joined by Stephen Cleary to talk about Theme, The Thematic Logline and what Stephen calls The Story Synopsis. All are tools to help writers better understand their theme and how it is dramatised. We use the classic film WITNESS as an example, so spoilers abound.
Thanks to Meegan May for reading the examples. Meegan May is an emerging queer screenwriter and former military intelligence analyst with plenty of award winning scripts and extensive experience in development. Look her up! http://meeganmay.com
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Theme in Development 00:01:54 – The Story Synopsis 00:04:19 – Plot & Theme / Praxis & Mythos 00:11:12 – Back to the Story Synopsis 00:13:45 – Witness 00:16:09 – Thematic Logline 00:17:00 – Using the Thematic Logline in development 00:22:26 – Witness - 1st Act in Story Synopsis 00:25:46 – Witness - 2nd Act in Story Synopsis 00:28:55 – Characters, Plot & Theme 00:30:27 – Witness - Book drops his facadé 00:33:25 – Witness - 3rd Act in Story Synopsis 00:40:49 – Witness - Complete Story Synopsis 00:41:51 – Using the Story Synopsis in development 00:48:04 – Rewriting using the Story Synopsis 00:54:53 – Wrap UpFILMS
WITNESS (1985) — (w) William Kelley, Earl W Wallace, William Kelley, Earl W Wallace, Pamela Wallace (d) Peter Weir LAWRENCE OF ARABIA (1962) — (w) Michael Wilson, Robert Bolt (d) David Lean MACBETH (1971) — (w) Kenneth Tynan, Roman Polanski (d) Roman PolanskiSCRIPTS
Study the script: WITNESS (1985) — William Kelley, Earl W Wallace, William Kelley, Earl W Wallace, Pamela Wallace Study the script: LAWRENCE OF ARABIA (1962) — Michael Wilson, Robert BoltSHOT ZERO DEEP DIVES
Editing an Emotional Jolt: WITNESSLINKS
Website: Meegan MayEPISODES IN THE DEVELOPMENT TOOLS SERIES
DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story? DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2 DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4 DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3RELATED EPISODES
DZ-41: Theme and Worldview DZ-54: Thematic Sequences DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1———
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Mon, 28 Sep 2020 - 73 - DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1
Listen to understand why a treatment isn't something to dread, but the plot-development tool that saves you months of writing.
Stu and Chas are joined by fan-favourite, Stephen Cleary, to NOT look at what makes great screenplays work -- but what makes great "short documents" work. We draw on Stephen Cleary's wealth of experience in developing work with writers, as a producer, as a script editor and as a former head of development.
This recording turned especially epic and so we have divided it into three parts that can be listened to in any order.
Part 1 (this part) explores the short documents and tools you can use to develop your story’s PLOT before going to script, including the Premise, the Logline, various synopses, character documents, and - of course - the dreaded Treatment… But also looks at development tools that aren’t written like: script reads, mini-shoots and animatics.
Stay tuned for :
Part 2 (DZ-71) which delves into documents that develop your story’s theme; and then Part 3 (DZ-73) where we look at how to write short documents differently when your objective isn’t story development but rather selling your idea/project.As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro 00:13:32 – The writing gym 00:19:32 – Animatics & Script Readings 00:28:08 – Telling your story out loud 00:31:07 – Why Treatments suck 00:36:49 – The Premise 00:44:43 – Exploring WRITTEN short docs 01:04:29 – What about non-hero's journey? 01:14:36 – Using short docs to keep going 01:21:04 – Back to the Premise 01:24:37 – Moving from Premise to Logline 01:25:33 – Stay tuned for Part 2!EPISODES IN THE DEVELOPMENT TOOLS SERIES
DZ-106: How do you know if you have enough story? DZ-71: Treatments & Loglines - Development Tools 1 DZ-72: Theme & The Story Synopsis - Development Tools 2 DZ-81: Pitch Decks & Look Books - Development Tools 4 DZ-73: Selling documents - Development Tools 3———
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Full show notes at: https://draft-zero.com/2020/dz-71/
Tue, 01 Sep 2020 - 72 - DZ-70: Joker & Melodrama
Listen if you're writing a character whose trauma becomes the engine of your entire narrative.
Draft Zero return with their next YouTube livestream! Stu and Chas take a deep dive into JOKER and analyse the film through the story paradigm of melodrama. Is it a melodrama? Why or why not does that matter? And does that influence how it has been written on the page?
They then answer listeners questions on JOKER and more.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Intro: Joker & Melodrama 00:01:42 – What is Melodrama? 00:16:47 – Why Joker? 00:23:25 – Is Joker a Melodrama? 00:24:40 – Father & Son 00:28:00 – Penny Fleck's confession 00:41:30 – What is it like to be powerless? 00:54:35 – Bathroom Dancing 01:01:12 – The Joker Born 01:15:04 – Arthur Stands Up 01:28:42 – Listener QuestionsFILMS
JOKER (2019) — (w) Scott Silver, Todd Phillips (d) Todd PhillipsSCRIPTS
Study the script: JOKER (2019) — Scott Silver, Todd PhillipsLINKS
Read: Slap Happy Larry - Tips for Writing Melodrama Website: DZ LiVEsolation AnnouncmentsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-67: Writing Passive Protagonists & Melodrama———
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Thu, 23 Jul 2020 - 71 - DZ-69: PARASITE & Audience Questions
Listen to understand how refusing to give your audience moral clarity can deepen their investment in character fates.
Draft Zero return with their next YouTube livestream! Stu and Chas take a deep dive into PARASITE and how its mastery of audience questions elevates the film. They then answer listeners questions on PARASITE and much more.
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→ Read the transcript for this episode.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Cold Open 00:01:37 – Introducing Parasite: Why Audience Questions Elevate the Film 00:05:36 – › How sequence questions control the audience's moment-to-moment engagement 00:09:54 – › When filmmakers withhold plot questions to force thematic reflection 00:10:08 – PARASITE'S Cast of Characters 00:12:43 – The Establishing Sequence: Introducing the Kims 00:15:21 – › How given circumstances prime audience sympathy before the plan begins 00:19:35 – › Directing and blocking as tools for revealing character intention on the page 00:23:44 – The Kims Infiltrate the Park Household 00:27:01 – › Narrative point of view and when the audience falls behind the characters 00:31:23 – › How the shift from opportunism to plan changes the audience's relationship to character 00:37:04 – › Escalating micro-questions and the fun-and-games logic of the con sequence 00:42:50 – The Kims Settle In: Character Questions Replace Plot Questions 00:47:13 – The Midpoint: What Is in the Basement 00:53:19 – The Flood: Theme Surfaces When Plot Questions Dissolve 00:56:20 – The Birthday Party and the Unresolved Bomb 00:59:04 – › Mr Kim's no-plan monologue as the film's thematic statement 01:03:44 – › How class resentment is built to justify an irreversible character decision 01:05:29 – What Is the Parasite? The Double Ending and the Final Frame 01:10:30 – Listener Questions and Backmatter 01:13:43 – › Screenplay competitions as deadlines that force writers to let go 01:17:15 – › Elevated genre and when plot pauses force audiences to ask what the film is aboutFILMS
PARASITE (2019) — (w) Bong Joon Ho, Bong Joon Ho, Han Jin Won (d) Bong Joon HoSCRIPTS
Study the script: PARASITE (2019) — Bong Joon Ho, Bong Joon Ho, Han Jin WonLINKS
Website: DZ LiVEsolation AnnouncmentsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-46: Structure & Point of View DZ-54: Thematic Sequences———
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Wed, 10 Jun 2020 - 70 - DZ-68: Using POV to structure KNIVES OUT
Listen to help you master the gap between what your audience knows and what your characters know.
Born out of isolation madness, this episode is an edited version of Draft Zero’s first YouTube livestream. Stu and Chas both watched KNIVES OUT and - together with our listeners - broke down each sequence and turning point by reference to what the audience knows in relation to the characters (aka narrative point of view). They then answer listener questions on KNIVES OUT and much else besides live on air.
If you want to watch along instead of listen, the video of the episode can be found here:
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:05:19 – Summary of narrative point of view and audience expectations 00:10:12 – Exploring some of Rian Johnson's word craft 00:14:15 – Micro POV shifts in the interview montage 00:21:16 – How POV shifts turn the film 00:47:22 – When to let your foot off the plot gas 00:59:46 – Backmatter / Listener QuestionsFILMS
KNIVES OUT (2019) — (w) Rian JohnsonSCRIPTS
Study the script: KNIVES OUT (2019) — Rian JohnsonRELATED EPISODES
DZ-05: Shifting audience point of view and heightened emotions DZ-46: Structure & Point of View———
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Sun, 17 May 2020 - 69 - DZ-67: Writing Passive Protagonists & Melodrama
Listen if you want to write powerful stories centred on characters without much agency.
Stu and Chas are joined by Stephen Cleary following his exploration into Melodrama, and together they try to reclaim the word from its pejorative meaning.
By examining powerful Melodramas - like THE HANDMAID’S TALE, LADIES IN BLACK and STRANGER THINGS… with many a tangent on MARRIAGE STORY, PETE’S DRAGON, MILDRED PIERCE, GAME OF THRONES, LOST, THE JOKER, THE KILLING, THE WITCHER, war movies and survival films - the three hosts try to unpick what makes Melodrama an alternate story paradigm to the Hero’s Journey.
They delve into how Melodramas centre on characters that don’t have agency; where the plot happens to characters (as opposed to being driven by them); how Melodramas don’t end so much as close; and how all of the above delves into character questions more deeply than the Hero’s Journey. And to wrap it all up, the kind of techniques you use on the page to write effective melodramas.
Content Warning : There is a lot of discussion in this episode about melodrama being associated with "women’s stories" vs "the hero’s journey" - which is biased towards a "masculine" mode of storytelling - and we fully acknowledge in the show and here that we are three cismen talking about these things.
This episode was edited by Christopher Walker.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:01:25 – Intro: Melodrama & Passive Protoganists 00:01:31 – What is Melodrama? 00:38:06 – The Handmaid's Tale 00:56:44 – Horror and Melodrama 01:00:35 – Marriage Story 01:15:18 – The Handmaid's Tale & Narrative Techniques 01:30:37 – Game of Thrones and Endings 01:33:20 – Melodrama & Endings 01:39:19 – Ladies in Black 02:13:47 – Stranger Things 02:31:52 – The Killing 02:38:23 – The Witcher 02:44:16 – Wrap Up: Passive & Still CharactersFILMS
LADIES IN BLACK (2018) — (w) Madeleine St John, Sue Milliken, Bruce Beresford (d) Bruce Beresford MARRIAGE STORY (2019) — (w) Noah Baumbach PETE'S DRAGON (2016) — (w) Toby Halbrooks, David Lowery (d) David Lowery MILDRED PIERCE (1945) — (w) Ranald Macdougall, James M Cain (d) Michael Curtiz JOKER (2019) — (w) Scott Silver, Todd Phillips (d) Todd PhillipsSHOWS
THE HANDMAID'S TALE 1x1 "Offred" — Reed Morano (d), Margaret Atwood (w) STRANGER THINGS — (w) Ross Duffer, Matt Duffer THE WITCHER — (w) Lauren Schmidt Hissrich LOST — (w) Jj Abrams, Damon Lindelof, Jeffrey LieberSCRIPTS
Study the script: MARRIAGE STORY (2019) — Noah Baumbach Study the script: JOKER (2019) — Scott Silver, Todd PhillipsRELATED EPISODES
DZ-52: Antagonists! 4 - vs Systems DZ-60: Unfilmables 1 - Engaging imagination DZ-61: Unfilmables 2 - Moments of Awe DZ-63: Tools for Better Dialogue 2 - Hook and Eye———
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Thu, 30 Apr 2020 - 68 - DZ LiVEsolation Annoucement
How does Draft Zero cope with lockdown?
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Facebook: http://facebook.com/draftzeropodcast/ Patreon: http://patreon.com/draftzero/ YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCIEz5b9FMNa7Tj8DkcJQWRADear DZ Listeners,
We hope you are all staying healthy and safe. Due this difficult time of lockdown, Chas and Stu have decided to "regularly" do special live-streamed episodes (via YouTube Live) of Draft Zero that we are calling LiVEsolation.
They different from (and in addition to) Draft Zero Classic™ as you'll be able to interact with us as we record: asking questions, prompting for clarification, and making observations that come part of the discussion. You'll also be able to see video of our us (👎) while also seeing video of the scripts and scenes we are discussing (👍). After they're streamed, recordings of the livestreams (including the chat!) will be on our YouTube channel for later viewing.
LiVEsolation episodes that we particularly like will also be cleaned up and put out through the traditional podcast feed… but not always. Because our priority is doing these regularly, they'll be looser - like a great live gig. We are aiming for once-a-week and at the same time… but that won't always be possible due to… well…life. We are also having special guests and will need to work around their schedules and timezones.
So how do you keep up wth our shifting schedule?
We recommend you like our page on Facebook. Our livestreams will be created as events so you know what streams we will be doing and when… in your timezone!
We are also making PUBLIC posts on our Patreon page (i.e. ones you don't have to pay for if you don't have the coin during these trying times), so if you follow us there you'll get something like an email newsletter with announcements about what's forthcoming. Oh, and if you are a Patreon you'll get priority access to the online chat (when appropriate) and also get to vote on forthcoming topics.
Meanwhile, Draft Zero Classic™ episodes will continue as scheduled. All of the above is in addition to what we already had planned, driven entirely by isolation and a need for community right now.
We hope to see you on the livestream soon!
— Stu and Chas.
Tue, 07 Apr 2020 - 67 - DZ-66: The Mandalorian and The Rise of Skywalker - Audience Knowledge vs Character Motivation
Listen to understand how fan service weaponizes external knowledge against character logic.
By Order 66: Chas and Stu are joined by special guest - filmmaker Mel Killingsworth - to talk all things Star Wars. Well. Focusing on The Mandalorian and The Rise of Skywalker and wherever else our tangents take us.
Our primary lens is look at how both shows handle "fan service" — but really its about how you handle character motivations when your audience has more knowledge than your characters, especially knowledge from outside the show itself. To that end, we discuss the characters of Poe, Rey, Kylo, and Palpatine in depth. We also discuss the Watchmen TV Show, Mindhunter, Jojo Rabbit, Snowtown and Zodiac.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:00 – Introduction 00:04:28 – Poe's Backstory 00:11:38 – The Mandalorian 00:23:00 – The Rise of Skywalker 00:24:15 – Rey Palpatine 00:38:15 – Palpatine's Plan 00:46:22 – Rey Skywalker 00:52:12 – Ben Solo - Depressive Demon Nightmare Boy 01:07:09 – Palpatine's Return & Watchmen 01:15:44 – Rose Tico 01:19:11 – Fake-Out Deaths 01:25:47 – The Mandalorian (Revisted) 01:30:32 – Wrap Up & Key LearningsFILMS
THE MANDALORIAN (2019) — (w) Jon Favreau STAR WARS: THE RISE OF SKYWALKER (2019) — (w) Jj Abrams, Chris Terrio, Jj Abrams, Chris Terrio, Derek Connolly, Colin Trevorrow (d) Jj AbramsLINKS
Read: Wikipedia - Fan Service Read: Jeanette Ng - The Rise of Skywalker: Memorabilia without Memory, a Misunderstanding of Hope Read: Film Crit Hulk - The Force Belongs To Us: THE LAST JEDI's Beautiful Refocusing of Star Wars———
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Tue, 17 Mar 2020 - 66 - DZ-65: Collaborating with a Director - The Snip
Listen if you are thinking of producing your own short film!
This episode, Chas steps down as co-host (kinda) and is interviewed by Stu as a guest, alongside director Ben Mizzi, about the short rom-com that Chas wrote and Ben directed & produced. The episode covers taking an idea from pitch to screen, working with a director, directing performance on the page, and marketing and distribution strategies for short films.
And if you want to watch THE SNIP (a 16 min rom com about a guy who gets a vasectomy without telling his wife) here it is: https://youtu.be/_iBdDFKqqbs
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
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CHAPTERS
00:00:20 – Introduction: The Snip 00:03:44 – Working With a Director 00:13:16 – How did you go from pitch to script? 00:22:21 – Short films and audience expectations 00:26:34 – What expectations can you have of the end product? 00:39:08 – How do you "direct" performance on the page? 00:46:00 – How do you direct performance from a writer? 00:52:21 – What are some marketing strategies for short films? 00:58:16 – What is your online release strategy?LINKS
YouTube: THE SNIP LISTEN: Screen Director with Jeremy Saunders on Key Art———
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